高考英语开放性作文高三英语课件

开放作文专题练习Mr.Liisthemanagerofalargecompany.Hewentbackhomelateasusualonenight.Hefoundanotewrittenbyhisonlyson,sayingthathewouldleavehome…Youknowtheboyandtelluswhy:OneSaturdayafternoon,LiHuaandWangPingwereplayinginthewoodswhentheyfoundabirdontheground.Theypickeditupandfounditwounded.•SupposeyouareLiHuaandWangPing.Pleasetelluswhatyoudidwiththebird1、审语境2、审人称3、审时态:一个星期六的下午，李华和王平在树林里玩，这时他们在地上发现一只小鸟，他们拣起小鸟，发现小鸟受伤了SupposingyouareLiHuaandWangPing.从此句的提示中可以看出时要求你以李华和王平两个人的口气续写，因此人称就该wePleasetelluswhatyoudidwiththebird.在这个提示语中的did正是决定学生在写作中所用的时态应该是过去时例1：•IfIwereLiHuaIwouldtrymybesttosavethebird.Iwouldputthebirdcarefullyintomysofthattokeepitwarm.Andthencarriedittoananimalhospitalassoonaspossible.Ithinkdoctorcouldhelpit.IfthebirdcanliveIwouldcarryitbackhome,andtookcareofituntilitcanflybacktothewoods.Ifitcouldn’tlive,Iwouldburiedit.IthinkwhoevermeetthisthingwilldojustlikewhatIdid.Everybodywouldliketoseethisbirdfamilylivehappilytogether,isn’tit?（审题错误）例2：•Firstfindthewoundofthebirdquickly.Second,tidythewoundcarefullyandsoftlyandremembernottomakethebirdpainalot.Thenputsomemedicineonitandtieaclotharoundthewound时态/句型不妥•例3：•IwasworriedaboutthelittlebirdwhenIhadpickeditup.Itslegwasseriouslyhurt.SoIdecidedtobringittoseethedoctor.ButLiHuatoldmethatthedoctorcouldn’tseetheanimals.Atlastweputitonabigtree,becausewebelieveditcouldbesaferinthewoodsthaninthecity.Wehopeditcouldbebetternow人称错误例5：•Onedayafternoon,WangPingandIwereplayinghappilyinthewoods.Wewereplayingballsandsuddenlytheballranintotheothersideoftheroad.IhurriedtogetitwhenIsawabirdlyingthereandIfounditwaswounded.Wequicklytookittothehospitalandthedoctorgavethebirdsomemedicineandwetookitbackhomethen.Itwasgettingbetterandbetterandwedecidedtosetitfreethenextday.主次不分•例6：•WangPingtoldmethathewasalittlehungryandwecouldeatthebird.Igreedwithhimandwefoundsomedrywoodandputittogether.Thenwecookedthebird.Itwasreallydelicious.Whatahappyday.思想不够积极•1、认真审题，即：审语境、审人称、审时态•2、要紧扣主题，符合要求，首尾呼应•3、注意写作对象和语言风格，要有读者的意识•4、要进行细致描写，有细节的支撑•5、要有主次之分，详略得当•6、要力求内容新颖，必须符合逻辑•7、要做到思想健康，积极向上Thinkingthatitmightdiewithouttreatment,wetookithome.Imadealittlenestforitandgaveitsomericetoeat.Somedayslater,thebirdrecovered.Wetookitoutandletitbebacktothewoods.Ithoughtwehaddonesogoodadeed.MoredetailedandmeaningfulWetriedtosavethebirdbygivingitsomewaterandfood.Andthenwedecidedtotakeittotheanimalhospital，butitwastoolate.Afterashortwhile,thebirdcouldn’tmoveatallanditwasdead.Sowedugasmallholeandputthebirdintoitasatomb.Whatapity!Coherent;meaningfulOnasunnymorning,XiaoHongfromOrangeTownwasonherwaytoherfriend’shouseinGreenHill,asmalltownshehadneverbeentobefore.Atacrossroads,shefoundthesignpost（路标）showingthedirectionshadfallenover.Shegotlost.Howcouldshefindoutwhichwaytogo?Considertwoorthreedifferentwaysofworkingouttheproblem.XiaoHongdon’tworry.I’llgiveyousomeadivse.First,youwilllookforapersonwhowillcantakeyoutoyourfriendshome.Ifnobody,youcanlookatthesun,whichcantellyouthedection.人称不对IthinkXiaoHongshouldasktothroughttheroad’speopletogoGreenHillway.Thensheshouldhelpthecrossroadtostand.Orsheshouldgotoatellphonewillbeatnearandcallforherfriend.句式混乱，结构不清。中文式英语Atfirst,shecanaskingsomebodywhocrossthereforhelp.Thesecondway,shecantakephonetohomeandaskshisfamilywhocananswerherquestion.Thethirdwayistakephoneto110.Theycanhelpshe.动词形式、短语使用不正确First,shecouldaskforhelpfromthepasser-by,whowerewalkingtheroad.Thesecond,shecouldusethesignpost.LetthesignpostleadtothewayfromOrangeTown.Then,shecouldfindthewaytotheGreenHill.Andthelastwaywasthatshetelephonedherfriendandaskedherfriendtopickupher.层次分明，句式表达简练；不足之处是部分词语使用欠准确