高一英语读后续写微技能之细节描写

“Toshow”细节描写(1)必杀技VS概括描写细节描写Toshow:towritewithmoresensory(感官的)details,allowingyourreaderstohear,see,taste,touchandsmellthesamethingsyourcharactersareexperiencing.example1Totell:Toshow:Mymotherwashopeful.Mymother'seyesweresparklingwithhope.sparkle:v.reflectbrightly发光；闪光写作建议：心理描写要抓住眼睛，嘴，手，脚等身体部位具体描述，会更加传神。example2Totell:Toshow:Miraislovelyandbeautiful.ToMiraverygently,shewalkednear,withbreezekissingherhair,Isawafigurelikealily,lovelyandfair,withfragrancefillingtheair.亮点：1.》词汇：v;adj及adv.运用Lifeislikechocolate.Youneverknowwhatyou'regonnaget-----ForrestGump写作建议：外貌描写要抓住人物主要特征如眼神；头发；走路姿态等详细刻画，运用动词，形容词和副词及高级句式，采用拟人，比喻，夸张等修辞，会更加立体。2.》语言结构：with+n.+-ing3.》修辞运用：personification(拟人)比喻（Simile明喻和Metaphor暗喻）example3Totell:Toshow:Itwasraininghard.Thundersroaringandicybitingrainviolentlybeatingagainstthewindows,Icouldbarelyhearanyvoice.Christopherwasnowheretobefound.roar:v/n.咆哮；轰隆theroarofthetrafficbiting:a.刺骨的thebitingwind高级写作句式(2)advancedsentencepattensTotell:Toshow:HefeltverytiredfallasleephaveadeepsleepsleepsoundlyinMother'sarmsheadontheshoulderwithinafewsecondTom________(get)tired,_________(lie)inMother'sarmsand________(fall)asleep.gotliev.撒谎lied;liedv.躺着lay;lainlayfall-fell-fallenfellTom感到很累（exhausted）,就在妈妈怀里睡着了，小脑袋靠在妈妈的肩膀上。TomfeltexhaustedandsleptinMother'sarms,withhisheadonhershoulder.1.写作高级句式：连续动做描写写作建议：动作描写可以表现人物性格特征，反应其心理活动，推动故事情节。要选择特定的场景，抓住人物特定的动作反应，采用活跃具体动词搭配高级句式，细致描写更具画面感。Tomfeltso…that…Tomfeltsoexhaustedthathelayinhismother'sarms,sleepingsoundly.soexhausteddidTomfeelthathelayinMother'sarms,sleepingsoundly.2.写作高级句式：so+adj./adv.+be动词or助动词+主语+that…Toshow:3.写作高级句式：非谓语动词作状语“-ing/-ed/todo”Feelinghungryandexhausted(感到又饿又累)，Tomlayinhismother'sarmsandfellasleep.4.写作高级句式：双形容词作状语safeandsound;coldandwet;depressedandworried;delightedandshockedHungryandexhausted，TomthrewhimselfintoMother'sarmsandfellintoadeepsleepinafewseconds.1.三连动（verb1+verb2+and+verb3）2.主句+with复合结构3.so+adj/adv.+倒装句4.非谓语动词—ing/-ed/todo做状语“淅沥沥，淅沥沥”又是绵绵细雨的一天。雨就像一个顽皮的小孩子，他从白云里跳下来，跳在屋顶上，跳在大地上，跳在小河里…。在教室里读书的我总是不自觉地朝窗外望去，我看到外面的雨真的“不老实”，倾盆大雨“哗哗哗”的声音，就像在开“摇滚音乐会”。