AP-English-language-and-composition--2011真考q2例文

AP®ENGLISHLANGUAGEANDCOMPOSITION2011SCORINGGUIDELINES©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:’squalityasawhole.Rememberthatstudentshadonly40minutestoreadandwrite;theessay,therefore,isnotafinishedproductandshouldnotbejudgedbystandardsappropriateforanout-of-classassignment.Evaluatetheessayasadraft,makingcertaintorewardstudentsforwhattheydowell.Allessays,eventhosescored8or9,maycontainoccasionallapsesinanalysis,prosestyle,ormechanics.Suchfeaturesshouldenterintotheholisticevaluationofanessay’soverallquality.Innocasemayanessaywithmanydistractingerrorsingrammarandmechanicsbescoredhigherthana2.______________________________________________________________________________________9Essaysearningascoreof9meetthecriteriaforascoreof8and,inaddition,areespeciallysophisticatedintheirargument,thoroughintheirdevelopment,orimpressiveintheircontroloflanguage.8EffectiveEssaysearningascoreof8effectivelyanalyze*howKelleyusesrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.Theydeveloptheiranalysiswithevidenceandexplanationsthatareappropriateandconvincing,referringtothepassageexplicitlyorimplicitly.Theprosedemonstratesaconsistentabilitytocontrolawiderangeoftheelementsofeffectivewritingbutisnotnecessarilyflawless.7Essaysearningascoreof7meetthecriteriaforascoreof6butprovidemorecompleteexplanation,morethoroughdevelopment,oramorematureprosestyle.6AdequateEssaysearningascoreof6adequatelyanalyzehowKelleyusesrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.Theydeveloptheiranalysiswithevidenceandexplanationsthatareappropriateandsufficient,referringtothepassageexplicitlyorimplicitly.Thewritingmaycontainlapsesindictionorsyntax,butgenerallytheproseisclear.5Essaysearningascoreof5analyzehowKelleyusesrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.Theevidenceorexplanationsusedmaybeuneven,inconsistent,orlimited.Thewritingmaycontainlapsesindictionorsyntax,butitusuallyconveysthestudent’sideas.4InadequateEssaysearningascoreof4inadequatelyanalyzehowKelleyusesrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.Theseessaysmaymisunderstandthepassage,misrepresentthestrategiesKelleyuses,ormayanalyzethesestrategiesinaccurately.Theevidenceorexplanationsusedmaybeinappropriate,insufficient,orlessconvincing.Theprosegenerallyconveysthestudent’sideasbutmaybelessconsistentincontrollingtheelementsofeffectivewriting._____________________________∗Forthepurposesofscoring,analysisreferstoidentifyingfeaturesofatextandexplaininghowtheauthorusesthesetodevelopthemeaningortoachieveaparticulareffectorpurpose.AP®ENGLISHLANGUAGEANDCOMPOSITION2011SCORINGGUIDELINES©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:(continued)3Essaysearningascoreof3meetthecriteriaforascoreof4butdemonstratelesssuccessinanalyzingKelley’suseofrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.TheyarelessperceptiveintheirunderstandingofthepassageorKelley’sstrategies,ortheexplanationorexamplesmaybeparticularlylimitedorsimplistic.Theessaysmayshowlessmaturityincontrolofwriting.2LittleSuccessEssaysearningascoreof2demonstratelittlesuccessinanalyzinghowKelleyusesrhetoricalstrategiestoconveyhermessageaboutchildlabortoheraudience.Theseessaysmaymisunderstandtheprompt,misreadthepassage,failtoanalyzethestrategiesKelleyuses,orsubstituteasimplertaskbyrespondingtotheprompttangentiallywithunrelated,inaccurate,orinappropriateexplanation.Theproseoftendemonstratesconsistentweaknessesinwriting,suchasgrammaticalproblems,alackofdevelopmentororganization,oralackofcontrol.1Essaysearningascoreof1meetthecriteriaforascoreof2butareundeveloped,especiallysimplisticintheirexplanation,orweakintheircontroloflanguage.0Indicatesanon-topicresponsethatreceivesnocredit,suchasonethatmerelyrepeatstheprompt.—Indicatesablankresponseoronethatiscompletelyofftopic.©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:®ENGLISHLANGUAGEANDCOMPOSITION2011SCORINGCOMMENTARY©2011TheCollegeBoard.VisittheCollegeBoardontheWeb:’abilitytoengageinclosereadingandrhetoricalanalysisofapieceofnonfictionprose—thatis,theirabilitytoexplainthemeaning,purpose,andeffectofapassageandtherhetoricalstrategiestheauthoremploystoconveymeaning,achievepurpose,andcreateaneffect.Inparticular,studentswereaskedtoreadandanalyzeanaddressdeliveredbysocialreformerFlorenceKelley,anadvocateforreformingchildlaborlawsandextendingvotingrightstowomen,totheNationalAmericanWomanSuffrageAssociationc