【三维设计】2016届高考英语(江苏用)一轮复习课件高考写作6大增分锦囊2.书面表达训练三步法

写作进阶提升之二——英语作文训练三步法写作进阶提升英语作文训练的三大步第一步,文从字顺的初级阶段第二步,多悟思变的过渡阶段第三步,文质兼美的高级阶段第一步：文从字顺的初级阶段语言错误多，汉语式的句子多多数考生写的作文要点很全面，但是由于英语语言基础知识不扎实，语言不规范，也往往失分严重。最突出的语言错误有以下几种：（1）主谓不一致。①FatherandIamgoingtovisither.②Myuncleoftengotothecinemahimself.（2）时态、语态混用。①Themealissonicethatweallenjoyeditverymuch.②Theoldmanknockeddownbythecarandinjuredbadly.（3）句子成分残缺。①Butthecarwhichpaintedreddidn’tstop.②Theyoungmanrunninginthestreetfast.③Hewouldn’tabletoworkouttheproblem.④Weallagainstallformsofterroristactivities.（4）习惯搭配乱用。①Iverylikethenovel.②Thenwesetoffdigging,plantingandwatering.（5）汉式英语。a)Thecarisyellowcolour.b)Hecostfiveyuantobuyanewdictionary.c)Recentlyourvillagehastakenplacegreatchanges.d)ThefactorybrokeoutabigfirelastSunday.e)Chinesepopulationismany.（6）名词单、复数不分。①HewillgiveusatalkonAmericanfilm.②Heisoneofthebestplayerinourschool.（7）赘词现象严重。①Atlast,thelostboyreturnedback.②Ononeday,hewenttothecinema.（8）用词不当。Ihopeyoutohelpthegirlwithherhomework.（9）拼写和词形变化错误。①Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.②Onhiswaytoschool,hesewalittlegirl.（10）前后人称不一致。①Swimmingandfootballarehisfavouritesports,helikesitallhislife.②Thelittlegirlusuallygoestoschoolat7inthemorning,buttodayhewaslateforschool.（11）结构错误:a)Havingheardthenews,herheartbeatfasterandfaster.b)Hewroteabout300stories,someofthemhadbeentranslatedintoChinese.c)Weshouldteachchildrendon’tplayandridebikesontheroad.d)Therewerehundredsofstudentscouldn’tgotoschoolbecausetheywerepoor.(12)词义不清楚:a)Hemanagedtoswimacrosstheriver,butfailed.b)I’vedelayedtoreturnyouthebookEnglishUsage,whichyouborrowedmetwodaysbefore.c)Iwasverydifficulttorefuseandhadtoreceiveherinvitation.句子表达多样性的途径高考英语书面表达新的评分标准要求考生使用高级词汇、复杂句式、过渡性词语和不同的表达方式，从而增加文章的可读性和表现力。1)改变句子的语序，通过倒装某成分、倒装句、强调句、感叹句等手段实现句子形式的多样化，使句子跌宕起伏，文章生动活泼。a.Hegotupveryearlytocatchthebus.→Tocatchthebus，hegotupveryearly.b.Thegirl,hungryandthirsty,wentbackhome.→Thegirlwentbackhome,hungryandthirsty.c.Tomknewhismistakesonlythen.→OnlythendidTomknowhismistakes.第二步：多悟思变的过渡阶段•d.Thenewsthatourfootballteamhadwoncamesoon.•→Thenewscamesoonthatourfootballteamhadwon.•e.Itbegantorainjustatteno’clock.•→e.Itwasatteno’clockitbegantorain...2)用复合句（定从、状从、名词性从句、并列句等）来代替简单句，使语言由松散变凝练，增强句子的连贯性和句意的表现力，使行文更富文采。a）IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeast.Atthattime,anelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.→IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeastwhenanelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.•IheardthatBeijingwonthebidforthe2008OlympicGames.Iwasexcited.•→IwasexcitedtohearthatBeijingwonthebidforthe2008OlympicGames•b)TheflatisinabuildingonFangcaostreet.ItisnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.•→Theflat,whichisinabuildingonFangcaostreet.,isnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.•c)Thisistheplace.Iworkedwiththefarmersinthepast.•→ThisistheplacewhereIworkedwiththefarmersinthepast.•d)Marystoodinfrontofthewindow.Fromthatplaceshecouldseeherclassmatesplayingfootball.•→Marystoodinfrontofthewindowfromwhereshecouldseeherclassmatesplayingfootball.3)同位语从句与写作1.IbelieveyouhavehardlyanyideahowanxiousI’vebeenforyoursafety.2.Ihadlittleideaatthattimewhethertheywerewillingtogivemeahand.3.IhavehardlyanydoubtthatshecandoaswellasIcan.4.Ihavenoimpressionwhathehaddonebefore.5.Inmyopinion,thereseemstobeafearinhimthathewouldbetakeninbyus.6.Thereseemstobenopossibilitythathighoilpriceswillhaveaprofoundimpactontheworldeconomy.7.TheproblemmustbepaidattentiontothatmoreandmoreschoolchildrenareaddictedtoInternetgames.8.Yoursuggestionmadelastweekthatweworkersshouldgetapayrisehasnowbeenadopted.9.Wordcamethatourteamhadwonthegame.10.Mystudentsholdthepointthatwhatabooksaysisright.11.DadmadeapromiselastnightthatifIpassedtheexam,hewouldbuymeapresent.12.Itisaninterestingfactthatwhenmentrytodothesamethingsasnaturedoes,theyusuallyhavetodotheminadifferentway.4)多使用短语结构来简化从句或合并短句：常见的短语结构有分词短语、介词短语、名词短语、同位语结构和独立主格结构。Itwasfine.Wewentout.→Itbeingfine,wewentout.Whenyouarecrossingthestreet,youmustbeverycareful.→Whencrossingthestreet,youmustbeverycareful.Ifthetreesweregivenmorewater,theywouldhavegrownbetter.→Givenmorewater,theywouldhavegrownbetter.•Theyoungmancouldn’thelpcryingwhenheheardthebadnews.•→Hearingthebadnews，theyoungmancouldn’thelpcrying.•It’sasmallflat.It’s25squaremeters.Ithasabedroom,abathroomandakitchen.•→It’sasmallflatof25squaremeters,withabedroom,abathroomandakitchen.精确词汇及高级词汇：1.Hewillbearrivingsoon.→Hewillbearrivingprettysoon.2.Theypouredthewastewaterintotheriver.→Theypouredthewastewaterdirectlyintotheriver.3.Hegotangry.→Hegotalittlebitangry.4.Idon’tunderstand.→Idon’tquiteunderstand.5.Ifyouhaveanyproblems,youcanshoutout.→Ifyouhaveanyproblems,justyell.6.Theyplantedtreesaroundtheschool.→Theyplantedtreesthroughoutthecampus.7.Thepolicetreatedthewhitesbetterthantheblacks.→Thepolicefavoredthewhiteovertheblack.8.“Whataretheydoing?”hethought.→“Whataretheydoing?”hefigured.第三步：文质兼美的高级阶段怎样使用较高级的词汇和“固式结构”:1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.→Theweatherbeinggood,ourjourneywascomfortable.2.Weallthinkheisagreatman.→Weallconsiderhimtobeagreatman.3.SuddenlyIthoughtoutagoodidea.→Suddenlyagoodideaoccurredtome.使用排比①Whetheryourtastesaremod