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商英教研室一复习二模板识记、积累&检查二如何制造亮点词语三如何制造亮点句型复习模板识记、积累&检查如何制造亮点词语1选用具体的词平时学习时，就要注意积累具体词，并使之成为活跃词汇。这样实战时，才能随手运用。goodfoodpktasty/freshfood原句：Noonesawthebankbeingbrokeninto.优化：Noonewitnessedthebankbeingbrokeninto.原句：Pleasetryourbesttohelpthisgirl,helphertopassthemostdifficultperiodinlife,andmakeherfinancialburdenlessandless.优化：Pleasetryourbesttohelpthisgirl,helphertopassthemostdifficultperiodinlife,andrelieveherfinancialburden.2注意区分近义词学习时，注意区分含义的微妙差异，从而在运用时，用词恰当。原句：Nuclearproliferationisalwaysthetopproblemtheparticipantshavetodiscussatthiskindofmeeting.→issueissue[atopicthatisoftendiscussedorarguedabout,especiallyasocialorpoliticalmatterthataffectstheinterestsofalotofpeople]尤指社会或政治方面的〕议题；争论的问题•Abortionisahighlycontroversialissue.堕胎是个很有争议的话题。pkproblem[asituationthatcausesdifficulties]I’vebeenhavingafewproblemswithmycar.3学会活用不同的词性汉语则较多使用动词、形容词，而英语中常用名词。所以，要想地道、制造亮点，要学会多用名词原句：Afterweobservedthemcarefullyandanalyzedthemcritically,wemayidentifytheconceptionsthatwillactuallycontributetothesocialdevelopment.优化：Throughcarefulobservationandcriticalanalysis…4恰当使用限定用语限定用语的使用可以使论述更加客观、适度，避免观点的绝对化，提高说服力和可信度。常见的限定词：mainly,generally,ingeneral,typically,mostly,almost,forthemostpart;may,maybe,perhaps,probably;sometimes,tosomeextent,tosomedegree…亮点词语改写练习1.I’dliketomakeeveryefforttoletmorepeopleknowtheideathatwasteisdisgraceful,andcallonallmyschoolmatestofightagainstwaste.(用更具体的词)2.I’msureyouwillsoonfindagoodcandidatefortheposition.(用更具体的词)3.Peoplewhoaregoodatdealingwithsocialrelationsadmittheirmistakes,andtaketheirshareofblame.(用介词短语改写)如何制造亮点句型长句短句搭配使用在实际写作中,一味地采用长句或短句都是不可取的,要长短句交替使用。开头&结尾：用长句，吸引阅卷老师注意力正文：一般来说,写作中是以简单句为基础,适当配以并列句和复合句。1.长句的用法长句含有许多修饰语,适合表达准确而复杂的思想,解释观点或理论,描写细致的事物。写作时,考生要注意前后句子之间是否存在联系,善于发现各简单句之间的关联,用恰当的连接方式(esp并列、从句、介词短语、非谓语动词短语)将简单句连接起来,组成准确地道的复杂长句,增加文章的气势。原句:Naturalresourcesareverylimited.Theywillbeexhaustedinthenearfuture.Itisnottrue.Butitbecomesamajorconcernaroundtheworld.Thisisawidelyacceptedfact.优化:Itiswidelyacceptedfactthatthereisamajorconcernaroundtheworldfortheexhaustionoflimitednaturalresourcesinthenearfuture,thoughitisunlikelytobetrue.学会使用并列结构平行结构指的是将结构相同或相似、意义并重、语气一致的语言成分并行排列的一种修辞手法。这种结构层次清晰、语意顺畅,能够起到加强语气、增强表达效果的作用。原句:Thisphenomenon,inmyopinion,hasupgradedthequalityofpeople’slife.Andithasalsoimprovedthevalveofconsumptionofourmodernsociety优化：Thisphenomenon,inmyopinion,hasnotonlyupgradedthequalitypeople’slifebutalsoimprovedthevalveofconsumptionofourmodernsociety学会使用介词短语汉语中几乎较少用介词短语，而英语中较多。