2012届高考英语 书面表达(文字提纲式作文)练习讲评二课件

注意：1.对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不能简单翻译；2.词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数；3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。•LegalAffairsOfficeoftheStateCouncilofChinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofSchoolBusSafetyRegulationsonDec.11th,2011tocollectpublicopinions.______________________•2011年12月11日国务院法制办就我国校车安全条例草案征求意见稿正式全文公布，广纳民意。请你根据下列表格的内容为某英语网站写一篇短文。一、认真审题，确立话题，归纳要点通过审题，确定本文的话题为“就我国校车安全条例草案征求意见稿发表看法”。围绕这个话题，将题目中叙述的文字转换成以下要点：出台的背景：①连续的事故；②社会的关注；③政府的重视；出台的意义：④关爱生命；⑤稳定社会；我的看法……二、理顺要点，增加细节，连贯表达本篇书面表达的文字提纲实际上就是按照表达顺序提供的，所以不存在理顺要点的环节。但为了表达的连贯，还需要增加要点：既然是有出台的背景就要增加有关的背景资料：①过去的几年连续发生的校车事故夺取了许多学生的生命；②这些悲剧使人们震惊引起了社会和政府的关注；③政府是如何重视的：校车安全条例草案的公布表明政府已经意识到问题的严重性，说明政府正在采取措施来确保校车的安全；④校车安全条例草案的公布反映政府与公众关爱学生的生命；⑤校车安全条例草案一旦实施必将有助于减少事故惠及学校和每个家庭从而对稳定社会会起及其重要的作用；⑥我的看法：围绕上述的叙述进行想象•首先要表明对校车安全条例草案的态度：赞成或支持；•其次希望人人都要遵守这个条例；•最后是希望政府部门要严格执行这个条例。三、化解难点，灵活表达，词能达意本篇所给要点和增加的细节比较多，有些要点和细节表达起来还比较棘手。1.化解难点①夺取了许多学生的生命claimmanystudents’liveskillmanystudentsmanystudentslosttheirlives②使人们震惊ashocktoeveryonetoeveryone’sshocktoeveryone’sgreatsurpriseshockeveryonemakeeveryoneshocked/surprised③引起了社会和政府的关注arousegreatconcernamongpeoplefromallwalksoflifeaswellasthegovernment•peoplefromallwalksoflifeaswellasthegovernmentpaymuchattentionto…•causeoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuchattentionto…④校车安全条例草案的公布•thepublicationofthedraftregulations•havingpublishedthedraftregulations•thedraftregulationspublished•⑤问题的严重性•Howseriousthesituationis!•Howserioustheproblemis!•suchaserioussituation/problem•⑥确保校车的安全•ensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus•makesurethattheschoolbusissafe•⑦关爱学生的生命•concernaboutstudents’lives•paymuchattentiontostudents’safety•⑧一旦实施•when/onceputintoeffect•when/oncecarriedout•when/onceputintopractice•⑨惠及学校和每个家庭•benefitschoolsandeveryfamily•schoolsandfamiliesbenefitfrom•dogoodtoschoolsandfamilies2.变点为句①过去的几年连续发生的校车事故夺取了许多学生的生命•Duringthepastyear,therehavebeenseveralsevereschoolbusaccidentswhichclaimedstudents’lives.•Duringthepastyear,severeschoolbusaccidentshaveclaimedmanystudents’lives.•Duringthepastyear,aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedclaimingmanystudents’lives.•Duringthepastyear,aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedkillingmanystudents.•Duringthepastyear,aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappened,inwhichmanystudentslosttheirlives.②这些悲剧使人们震惊引起了社会和政府的关注•Thesetragediescameasashocktoeveryoneand•havearousedgreatconcernamongpeoplefrom•allwalksoflifeaswellasourgovernment.•Thesetragediesmadeeveryoneshockedand•causedoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuch•attentiontothem.③校车安全条例草案的公布表明政府已经意识到问题的严重性，说明政府正在采取措施来确保校车的安全•Thepublicationofthedraftregulationsindicatesthatour•governmenthasrealizedhowseriousthesituationisandthatitis•takingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus.•Havingpublishedthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernment•hasrealizedthesituationissoseriousthatitistakingeffective•measurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus.•Thedraftregulationspublishedindicatethatourgovernmenthas•realizedhowseriousthesituationisandthatitistakingeffective•measurestomakesurethattheschoolbusmustbesafe.•④校车安全条例草案的公布反映政府与公众关爱学生的生命•Thepublicationofthedraftregulationsreflecta•deepconcernfromourgovernmentaswellas•fromthepublicaboutstudents’lives.•Thepublicationofthedraftregulationsshowsthat•ourgovernmentaswellasthepublicpaysmuch•attentiontostudents’safety.⑤校车安全条例草案一旦实施必将有助于减少事故惠及学校和每个家庭从而对稳定社会会起及其重要的作用•Whenputintoeffect,theregulationswillsurelyhelp•reducethenumberofaccidentsandbenefitschoolsand•familiesaswell,whichwillbeofvitalimportancein•stablingthesociety.•When/Oncecarriedout,theregulationswillsurelyhelp•reducethenumberofaccidents,andschoolsandfamilies•benefitfromit,whichwillbeofvitalimportancein•stablingthesociety.•⑥对校车安全条例草案支持•Ifullysupportthecomingoutoftheregulations.•Iamfavorofthecomingoutoftheregulations.•⑦希望人人都要遵守这个条例•Ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywillobeytheregulations.•Ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywilldowhatisrequired•accordingtotheregulations.•⑧希望政府部门要严格执行这个条例•Ihopethattheregulationsshouldbestrictlycarriedout.•Ihopethatourgovernmentmustcarrytheregulationsoutstrictly.四、错落有致，连接恰当，发挥有度连接恰当，整理成文LegalAffairsOfficeoftheStateCouncilofChinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofSchoolBusSafetyRegulationsonDec.12th,2011tocollectpublicopinions.Duringthepastyear,aseriesofschoolbusaccidentshavehappenedclaimingmanystudents’lives.Thesetragediesmadeeveryoneshockedandcausedoursocietyandgovernmenttopaymuchattentiontothem.Havingpublishedthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmenthasrealizedthesituationissoseriousthatitistakingeffectivemeasurestoensurethesafetyoftheschoolbus.Thepublicationofthedraftregulationsshowsthatourgovernmentaswellasthepublicpaysmuchattentiontostudents’safety.Oncecarriedout,theregulationswillsurelyhelpreducethenumberofaccidents,andschoolsandfamiliesbenefitfromit,whichwillbeofvitalimportanceinstablingthesociety.AsfarasI’mconcerned,Iamfavorofthecomingoutoftheregulations.Ihopethateveryoneinoursocietywilldowhatisrequiredaccordingtotheregulations.What’smore,theregulationsshouldbestrictlycarriedout.参考范文LegalAffairsOfficeoftheStateCouncilofChinapublicizedtheexposuredraftofSchoolBusSafetyRegulationsonDec.12th,2011tocollectpublicopinions.Duringt