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•Task1最近中央电视台派出多名记者在全国各地做了一次全民调查，主题就是“你幸福吗？”你的好友Jim看了这则新闻调查，由于生活琐事他感到心烦意乱，向你发邮件询问如何能使自己感到幸福，假设你是李华，请写一封邮件回复Jim，并提出你的建议。•注意：•词数：不少于120个；•邮件的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。•DearJim,•____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________•Yours•LiHua~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~二、各档次的给分范围和要求第五档：（21-25分）•很好地完成了试题规定的任务。•对题中所提供的信息进行了恰当的描述，清楚地表达了自己的观点.•语法结构和词汇选用恰当、丰富。•有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。第四档：（16-—20分）•较好地完成了试题规定的任务。•对题中所提供的信息进行了描述，表达了自己的观点。•应用的语法结构和词汇能基本满足任务的要求。•语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。•第三档（11-—15分）•基本完成了试题规定的任务。•能描述题目中的信息，表达了自己的观点。•有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。•应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。12大错误主要指审题不清导致出现内容偏题、时态错误、人称错误及使用中式英语。丢分原因“小错误”主要是反映在个别单词拼写错误、形容词、动词、名词、介词、短语等使用不准确，数、人称前后不一致，标点符号乱用等。单词拼写错误Happinesslisten缺少动词thebestwaytobecomehappyistogettogetherwithpositivepeople.Remembernottostayinaplacealone.youcanlistentomusictorelaxyourself.Idon’tagreewithit.混淆及物与不及物动词名词、动词、代词等错用Wecanexpressourselvesviewsfreely.Wecanexpress(ourownviews)ourselvesfreely.I’msorrytohearthatyouarepainful.Youwillfindyouhavealreadyforgottenit.前后不一致Everyonewantshappiness.healthyeatingandagoodsleepisagoodwaytomakeyouinhighspirits.1.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.2.Earlytobedandearlytorisemakesamanhealthy,wealthyandwise.名词单复数问题Youshouldknowthatalotofchildrenarehungrynowintheworld.Readingbookscancheeryouup.ChinglishMysuggestionsaboutdealingwiththeproblemareasfollows.Happinessisalwaysaroundus,soweshouldlookforhappinessinanactiveway.…,you’dbetterhelpothersasoftenaspossible.遵循三原则语言第一位（语言高级、书写规范）内容第二位（要点齐全、句子准确）结构第三位（文章分段，结构紧凑）summary一篇好文章的标准：美化作文要强化“语法、修辞”两个概念语言第一位（语言高级、书写规范）一、单词不如短语棒hasastrongdesirefor2.Helpingothersisimportantinourlife.Everyone___________________happiness.1.Everyonewantshappiness.Helpingothersis_________________________inourlife.ofgreatimportancebeanxious/eager/hungry/thirstyfor;hunger/longfor二、主动不如被动巧2.Youcanfindhappinessbyhelpingothers.canbefound1.Theirpositiveattitudescanaffectus.We___________________theirpositiveattitudes.canbeaffectedbyHappiness_______________byhelpingothers.三、陈述不如倒装妙1.Timeissopreciousthatwecan’twasteit.2.Notonlytheybutalsoyoufeelhappy.Theyfeelhappy,and_________you.sodoSopreciousis______________timethatwecan’twasteit.四、从句不如分词傲1.Ifyoulaughmore,youwillfeelhappier.______________,youwillfeelhappier.Laughingmore2.Whenyoufeelunhappy,you’dbetterlistentosomelightmusic.___________________,you’dbetterlistentosomelightmusic.(When)Feelingunhappy三、陈述不如倒装妙二、主动不如被动巧四、从句不如分词傲一、单词不如短语棒内容第二位（要点齐全、句子准确）•为防止遗漏内容要点，可在原题上标出记号。•不出现中文，不用汉语拼音。不生造中国式的英语。尽量用你听过的话及读过的句子来写。•不要简单重复同一句子。结构第三位（文章分段，结构紧凑）Remembertousegoodtransitions.1．火眼金睛细审题:第一要审文体,然后审格式,再确定好基本时态，还要注意人称的使用。2．列出要点免遗漏：细读信息和要求，标上序号列要点，生词提示切记用。3．妙笔生花连成篇：用好关联词、连接性副词和短语4.耐心细致做复查：①层次清楚②突出主题句；③写好首尾句；④恰当使用连接词⑤书写工整，字数合格。应试点睛StepsofwritingagoodarticleMyadvice:Read,readandreadtolearndecentEnglish.ReadingaloudeverymorningwillmakeyourEnglishfluentandperfect.ReadingaloudeverymorningmakesyourEnglishfluentandperfect.Task2:低碳生活，人人有责。请你说说，在我们的实际生活中，怎样通过实际行动来减少二氧化碳的排放。提示：低碳生活lowcarbonlifestyle词数：不少于120个；PleasecompleteTask2andbetteryourcompositionafterclass.