高中英语写作公开课

welcomeWritingByZhangHuiWhatmakesagoodessay?Ⅰ.Discussion感知典型范例——词汇层面1adj.聪明的、脑筋好的•clever•→wise•→smart•→bright•→intelligent感知典型范例——词汇层面2adj.令人惊奇的•surprising•→amazing•→astonishingexactlyusedandadvancedwords准确运用词汇并使用高级词汇(not…until)→1.He______comehere______yesterdayafternoon.2.Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.3.Itwasnotuntilyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.感知典型范例——句型层面1advancedsentencepatterns使用高级句型nogrammaticalmistakes没有语法错误Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.他昨天下午来的。didn’tuntil感知典型范例——段落层面Ithink,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentsthoughwearebusy.Oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemlivehappily.Wecanbuildaharmonioussocietyonlywhenallofuscarefortheaged.AsfarasIamconcerned,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentshoweverbusyweare.What’smore,oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemliveahappylife.Onlywhenallofuscarefortheagedcanwebuildaharmonioussocietyproperlinkwords使用恰当的连接词varioussentencepatterns用较丰富的句式感知典型范例——篇章层面1卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得8分感知典型范例——篇章层面2字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。——篇章层面3neatandclean卷面整洁wellorganized结构合理thecontentiscomplet内容要完整Conclusion:Whatmakesagoodessay?1.neatandclean卷面整洁2.completecontent内容完整3.wellorganized结构合理4.exactlyusedandadvancedwords准确运用词汇并使用高级词汇5.properlinkingwords使用恰当的连接词6.varioussentencepatterns用较丰富的句式假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画，同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Ⅱ.Pre-writing(2013全国卷)注意：1.词数100左右2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语和介绍语已为你写好。DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaⅡ.Pre-writing(teamwork)Task1:DecidethepersonandtenseTask2:DecidethestructureTask3:WritedownthekeywordsandsentencepatternsTask1:person(人称)tense（时态）ThefirstpersonThepresentandthefuturetensePerson:Tense:DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaBodyTask2:DecidethestructureBeginningEnding假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画。同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Task2:Decidethestructure告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画。同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Body假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画，同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Task3:writedownthekeywords开会，带去中国画。接机。航班号到达戴眼镜a.tohaveameeting/conferenceb.bringsb.sth.c.Chinesepaintingd.domeafavore.pickhimupf.flightnumberg.arriveath.wearglasses…Task3:thekeywordsTask3:Sentencepatterns•I’mwritingtotellyouthat…•I’dlikeyouto…•Wouldyouplease…?•Iwonderifyoucan…?•…必要的连接词表示递进：besides,aswell,inaddition表示比较：justlike,inthesameway,onthecontrary表示因果：sothat,since,inorderto/that表示强调：aboveall,withoutanydoubt表示总结：inaword,inshort,inconclusionⅢ.while-writing(15mins)Pleasewritedowntheletterin15minutes.Youcanusethefollowingstructure.DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthat___________________________,and__________________________.Also,I’dlikeyoutodomeafavor.Wouldyouplease_____________________________________________________________________________?Thankyouinadvance!______________isCA985,and________________11:30am.August6.Myuncleis_______________________________.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaⅣ.post-writingReviseyourcompositionsinpairs.Then,makeevaluationsforhimorher.写作过程评价标准表写作过程评估表注意：达到8至10项标准为优秀，6至8项为良好；4至6项为合格；4以下为需努力。□大、小写以及标点符合完全正确；□所要涉及的词汇以及单词的拼写完全正确；□固定搭配、代词、名词的数、格以及冠词的选择基本正确□句子结构符合需要，能准确应用简单句的5种基本句型;□句子结构安排合理，符合英语习惯，无汉语思维来安排句子结构；□根据需要会使用正确的时态、语态。时态、语态、概念、结构清楚；□有一定遣词组句，将基本句型串联成文的能力；□会使用恰当的连词、情态动词、修饰语，使句子前后连贯、文章顺通流畅；□能使用复杂句型及多种从句;□内容的真实性、趣味性、实用性以及写作的创新得到了展现。被评价者姓名_______班级_____日期_________授课教师________评价内容________评价:优秀□良好□合格□需努力□评价者建议：被评价者反馈及打算：评价者签名：PresentationDearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthatmyuncleLiMingisgoingtoyourcityforaconference,andI’veaskedhimtobringyoutheChinesepaintingyou’veaskedforbefore.Also,I’dlikeyoutodomeafavor.WouldyoupleasemeetmyuncleattheairportandtakehimtohishotelsincethisisthefirstvisittotheU.S.?Thankyouinadvance!HisflightnumberisCA985,anditwillarriveat11:30am.August6.Myuncleistallandheiswearingglasses.Andhewillbeinbluejacket.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuasampleHomeworkRewriteyourcomposition,andpayattentiontoitswords,phrases,sentencepatternsandgrammar.