【冲刺第一弹】大学英语六级写作范文剖析

大学英语六级写作范文剖析（2008.6——2012.6）作者：蒋辰以下筛选2008年6月至2012年6月的CET6写作范文共12篇，从行文结构、句型用法、短语词组搭配等方面进行分析，旨在从中提炼CET6写作模板，并为读者提供写作分析与语篇精读的范例，还原应试英语的本来面目。文中标注规范：1、下划线表示是好句子或有重要的语法结构，可以把结构用到具体的语境中；加粗下划线是模板用句，大部分具有框架的性质，可以直接用。下划线最好都写写背背，尤其是加粗下划线。此项对记性和技术要求较高。2、波浪线表示出彩或需要注释的短语或词组，重在积累，不完全针对考试。如果记住了且在考试中碰到了类似的情境，可使用，此项对人品要求较高。3、整个字体加粗表示结构性短语，作为模板用词，可供参考。此项对copy能力要求较高。注：本资料仅限内部使用，不得擅自外传。版权所有，违者必究。2008年6月——WillE-booksReplaceTraditionalBooks?（现象说明型）1.随着信息技术的发展，电子图书越来越多2.有人认为电子图书会取代传统图书，理由是…3.我的看法【范文一】Recentdecadeshaveseentherapiddevelopmentofinformationtechnology.Asaresult,manyelectricinventions,includingE-book,havefoundtheirwayintooureverydaylifeandhavegainedincreasingpopularityamongcommonpeople.It’snowonderthatsomepeopleholdtheideathatE-bookwillreplacetraditionalbookssoonerorlaterbecauseE-bookhavevariousadvantagesoverthetraditionalones.Tostartwith,alltheE-bookcanbedownloadedfromtheInternetdirectly,mostofwhicharefreeofcharge,whilethetraditionalbooksinbookstoresaremuchmoreexpensive.What’smore,E-bookcanbestoredmoreeasilyinourcomputersandaremoreconvinientforpeopletocarryaround.Lastbutnottheleast,readingE-bookhasbecomeafashioninourlife,whichisparticularlyappealingtoouryoungpeople.AsfarasIamconcerned,nowadaystraditionalbooksarestilltheleadingmeansofreading.However,withfurtherdevelopmentofinformationtechnologyandthepopularityofcomputerandInternet,E-bookswillsurelytaketheplaceoftraditionalbooksinthenearfuture.一、结构：现象；原因；我的观点。二、句型用法：1、定语从句：......whichis...../......,mostofwhich.....2、区分wonder和doubt的句型：It'snowonderthat../There'snodoubtthat....3、with引导的状语从句三、短语与词组的用法1、避免重复使用：replace与taketheplaceof2008年12月——HowToImproveStudents'MentalHealth（对策类）1.大学生心理健康很重要2.为此，学校可以…3.我们自己应该…【范文一（推荐熟读或背诵）】Mentalhealthisbecominganincreasinglytroublesomeissueforundergraduates.Wecaneasilygetallkindsofinformationaboutcollegestudents’pressureoremotionalproblemsontheInternet.Solvingtheproblemneedscollaborativeeffortsbetweenuniversitiesandstudentsthemselves.Ontheonehand,authoritiesinuniversitiesplayacriticalroleinthesituation.Tobeginwith,schools,suchascollegesoruniversities,canprovidechancesforthestudentstoeasetheirtension.What’smore,somearephysicallystrong,butmentallyweakintermsofcopingwithdifficultsituations.Teachersmayhaveachancetofindtheminadvance.Besides,specialistsinthisfieldaretoberequiredtomakefullpreparationforcasesintime.Ontheotherhand,studentsshouldtrytofacetherealityandfigureoutthecausesofdepressionsothattheycanbetterunderstandit.Theyshouldalsolearnhowtoidentifyunhealthybehaviorsorthoughtsandmakechangesaccordingly.一、结构：1、大结构：现状；一方的对策；另一方的对策。2、小结构（第二段）：三点并列二、句型用法：1、动名词做主语：(Solvingtheproblem)needscollaborativeefforts....2、插入语：Tobeginwith,schools,suchascollegesoruniversities,canprovide......3、betodo结构：这里表示“应该”，另有“必须”、“将要”、“命中注定”之义。三、短语与词组的用法1、同义替换，尽量避免过多的低级词汇：issue比problem更正式，本例使用issue也是为了避免与本段第三行的problem重复。2、副词+动词：betterunderstandit=understanditbetter，但前面的表达更自然，读起来比较简洁。【范文二】Thereisnodoubtthatmentalhealthisofgreatimportancetocollegestudents.Nowadays,manystudentsincollegesufferfrommentalillness,whichseverelyaffectstheirlifeandstudy.Inviewoftheseriousnessofthesituation,effectivemeasuresmustbetakenbeforethingsgetworse.Dueattentionhastobepaidbycollegestostudents’mentalhealth.First,lecturesonpsychologicalhealthshouldbefrequentlygiventostudentstopreventproblemsfromhappening.Secondly,psychologicalclinicsshouldbesetuptoprovidetroubledstudentswithtimelyhelp.Ascollegestudents,weshouldkeepthechannelofcommunicationopenamongourselvesandbetweenusandourteachersandparents.Besides,incaseofmentalillness,weshouldnothesitatetogotopsychologicalcounselorsforhelp.Onlywiththesemeasurestakencanweexpectsoundgrowthofcollegestudents.一、结构：现状；一方的对策；另一方的对策。二、句型用法：1、Therebe结构：Thereisnodoubtthat....用于全文开头有点不自然。2、beof+名词：beofgreatimportance=important，更正式3、被动结构：Dueattentionhastobepaid.....将pay的宾语attention提前，强调attention.4、倒装结构：Onlywiththesemeasurestakencanweexpectsoundgrowthofcollegestudents.三、短语与词组的用法1、常用短语：1）providesb.withsth.providesthtosb2）prevent...from...附一：对比两篇范文个人认为，结构清晰是应试佳作的最重要特点，这一点上，范文一显然优于范文二。在句子上，两篇范均有美中不足之处，范文一句型虽主被动的变化，但句子不够漂亮，内容不充实，而范文二，同样有倒装和被动结构变化，但should用得太多，比较单一。附二：其它范文佳句1.theauthortiesconcernedshouldenhancetheawarenessthatmentalfitnessisveryimportanttocollegestudents.——后置定语concerned；enhancetheawareness；important可改为significant,salient,vital.2.Studentsshouldalsotakeanactivepartinhelpingthemselves.2009年6月——OntheImportanceofaName（观点对比类）1.有人认为名字很重要2.有人认为名字不重要3.你的看法【范文一】Isanameimportant?Tosomepeople,yes.Theystronglybelievethatanameisresponsibleforaperson’slife.Therefore,theytakeallthetrouble,tryingvariouswaystosearchwonderfulnamesforthemselvesortheirchildren,expectingthenameswouldworkmagicforagloriousfuture.Toothers,however,theanswerisNO.Accordingtothem,thenameisanothingbutalifelesscode.Beinglifeless,acodeispowerless,nottomentionitissocalled'magic'ofbringingapersonsuccess.Toachievesuccess,theysay,opportunitymaycount,andone'sowneffortsdefinitelycount,butanamethatsimplyfunctionasthewayofdistinguishingonefromanother,obviouslydon't.AsfarasIamconcerned,anameisimportantinasense.Aft