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Warmlywelcometoourschool!江苏省上冈高级中学仲勇Goodafternoon,everyone,OnthemorningofApril29,2007,from10:00to11:00,hundredsofmillionsofstudentsfromprimary,middleschoolsanduniversitiesalloverChinajoinedinanationalstudentsportsprogram.ElevenmillionstudentsinJiangsutookanactivepartinthisprogram.TheMinistryofEducationcallsonstudentstoexerciseforanhoureveryday,inthehopethattheywillhavegoodhealthtoworkfiftyyearsandenjoytheirwholelife.Personally,Ithinkit'sagoodideaforussenior3studentstohavedailyexercise.Althoughwetakeanhouradayforecercise,itiswellworthit.Takingexercisehelpsbuildupourbodyandkeepaclearmind.Therefore,wecanworkmoreefficiently.Thankyou!joinedintookanactivepartininthehopethatPersonallyAlthoughTherefore0７年江苏卷书面表达范文callsoniswellworthbuildupGoodlisteningcanalwaysshowrespect,promoteunderstanding,andimproveinterpersonalrelationship.Manypeoplesuggestthatparentsshouldlistenmoretotheirchildren,sotheywillunderstandthembetter,andfinditeasytonarrowthegenerationgap;teachersshouldlistenmoretotheirstudents,thentheycanmeettheirneedsbetter,andplacethemselvesinagoodrelationshipwiththeirstudents;studentsshouldlistenmoretotheirclassmates,thustheywillhelpandlearnfromeachother,andafriendshipislikelytobeformed.WhatIwanttostressisthateachofusshouldlistenmoretoothers.Showyourrespectandneverstopotherstilltheyfinishtheirtalk;showyouareinterestedbyasupportivesilenceoraknowingsmile;beopen-mindedtodifferentopinionseventhoughyoudon’tlikethem.Inaword,goodlisteningcanreallyenableustogetclosertoeachother.promoteimprovefinditeasytonarrowthegenerationgapthusWhatIwanttostressisthatInaword0８年江苏卷书面表达范文Howtopolishupyourwriting书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求第五档（21-25分）完全完成了试题规定的任务:准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式所致；具备较强的语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（16-20分）完成了试题规定的任务:比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（11-15分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。能说出短文的基本内容，但逻辑关系较混乱，要点有遗漏，没有写自己的认识应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求有一些语法结构和词汇的错误，但不影响理解应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。Thepolishedpoints:A.较高级词汇B.丰富的语法结构C.恰当使用过渡词或过渡句,使文章结构紧凑;D.段落的优化1.Iusedtolikereadingandwritingpoemsatmiddleschool.2.SuddenlyIthoughtofagoodidea.3.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.Iusedtotakedelightin/befondofreadingandwritingpoemsatmiddleschool.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurredtome.Agoodideasuddenlystruckme.Youhavenotrouble/difficultyinfindingmyhouse.Youcanfindmyhousewithoutanydifficulty.较高级的词汇、短语•4.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.•5.Inourschool,therearetwenty–sixclassrooms.•6.Theoldphotomademethinkofmyhappychildhood.Thankstothegoodweather,ourjourneywascomfortable.Ourschoolismadeupoftwenty–sixclassrooms.Ourschoolconsistsoftwenty–sixclassrooms.Theoldphotoremindedmeofmyhappychildhood.较高级的词汇、短语1.Iusedtotakedelightin/befondofreadingandwritingpoemsatmiddleschool.2.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurredtome.Agoodideasuddenlystruckme.3.Youhavenotrouble/difficultyinfindingmyhouse.Youcanfindmyhousewithoutanydifficulty.4.Thankstothegoodweather,ourjourneywascomfortable.5.Ourschoolismadeupoftwenty-sixclassrooms.Ourschoolconsistsoftwenty-sixclassrooms.6.Theoldphotoremindedmeofmyhappychildhood.较高级的词汇、短语•1.Whensheheardhehaddied,shewentpalewithsorrow.•2.IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeast.Atthattime,anelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.丰富的语法结构Onhearingthebadnewsofhisdeath,shewentpalewithsorrow.IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeastwhenanelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.丰富的语法结构•3.TheflatisinabuildingonFangcaoStreet.ItisnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.•4.Heissurprisedthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.TheflatisinabuildingonFangcaoStreet,whichisnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.丰富的语法结构•5.Wecanachieveourgoalonlyinthisway.•6.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.Itwasnotuntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaperthatheknewwhathadhappened.Notuntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaperdidheknowwhathadhappened.较高级的语法结构1.Onhearingthebadnewsofhisdeath,shewentpalewithsorrow.2.IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeastwhenanelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.3.TheflatisinabuildingonFangcaoStreet,whichisnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.4.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.5.Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.6.Itwasnotuntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaperthatheknewwhathadhappened.Notuntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaperdidheknowwhathadhappened.使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇⑴排序关系⑵并列关系⑶举例关系⑷转折关系⑸因果关系⑹归纳总结⑺递进关系first;firstly;second;secondly;lastbutnotleastand;too;aswellas;alongwith;togetherwithforexample;forinstance;like;suchas;astobut;however;while;though;onthecontrarybecause;since;thanksto;asaresult/consequence(of);thus;thereforeinaword;inshort;tosumup;inconclusionwhat’smore;besides;tomakemattersworse;what’sworse;worsestill;furthermoreThisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschange