高中英语书面表达讲评公开课

LearningGoalStudnetslearntowirteagoodcompositionbyobserving,discussingandimitating.写作课——月考作文讲评•本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。•评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定是否达到及格线（15分），然后确定其所属的具体档次，以该档次的要求来衡量，最后给分。•词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。•评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。•若缺少要点，分数降一档(5分)处理。•拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。•书写较差以至于影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次(5分)高考作文评分总则•第五档（优秀）：（21~25分）1.完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。3.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。5.完全达到了预期的写作目的。高考对于优秀作文的要求要点完全；词汇丰富；语法多样；语言准确；行文连贯；书写优美1.Makeananalysisofthetopic(审题)2’2.Makeadraft(打草稿)10’-15’3.Modifyyourdraft(修改草稿)5’4.Moveit(誊写)10’Don’tmissoutanydetails!Beclear!Befluentandaccurate!Bebeautiful!****漏掉活动要求的：****漏掉身份介绍的：斌1.Ourcitybecomedirty.Ourschoolholdthisactivity.Everyonewhotakepartinthisactivitymustdo….2.in9:003.I’mLihua,thechairmanoftheStudentUnionofourschool.4.Oursmallactionswilltakeplaceabigchangeinthefuture.5.I’mlookingforyouearlyreply.6.Therewouldbemanystudentsjoinus.7.Everyoneshouldpreparedsomefoodinadvanced.8.Studentsaswearealsocandosomethingawesome.9.Thisactivitywillhaveagoodinfluencetous.10.…inviteyoujoininus11.…comeuptheidea12.…theflowtips13.Youneedtakesometools14.Weneedtodivideintomanygroups.15.Thereasonwhyisthatourschoolwillprovidethetools.16.Wouldyouwanttojoinus?17.Everyvolunteers…18.It’sheldinmayon26th.19.Themostimportant，…20.Iwouldbeappreciateifyoucan…21.appealmorepeopletojoinus单词拼写错误meaningful；purpose；also；brush(刷子)；reputation；reply;messy;convenient;union;writing;beautify(美化)；provide;illegal;cheat;effort(努力)；effect（影响）********＋****A级书面欣赏李妍菲李钰********C级书面展示Enjoy&FindDearLeslie,I’mLihua,ChairmanoftheStudentUnionofourschool.Asweknow,manykindsofadletscanbefoundeverywhere.Inordertobeautifyourenvironmentandimprovetheimageofourcity,we’llholdavoluntaryactivityonSaturday.I’mwritingtoinviteyoutotakepartinit.Pleasemeetusoutsidetheschoolgateat8a.m.onSaturdayifyou’dliketogowithus.You’dbetterwearsportshoes.Sincesomeadletsareonthefloorsandseats,youshouldtakealongsomenecessarytools.Yourearlyreplyishighlyappreciated.范文李钰Enjoy&Find1.IamLihua.I’mchairmanoftheStudentsUnion.2.Yougavemeconfidence.Thankyou!3.HealwayswatchesTV.Thismakeshisparentsangry.4.Ilikeourlibrary.Icanreadfreelyhere.Beautifythefollowingsentences（同位语）（强调句）（定语从句）（定语从句）5.Igotemployed.Thisnewsmademeveryhappy.6.Whenyouarecrossingtheroad,youshouldbecareful.7.Ifyouworkhard,you’llmakegreatprogress.8.Iwasmovedbyhisdeeds,soIburstoutcrying.（同位语从句）（状语从句的省略）（非谓语动词）（非谓语动词）9.Itwillnotonlymakeushappy,butalsobroadenourhorizons10.Thereare1000students.MostofthemcomefromZhengzhou.（倒装句）（定语从句）1.表转折：However=Nevertheless,2.列举三个方面：Tobeginwith首先,Inaddition另外,Lastbutnotleast最后但也同样重要的是，3.列举两个方面：Foronething，….Foranother4.总结：Onthewhole=Inconclusion增加连贯性1.据今天所学写周报第三期的作文2.预习三维设计18-19页，完成20页习题（选做）Homework校长评课建议•学生错误归类分析，再举例加深印象•最后的连贯性词组分类再练习一下•英语发音要更地道