2016高考英语写作复习公开课

•平均分：•峰值：约15分17~19分最吃亏学生群：中等左右学生书面表达是提分最大的潜力股高考满分作文I’mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesinmylifesinceourhomeworkhasreduced.Beforethat,learningduringthedaywasverysimple.Havingclassanddoinghomeworkwastheonlythingweshoulddo.Intheevening,wealsohadalotofhomeworktodo.Wecouldnotgotobeduntil11:30.Nevertheless,sincereducingthelearningload,mylifehasbecomemuchmoreinteresting.Ioftenvisitmuseumsandcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmysparetime.Intheevening,IalsohavetimetowatchTVandreadnewspapers.Inolongerstayuplate;onthecontrary,Igotobedatabout10pm.Inshort,Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow.高考英语作文第五档(很好)要求:(21-25分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。①Shooting,originatedasameansofsurvival,developedintoasportonlyinthelate19thcentury.②Thesport,whichfirstappearedin1896,waseversuspendedduringthe1904and1928Games.③ItwasonlyfouryearsbeforethesportreturnedtotheOlympic.④However,notuntil1968werewomenfirstallowedtocompeteintheOlympicshooting.⑤Withthesportbecomingmoreandmorepopular,ithasgrownsteadilyfromjust3shootingeventsatthe1896OlympicGamesto17today.经典案例：广东08高考句子表达有何亮点？写作中复合句常见的错误1.只有从句，没有主句Thekeeperwhohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime,sohecouldkeepcalminthestorm.→Thekeeper,whohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime,couldkeepcalminthestorm.2.以逗号代替句号,把两个简单句当成一个句子②Theoldmanthoughtofhisson,tearscamedownfromhisface.①Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings,itismadeofglass.3.刻意使用从句，表达不自然ThereareoverfiftystudentsinthisschoolwhoaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday.→OverfiftystudentsinthisschoolaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday.①Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings,whichismadeofglass.②Theoldmanthoughtofhisson,withtearscomingdownfromhisface.4.过多地使用并列句组合信息②Weweredrivingoutintothecountry,andwesawourEnglishteacherridinginabus,andthebuswascrowded.①Itisabeautifulday,andthesunisshiningandabreezeisblowing.→Itisabeautifuldaywiththesunshiningandabreezeblowing.→Asweweredrivingoutintothecountry,wesawourEnglishteacherridinginacrowdedbus.MyEnglishLearning①ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.②Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish.③NowI’mdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish.④ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish,suchassomedifficultidioms.⑤Difficultasitis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.请看范例从上述例子同学们可以明白什么样的句子叫“规范的英语句子”。其实，“规范的英语句子”就是我们经常讲的三种句子：A)Simplesentence:Hearingthenews,hewashappy.B)CompoundsentenceA:HegavemeabookbutIforgottobringitbackhome.C)CompoundsentenceB:Whatheisdoinghasnothingtodowithme.=Whenheheardthenews,hewashappy.Hereare3waystomakesentences:I.巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：1)借助名词短语做同位语如：李立，男，19岁，1986年生；籍贯：广东。LiLi,aboyof19,wasborninGuangdongin1986.2)借助介词短语做定语如：李飞，男，10岁，棕色短发，身穿白色茄克。LiFeiisaten-year-oldboywithshortbrownhairandawhitejacket.如：有了Tom的帮助，我们很快就找到了他们的村子。WiththehelpofTom,wesoonfoundtheirvillage.4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语如：他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。Theyarestandingunderthebigtree,waitingforthepresident.3)借助介词短语做状语II.巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句：如：他给我钱，我不要。IwasjustwalkingdownthestreetcornerwhenIsawyou.如：我刚到拐角处，就见到你啦。HegavemealotmoneybutIrefused.III.用好从句和引导词，写出规范的复合句：1)名词性从句如：老师生气。原因：王力迟到。ThatWangLicamelatetoschoolmadetheteacherveryangry.2)定语从句如：中国，地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口众多、资源丰富。China,whichliesintheeastofAsia,isagreatcountrywithalargeareaandpopulationaswellasrichnaturalresources.3)状语从句如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。Iwasdeeplymovedbythis,becauseIknowLeiFengisstilllivinginourhearts.学会运用复合句和非谓语动词①Kateisanewstudent.②Shecomesfromanorthernprovince.③Shespeaksadialect.④Wefindithardtounderstandherdialect.Kate,anewstudentfromanorthernprovince,speaksadialectwhichwefindhardtounderstand.用一句话表达不是人人都能学好英语，小学生同时学汉语和英语反而会影响汉语学习。学会运用复合句和非谓语动词第一步：拆分成几个简单句①不是人人都能学好英语。②小学生同时学汉语和英语。③这会影响汉语学习。第二步：分别翻译这几个简单句①NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish.②ChildrenfromprimaryschoollearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime.③ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy.①NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish.②ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime.③ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy.第三步：合并句子ThatchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametimewillaffecttheirChinesestudybecausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish.①NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish.②ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime.③ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy.第三步：合并句子IfchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime,thiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy方法2：becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish.学会使用复合句和非谓语动词你来试试现象学生作文中出现很多错别字原因1.上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。2.每天有很多作业做，没有记住生字。参考词汇：错别字:wrongly-writtencharacters网络语言：weblanguage要求：1.用两句话表达表格内容2.两句话要有连贯性第一句（两个信息点）：1.学生作文中出现很多错别字2.（他们）上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。①Therearemanywrongly-writtencharactersinstudents’compositions.Thereasonwhytherearemanywrongly-writtencharactersinstudents’compositionisthattheyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline.合并句子：②Theyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline.1.Theyhavesomuchhomeworktodoeverydaythattheyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters第二句:1.每天有很多作业做2.没有记住生字。①Theyhavemuchhomeworktodoeveryday.2.Withsomuchhomeworktodo,theyfailtomemorizethenew