Writing English Composition

WritingEnglishComposition通城县隽水寄宿中学卢细华----SavingtheEarthwritingCompareAwithB,whichisbetter?Why?Nowadays,wepeoplelovehikingverymuch.Ithinkhikingisveryimportanttous.Whydoesitsayso?Thatisbecauseweareweakerandweakerunderthepressureofworkorstudytasks.Hikingprovideusachancetobuildourbodiesstrongandmakeushealthy.Whenwearehiking,wecanmakemorefriendsandlearnfromeachother.Hikingcanmakeusgetclosetonatureandmaketheenvironmentmorebeautiful.Italsocanhelpushavearelaxinglifeandlivehappily.Sowhydon’twegohikingasmuchaspossiblewhenwearefree?A篇CompareAwithB,whichisbetter?Why?Nowadays,wepeoplelovehikingverymuch.Ithinkhikingisveryimportanttous.Whydoesitsayso?First,thatisbecauseweareweakerandweakerunderthepressureofworkorstudytasks.Hikingprovideusachancetobuildourbodiesstrongandmakeushealthy.Second,whenwearehiking,wecanmakemorefriendsandlearnfromeachother.Third,hikingcanmakeusgetclosetonatureandmaketheenvironmentmorebeautiful.Fourth,italsocanhelpushavearelaxinglifeandlivehappily.Sowhydon’twegohikingasmuchaspossiblewhenwearefree?B篇习作演练(15分)随着经济的快速发展，中国发生了巨大的变化，但我们也遇到许多问题。请你根据表格内的要点提示，以Savingtheearth为题写一篇短文，列举人类的不明智之举，以及导致的问题，并且针对问题提出解决办法。人类的不明智之举1，乱扔垃圾2，乱伐树木3，排放废物★pour,waste导致的问题1，土地沙化2，河水变脏3，空气质量变差4，全球气温升高★desert,temperature,rise你的建设合理化的建设至少一条要求：1，必须包含所有提示信息，词数在80左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数；2，意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；3，请勿使用真实姓名、校名及提示信息以外的地名。SavingtheEarthAstimegoesby,manismakingtheearthsick._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________认真审题1,Whatcontentsshouldbewritten?①现象Phenomenon(1.throwrubbisheverywhere2.cutdowntrees3.pourwasteinto…）②influences(4.Changeintodesert5.Waterandairdirty6.Thetemperatureisrising…)③opinions(1.Wehadbetter…2.Wehaveonlyoneearth.)2,Whatlinkingwordswillbeused?what'sworse,also,Asaresult,notonly…butalso…,so3,Howmanywordsshouldbewritten?About80words.列出提纲，画写作导图(makeawritingmindmap)Youropinions(1.Wehadbetter…2.Wehaveonlyoneearth.)现象Phenomenon(1.throwrubbisheverywhere2.cutdowntrees3.pourwasteinto…）influenceInmyopinion,Weshould…We’dbetter…Ithink/believe…4.Changeintodesert5.Waterandairdirty6.Thetemperatureisrising…几点建议：1.注意标点和字母大小写.2.注意句子的结构正确。3.注意恰当使用关联词(thelinkingwords)。本篇文章应分为几段，每段都写什么？应选用哪种时态？第几人称？需要用到哪些句式结构？请构思：Correctthecompositionbyyourself!1，Exchangeyourarticleswithanothergroup,thenunderlinethegoldensentencesandcirclethemistakes.2，Scorethecomposition.评分标准（Writingscorestandard）档次评分范围要求五13-15能写出全部要点，行文连贯，语言基本无误，完全达到写作要求。四10-12能写出全部要点，行文基本连贯，语言有少量错误，基本达到写作要求。三7-9能写出大部分要点，语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意。二4-6能写出大部分要点，语言错误多，未达到写作要求。一0-3只写出一、二个句子，语言错误多,抄袭其他内容，所写内容无法看清者一律给0分。Correctthemistakesinwriting1,“汉语式”英语2,时态的误用3,用词不当4，修饰语错位5，结构不完整6，逻辑关系混乱不清7，词性误用8，指代不清9，综合性语言错误(大写字母、拼写、主位一致、标点、冠词、名词单复数…）OnepossibleversionSavingtheEarthAstimegoesby,manismakingtheearthsick.Peoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Alsotheycutdownmanytrees,whichdoesgreatharmtoourenvironment.What’sworsetheypourwasteintotherivers.Asaresult,richlandisbecomingdesert.Thewaterandairaregettingdirtieranddirtier.Evenworse,thetemperatureisrising.Sowemustdoeverythingwecantosaveourearth.It’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironment.Stoppouringwastewaterandproducingterriblegas.Wehadbetterwalk,rideabikeortakeasubwaytoworkinsteadoftakingabusorataxi.Wehaveonlyoneearth.Savingtheearthistosaveushumanbeings.1.Beforewriting,readthetopicrequirementcarefully,thenmakeawritingoutline/map.2.Whilewriting,useEnglishexpressionsasoftenaspossible.3.Afterwriting,correctyourwritingagainandagain,makeitcorrect、fluentandneat.Sometipsforyou!HomeworkA：继续改写本节课作文，使它更加完美。B：“保护环境，人人有责”，请以“Howtobeagreenerperson”为题写一篇80字左右的短文。从身边小事做起，谈谈如何做一个环保者。T谢谢观看HANKYOU!