英语作文扩句练习

英语作文扩句练习•扩句的方法•在学习扩句法之前，先对学生进行五个简单句句型，并列句和复合句的专项训练，打好基础。扩句是在基本句型的基础上，添加各种修饰成分，使句子得到扩展，即根据表达的需求增加定语，状语，同位语等成分，或者举例子补充细节内容，或者添加谚语俗语等。1.1.WearrivedinSanya.•WearrivedinSanya,happilyandexcitedly.(添加副词)1.2.Iliketomakefriendswithmyclassmates.•------Iliketomakefriendswithmyclassmates,whohavethesameinterestasmine.(添加定语从句)1.3.Wewerehappyandreturnedhome.•-------Wewerehappyandreturnedhomeafterwehadfinishedcollectingalltherubbish.(添加状语从句)1.4.Ilikereadingbooks.•-------Ilikereadingbooks,suchasnovels,shortstories,magazinesandnewspapers.(通过举例补充细节)1.5.Weshouldstudyhard.•--------Asweallknow,“Practicemakesperfect”.Soweshouldstudyhard.（添加谚语）1.6.Ioftenjoininmanyactivities.•--------Ioftenjoininmanyactivitiesinordertocommunicatewithotherstudentsandbroadenmymind.(添加目的状语)•试题要求：假如你是一名中学生，请以Mycolorfulschoollife为题，写一篇短文。要求100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总数。•要点提示：1：上课认真听讲•2：课后完成作业•3：经常参加体育锻炼•4：去图书馆阅读•I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’mstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard.____________________________________________•Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.•学生的习作：•I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’mstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard.•Ilistentotheteachercarefully.Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass.Ioftentakeexercise.Ioftenreadintheschoollibrary.•Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.•点评：该学生能完整的写出各个要点，没有出现太大的语法错误，表达通顺，单词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够，没有达到100个字左右，字数不够是很多学生面临的共同问题。其次，句子的表达过于平淡无奇，没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇，固定搭配、固定短语等使表达地道。而且，没有使用连接词，上下文的连接不够顺畅。•改进方法：•步骤一：列要点•把要写的内容要点化，做到要点齐全。•1:Listentotheteachercarefully•2:finishmyhomework•3:takepartinexercise•4:oftenreadinthelibrary•步骤二：造简单句•充分利用五个简单句句型对各个要点进行补充，使其变成一个完整的句子。每个句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，语法是否正确，说法是否符合英语表达习惯。•1:Ilistentotheteachercarefullyintheclass.•2:Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass.•3:Ioftentakepartinexercisewithmyclassmates.•4:Idosomereadingintheschoollibrary.•步骤三：扩展句子•1:IlistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.(增加目的状语从句)•2:Ifinishmyhomeworkafterclass,whichisapieceofcakeforme.（增加定语从句）•3:Ioftentakepartinexercisewithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootball,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.（举例说明）•4:IoftendosomereadingintheschoollibrarywhenIhavenothingtodoafterclass.（增加时间状语从句）•步骤四：润色句子•根据高考英语作文评分细则，第五档的要求：24-25分，至少有3个复杂句，2种从句形式，语气自然，敬语得体，无中式英语，语言基本功扎实，词汇丰富。这就要求我们在谴词造句方面下工夫。“润色句子包括词语的选择与句型的运用。”比如可以用高级词汇，短语和固定搭配来替换一般词汇。增加习惯表达句式，倒装句，it当形式主语和形式宾语，非谓语动词等，使用多种句式，使其多样化。•1:ItisnecessaryformetolistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.(把第一句换成it当形式主语的用法，使句式多样化。)•2:Itakehomeworkseriouslyandfinishitintime,whichisapieceofcakeforme.(增加了take…seriously和intime两个短语，是句子更加生动)•3:Inordertostrengthenmybody,Ioftentakepartindifferentkindsofexerciseswithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootall,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.（增加了inordertodosth目的状语和differentkindsof使句子的意思更完整。）•4:Interestedinreadingbooks,Idevelopthehabitofgoingtothelibraryanddosomereadingonmyfavouritebooks.（使用过去分词短语当状语，再添加短语developthehabbitof…使文章增加亮点）•步骤五：连句成篇•“过渡词在文章中起着承上启下的作用，它好比一座桥梁，能将全文各句有机地联系在一起，从而使句子不再是孤立的独立的个体。”使用表示转折，并列，递进，因果关系等连词把句子连接起来，“有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑”使上下文更加通顺，逻辑性更强。•I’mahighschoolstudentandIunderstandwhatI’mstudyingfor.Ihavebeenworkinghard.（原文已给）•Firstofall(过渡词),itisnecessaryformetolistentotheteacherscarefullyintheclasssothatIcanunderstandwhattheteacherssay.What’smore(过渡词),Itakehomeworkseriouslyandfinishitintime,whichisapieceofcakeforme.Inaddition(过渡词),Inordertostrengthenmybody,Ioftentakepartindifferentkindsofexerciseswithmyclassmates,suchasplayingfootall,goingswimmingandplayingbadmintonetc.Finally(过渡词),Interestedinreadingbooks,Idevelopthehabitofgoingtothelibraryanddosomereadingonmyfavouritebooks.•Maytherealwaysbecolorfullifearoundmyschool.