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composition-changesinme【题目】写一篇以前你是什么样子的,现在的你是什么样子的短文。可以用以下提示词,不少于5句话。(quiet,active,short,tall,thin,strong,gocycling,ice-skate,...)一、审题:以前——一般过去时(过去式)现在——一般现在时(原形)以前:before,3yearsago,then,atthattime现在:now二、选择标题。ChangesinmeThenandNowBeforeandNow列表过去和现在对比,一一对应。可以从外貌、性格、能力、爱好等方面作对比。列3点最佳。三、写作1、分3段。总——分——总。如果通篇只有一段,看得阅卷老师眼睛累,增加阅卷负担,会影响作文分数哦~每段前面空2个字母。2、注重开头。开头用适当的、高级的句子放在开头,起到一鸣惊人的效果。给阅卷老师一个震撼:嗯,这个人英语很不错嘛~3、注重结尾。开头和结尾,是阅卷老师非常注重的部分。有个漂亮的开头,再加上一个漂亮的结尾,再次给予阅卷老师一个震撼:这孩子,英语果然很不错呢!给高分!一定给高分!4、注意字迹工整、卷面整洁。(1)字不能太小,不然增加阅卷老师的阅卷难度。你给他们找麻烦,他们也会给你找麻烦哦——扣分!字也不能太大。不然就不美观,整体看起来会很凌乱。(2)字迹一定要工整,不能涂涂改改、影响整体效果。改作文的阅卷老师改一篇英语作文不会十秒。看标题、开头、结尾,中间扫一眼,打分。如果没发现错误,加上你的字迹工整、卷面整洁,恭喜你,你至少能拿8分哦~(3)单词中间不能涂改。单词也不能转行。(4)如果你涂涂改改——ohno,这个人写作文吞吞吐吐,自己都没想好自己说什么,英语肯定不会很好。扣分!扣分!关于字迹工整。有句话叫做:“字如其人。”阅卷老师大都是这样想的。你连英语字母都写不好,成绩肯定不会好到哪里去。扣分扣分!如果你字迹工整、卷面整洁,就算发现了一些错误,阅卷老师也可能会心情好得放过你:一定是考试太紧张了,没关系没关系,字这么好看,少扣点分!如果真实水平是6分的作文,字不好看,可能只得到3分;如果字好看,说不定能得8分呢!如果真是水平是8分的作文,字好看,10分送给你送给你;如果字不好看,哎呀,给个6分就算了。三、易错句型。1.Now,Iverystrong.2.Well,Iwasshort.3.Now,Iverylikewinter.4.Now,Ilikeice-skate.5.I'mtallerthenbefore.6.Now,Iamtallandstrongthanbefore.7.Before,Iwasquiet.Now,Iactiveintheclass.8.Now,Iameveryactiveinclass.9.Before,Iwasquiet.Now,Iamactiveintheclass.I'mtallerthanbefore.Ialwaystalkwithjoy.10.Before,ididn'tlikewinter.Because,itwastoocold.11.Hello,I'mAmy.I13yearsold.12.因果倒置Before,Ididn'tlikewinter.So,Icouldn'tgocycling.Now,Ilovewinter,soIcangoice-skating.13.didn't和couldn't用法混乱二者都表示否定。couldn't表示不能,没有能力。didn't表示不,有能力但是不愿意做。Before,Iwasshort.Ididn'tgocycling.Before,Icouldn'tlikewinter.14.逻辑混乱。Before,Icouldplaybadminton.Now,Ican'tplaybadminton.Before,Iwasactive.Now,I'mquiet.Ialwaystalkwithjoy.15.be动词乱用。Hello,I'mAmy.I13yearsold.Before,Ishort.Now,Itall.Before,Iwasshort.Now,Iwastall.Before,I'mcouldn'tgocycling.Now,I'mcanrideabike.be动词用法:(1)是(2)be+形容词(…的)(3)be+动ing(4)begoingto+动原(表将来)不能加be动词的情况。(1)动词原形。l'mliketogoice-skating.(2)动词过去式。I'mrodeahorselastweekend.四、开头1.Hi,everyone.I'mAmy.I'm12yearsold.I'mdifferentnow.2.Changesarearoundme.3.Changesarewithme.4.Everythingischanging.Metoo!五、中间。(一)外貌对比1.(身高)Before,Iwasshort.Now,I'mtallerthanbefore.2.(体重)Before,Iwasthin.Now,I'mstrongerthanbefore.3.(身高+体重)Before,Iwasshortandthin.Now,I'mtallerandstrongerthanbefore.4.(头发)Before,Ihadshorthair.Now,Ihavelonghair.5.(眼镜)Before,Ididn'twearglasses.butnow,Iwearglasses.二、性格对比quiet-active,shy-funny,strict-friendly/funny,(not)hard-workingatschool,(not)helpfulathome/school(1)Before,Iwasquiet.Now,I'mveryactiveinclass.Ialwaystalkwithjoy.(2)OnceIwasn'tanactivegirl.Ididn'ttalkalot.Now,Italkmorethanbefore.Ialwaystalkwithjoy.过去、现在写一句也可以。写你不会写错的。三、能力对比(couldn't/can+动原)1.Before,Icouldn'tgocycling.Now,Icanrideabike.Irideabikeeveryday.(Ilikeitverymuch.)(I'mgoodatridingabike.)gocycling=rideabikeice-skate=goice-skating(球类)playbadminton(乐器类)playthepianodosports=playsportscleanmyroom=dothecleaningwashmyclothescookdokungfumakeasnowmanswim=goswimming四、爱好对比didn'tlike/like+动ing+to+动原liked/don'tlike+动ing+to+动原1.Before,Ididn'tlikewinter.Ithoughtitwastoocold,andIcouldn'tgocycling.NowIliketoice-skate,soIlikewinter.(spring,summer,autumn,winter)2.(music,sports,English,maths)Before,Ididn'tlikemusic.Becauseitwastoohard(困难).Now,Icanplaythepiano.SoIlikemusicverymuch.五、tips1、可以把外貌、性格、能力、爱好相结合,写作更出彩。2、高级词汇、高级句子可以为你的作文增加光彩。3、但是,如果你不确定写地对不对,还是改用一般的词汇、一般的句子吧。因为错词、错句会扣分,而且很严重。4、过去和现在对比,以三个为宜。如果句子足够多,两个也可以。5、写作一般不少于5句话。不多于10句话。6、不要通篇都是Before,...Now,...Before,...Now,...Before,...Now,...写作并不是造句子。7、表示过去,可以用before,then,atthattime,3yearsago时间可以放句首,也可以放句末。放句首,需要加逗号,放句末则不需要。六、范文(一)ChangesinmeHello,everyone.I'mAmy.I'mdifferentnow.3yearsago,Iwasshortandthin.Icouldn'trideabike.Now,I'mtallerandstrongerthanbefore.SoIcancycling.Ilikeitverymuch.Whatabigchange!ThenandNowEverythingischanging.Metoo!Before,Ihadshorthair.Butnow,Ihavelonghair.OnceIwasn'tanactivegirl.Ididn'ttalkalot.Now,Italkmorethanbefore.Ialwaystalkwithjoy.Changesarewithme.BeforeandNowHi,mynameisMike.Changesarewithme.3yearsago,Ididn'twearglasses.Iwasquietinclass.Atthattime,Ididn'tlikemusic.Ithoughtitwastoohard(难).Butnow,Iwearglasses.AndI'mveryactiveinclass.Ilikemusicverymuch,becauseIcanplaythepiano.I'mdifferentnow.Whataboutyou?
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