此外，介词短语简洁有力，可以极大地增强文章的表现力原句：Piratedproductsoftencostmuchlessthantheoriginalones,sotheyenjoyunbeatableadvantageinpricethoughtheirqualityisrelativelypoor.优化：…despitetheirrelativelypoorquality.学会使用非谓语动词短语原句:Manypeoplegetupearlytojogalongcountrylanes,orinordertoobservethewonderofnature.Andsomealsojustwatchthesunrise.优化:Manypeoplegetupearlytojogalongcountrylanes,toobservethewonderofnature,orjusttowatchthesunrise.2.短句的用法长句固然能表达出复杂而缜密的思想,但如果片面追求复杂句式,华而不实,反而会成为表达的累赘。因此,写作中句子的长短应根据表达的需要,有话则长,无话则短。短句比较简洁、明快、有力,适合陈述重要的事实或想法。短句不仅指句子长度较短,也指句子结构精炼。原句:Manyautomobilepartsthataremadeofplasticsandothersyntheticmaterialsdonotlastlong.优化:Manyautomobilepartsmadeofplasticsandothersyntheticmaterialsdonotlastlong.★从句适当变换→非谓语动词短语非谓语动词包括:动词不定式、动名词、现在分词和过去分词。有时候我们可以适当使用非谓语动词短语代替从句,这样就能够在有限的空间内容纳更多的信息,使句子结构紧凑、逻辑严谨。原句:Itmustberealizedthatpeopleshouldbecautiouswhentheydecidewhichbookstheyshouldchoosetoreadsinceiftheyreadbadbooks,itwillbetimewastingandharmful优化:Itmustberealizedthatpeopleshouldbecautiouswhendecidingwhichbookstoreadsincereadingbadbooksistime-wastingandharmful原句:Becauseoneofmyparentsislaidoff,myfamilycan’tpossiblyaffordallmyexpensesatcollege优化：Withoneofmyparentsbeinglaidoff,myfamilycan’tpossiblyaffordallmyexpensesatcollege3.会运用插入语插入语有时表达说话者的态度和看法,有时起强调的作用,有时是为了引起对方的注意,有时起转移话题或说明事由的作用,有时还可以承上启下,使句子衔接得更紧密。写作中常用到的插入语包括:副词和副词短语:indeed(的确),surely(无疑),however(然而),frankly(坦率地说),obviously(显然),naturally(自然地),luckily/happilyforsb.(算某人幸运),fortunately(幸好),strangely(奇怪),briefly(简单地说),personally(依个人之见)。形容词或形容词短语:true(真的),funny(真可笑),needlesstosay(不用说),mostimportantofall(最为重要),worsestill(更糟糕的),evenbetter更好)介词短语:inconclusion(总之),inaword(简而言之),inshortinbrief(简而言之),ingeneral(一般说来),Inasense(在某种意义上),Inone'sview(在某人看来),Inone'sopinion(按照某人的看法),infact(事实上),atfirst(首先),inaddition(此外),ofcourse(当然),toone'ssurprise(使某人惊奇的是),toone'sregret(使某人遗憾的是),forexample(例如),onthecontrary(相反),inotherwords(换句话说),ontheotherhand(然而)。分词短语:strictlyspeaking(严格地说),considering/taking…intoconsideration(考虑到,鉴于),judgingfrom(根据……判断)。不定式短语:tobesure(无疑),tosumup(概括地说),totellthetruth(说实话),tobefrank/tobehonest(说实在的,老实地说),tomakemattersworse(更糟的是),tostartwith/tobeginwith(首先,第一)。原句:Ithinkthatcomputergamescanalsodosomegoodtoyoungpeople.优化:Computergames,inmyopinion,canalsodosomegoodtoyoungpeople.原句:Theabove-mentionedshowthatitisnodoubtthatcollegestudentsshouldoftenattendsportsactivities.优化:Consideringtheabove-mentioned,itisnodoubtthatcollegestudentsshouldoftenattendsportsactivities.4.倒装句和强调句适当穿插什么是倒装句句子成分在句子中都有一定的位置,但有时可以把某些句子成分前后倒置,以达到突出强调的作用。英语中倒装主要有两种:全部倒装和部分倒装.全部倒装是指主语和谓语完全倒置,常用于记叙或描写。部分倒装是指只将助