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如何让你的作文“靓”起来石河子第二中学王慧杰HowtopolishyourcompositionLearninggoals1.Topolishwritingbyusingadvancedwordsandsentencescorrectlyandefficiently.(A)(B)19thCPCNationalCongressstartedonOctober18thinBeijing.ItisonOctober18ththat19thCPCNationalCongressstartedinBeijing.(强调句)Task1:Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?(A)(B)Heisahandsomeboy.Healwaysappearsinmydream.Heisahandsomeboywhoalwaysappearsinmydream.(定语从句)Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?(A)(B)Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?ShemastersbothEnglishandChinese.ShehasagoodcommandofbothEnglishandChinese.高级短语(A)(B)Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?Theirhomeworkwasfinished,theyfelthappy.Withtheirhomeworkfinished,theyfelthappy.(with复合结构)(A)(B)Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?(高级词汇)ThelittlegirldidagoodperformanceinChinesePoetryConference.ThelittlegirldidawonderfulperformanceinChinesePoetryConference.Suroundedbyfans,ZhaoLiyinghadaphototaken.Zhaoliyingwassuroundedbyfans.ZhaoLiyinghadaphototaken.Whichsentenceisbetter?Why?(A)(B)(非谓语现在分词作伴随状语)Wecanuseadvancedwordsandsentencestomakeourwritingmoreattractive.PolishourwritingadvancedwordsadvancedwordsandsentencesadvancedsentencesadvancedwordsandexpressionsTwowaysWay1:Advancedwordsandexprssions(1):Advancedexpressions.高级短语Iwantaniphone8.I_________aniphone8.beeager/dyingfor;haveastrongdesirefor;lookforwardto;(2):Advancedwords.高级词汇Itisgoodtogoforaspringouting.Itis______togoforaspringouting.(enjoyable,beneficial,worthwhile)longforwonderful(3).Transformationofpartofspeech词性转换Itisimportanttohaveashortbreakfromdailyroutine.Itisof_________________tohaveashortbreak...importance(4).Avoidrepeating避免重复Somestudentsthinkthatitsworthwhiletogoforspringouting,whileothersthinkthatitisawasteoftime.→Somestudents__________________thatitisworthwhiletogoforaspringouting,whileothers_________________thatitisawasteoftime.argue/insist/believeclaim/supposeWay1:advancedwordsandphrases;transformationofpartofspeech;avoidrepeating；Task2:Beautifywordsandexpressionsbyusingwords.1.Hewassoangrythatshehadforgottenhisbirthday.Hewasso________thatshehadforgottenhisbirthday.2.Ashortbreakfromroutinewillbenefitourstudy.Ashortbreakfromroutineis____________ourstudy.Ashortbreakfromroutineis____________ourstudy.3.Theyarenotsatisfiedwiththeiracademicresults.Theiracademicresultsarebeyondtheir__________.4.Itisobviousthatarefreshedmindwillhandleyourschoolworkmoreefficiently.___________,arefreshedmindwillhandleyourschoolworkmoreefficiently.beneficialtosatisfactionannoyedObviouslyofbenefit5.Hespendsallhissparetimeinreading.6.TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourlife.7.Helikesplayingcomputergames.growinterestedin;haveapreferencefor;haveanaffectionfor;bekeenon;HedevotesallhissparetimetoreadingTheInternetisplayinganincreasinglyimportantpartinourlife.Heisfondofplayingcomputergames.8.WeshoulduseeveryminutetostudyEnglish.Weshouldmakeuseof/takeadvantageofeveryminutetostudyEnglish.9.TheInternetletsuscommunicatewitheachotherconveniently.TheInternetenablesustocommunicatewitheachotherconveniently.TheInternetmakesitpossibleforustocommunicatewitheachotherconveniently.10.PlentyofmemoryworkisundoubtedlyhelpfultoEnglishstudy.PlentyofmemoryworkwillundoubtedlycontributetoEnglishstudy.强调句倒装句with复合结构定语从句名词性从句非谓语动词感叹句…Way2:AdvancedsentencesHowmanyadvancedsentenceshaveyoulearned？句式多样，文章增“靓”被动句Task3:Beautifysentences：Discusswithyourpartnerin2ms.1.Ilikethenovel.Itscoverisfascinating.(定从)Ilikethenovelwhosecoverisfascinating.Shealwayssingswhilewalkingherdog.2.Shealwayssingswhilesheiswalkingherdog.（状从省略）3.Youcansolvethisproblemonlyinthisway.（倒装句）Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.Way2:AdvancedsentencesAslongas/IfwestudyharderatEnglish,weareboundtomakeprogress.5.Heisahelpfulteacher!（感叹句）Whatahelpfulteacherheis!/Howhelpfulateacherheis.6.WestudyharderatEnglish.Weareboundtomakeprogress.(条件状语从句)4.Myunclewasdrunk.Hesoonfoundthecaroutofhiscontrol.(so…that句式)Myunclewassodrunkthathesoonfoundthecaroutofhiscontrol.8.Whenhespoke,hefeltmoreandmoreexcited.（用themore…themore句型）Themorehespoke,themoreexcitedhefelt.9.Shecameintotheclassroom.Shewassmiling.Shecameintotheclassroom,smiling,7.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调句型itbenotuntil被强调部分that….)Itwasnotuntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaperthatheknewwhathadhappened.(非谓语现在分词作伴随状语)Withthedifficulttaskfinished,Ifeltproud.10.Thedifficulttaskwasfinished.Ifeltproud(with复合结构)11.AlthoughI’mweak,Iwillmakeefforts.(表语as主系倒装)WeakasIam,Iwillmakeefforts.12.Wemusttakemeasurestostoppollution.(被动句)Measuresmustbetakentostoppollution.Task4:Checkyourself.Polishaparagraphbyusingyouradvancedwordsandsentencesinyourgroupin5msOurschoolisamodernschool.Itmakesmeveryproud.Manystudentstrytheirbesttobeadmittedtokeyuniversities.IamastudentinN2seniorhighschool.IntheschoolIlearnalotfrommyteachers.Ididn’tknowhowtostudyEnglish,untilIwastoldbythem.IcanwritebetterwritingsonlyIntheway.AlthoughmyEnglishispoor,Ihaveconfidenceinmyself.Suggestedanswers:readitanddiscusswithyourpartners.1.（定语从句）:Ourschoolisamodernschool,whichmakesmeveryproud.2.Alotof/aquantityof/agreatnumberofstudentssparenoefforttobeadmittedtokeyunive