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10月考读后续写Steps步骤：AReadingBPredictingCWritingcharactersplotthemesortoutkeyinformationproperlanguageJack------Linda----•Jack'swife•needmoneyforoperation•aclerkatthelocalbank•planatheft(n偷盗)HowdidJacksteal?Didhesucceed?Thenextday,hewenttoworkasusual.Everythingseemednormal:hejokedwithhisworkmatesandhelpedhisclientsashealwaysdid.Butnoonenoticedthathehadbroughtabiggersuitcasetowork,insteadofthesmallonehealwayscarried.At5:00pm,thebankclosed,andtheclerksandtheguardshadallgonehome.However,atthatmoment,Jackwasinthebathroom,andtheguardsdidn'tnoticehim,ofcourse.Whenthenoisescomingfromthestreetwerereplacedbysilenceandeverythingturneddark,Jackcameoutfromthebathroom.Hefirstcutthelinesofthealarmsandmonitorswithtoolsfromhisnewsuitcase.Hewasalltoofamiliarwiththeequipmentsincehehadbeenworkingtherefor8yearsandhadbeenstudyingthesecuritysystemforthepast30days.Usingaspecialkeyandsomeothertools,hetheneasilyopenedthedoorsofthesafes.Thebank'ssecuritysystemwasn'tverygood,whichallowedJacktotakealotofmoney.Severalminuteslater,Jackleftthebankwithaheavybagfilledwithmoney.HowdidJacksteal?Didhesucceed?Thenextday,hewenttoworkasusual.Everythingseemednormal:hejokedwithhisworkmatesandhelpedhisclientsashealwaysdid.Butnoonenoticedthathehadbroughtabiggersuitcasetowork,insteadofthesmallonehealwayscarried.At5:00pm,thebankclosed,andtheclerksandtheguardshadallgonehome.However,atthatmoment,Jackwasinthebathroom,andtheguardsdidn'tnoticehim,ofcourse.Whenthenoisescomingfromthestreetwerereplacedbysilenceandeverythingturneddark,Jackcameoutfromthebathroom.Hefirstcutthelinesofthealarmsandmonitorswithtoolsfromhisnewsuitcase.Hewasalltoofamiliarwiththeequipmentsincehehadbeenworkingtherefor8yearsandhadbeenstudyingthesecuritysystemforthepast30days.Usingaspecialkeyandsomeothertools,hetheneasilyopenedthedoorsofthesafes.Thebank'ssecuritysystemwasn'tverygood,whichallowedJacktotakealotofmoney.Severalminuteslater,Jackleftthebankwithaheavybagfilledwithmoney.Withfullpreparation,Jackmanagedtostealalotofmoneywithoutbeingnoticed.wife;money;operation;suffering;thebank;theft;suitcase;theclerks;theguards;thesecuritysystemsortoutcharacters:place:others:wifethebank;money;operation;sufferingtheclerks;theguards;thesecuritysystem;theft;suitcaseParagraph1:AfterJackhadbeengonefromthebankforawhile,thealarms(警报器)begantoring.WasJackcaughtimmediately?•notverylikelyWhatwouldhappenafterthealarmsrang?•Thetheftcausedgreatattentionfrompeople.WhatwouldJackdo?Paragraph2:Butthemostunluckymanwasthemanagerofthebank,anoldman.Whywashethemostunluckyman?•Asamanagerofthebank,whatwouldhappentohim?•betoblame;beremovedfromthepositionHowdidJackfeel?•ashamed;guiltyWhat'stheresult?•Jack——tellthetruth;bepunished•Linda?Jack:•workasusual——feltguilty——tellthetruth——bepunishedmanager:•betoblame——beremovedfrom/befiredLinda:•besaved/die存在问题逻辑混乱，与上文不符脑洞乱开--Para.2，无视首句话信息人物关系不明，节外生枝缺乏常识——无视法制个别关键词理解不到位--alarm,manager,unlucky语言表达不清——几句话说不到重点；情节主线不清，顺序混乱；语言错误影响整体表达未明确说明manager的不幸结果Jack心安理得逃脱法网，不符合价值观Jack按理已经离开一段时间了，与上文不符情节基本清楚，符合基本逻辑，语言虽有错误，尚不影响整体表达。Paragraph1:AfterJackhadbeengonefromthebankforawhile,thealarmsbegantoring.Thepolicearrivedatthebankveryquickly,onlytofindnoonethere.Thenextdaywasareallyspecialdayforthetown,whichwasfilledwithnewspaperandTVreporterscoveringthestrangetheft.Theclerksatthebankwerebusydiscussingthecase,ofcourse,includingJack.Thepolicecouldonlypromisetocatchthethievesassoonaspossible,eventhoughnoclueshadbeenfoundyet.Paragraph2:Butthemostunluckymanwasthemanagerofthebank,anoldman.Heseemedtobetheonlypersontoblameandwasremovedfromhisposition.Atlast,withenoughmoneyforheroperation,Jack'swifewassaved.However,Jackfeltguiltyaboutthemanagerofthebank.Hecouldnotforgetwhathehaddonetotheoldman.Hisguiltdeepenedastimewentby.Finally,heturnedhimselfintothepoliceandacceptedhispunishment.