读后续写范文欣赏

读后续写范文欣赏第二节读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________续写批改要求：语言---功能与目的是否完成了交际任务，即意义的表达。作者表达的与读者理解的是否一致。写的东西是否有意义,正确和完整性。融洽度：人物，地点，事件等与前文相符合。晚上Jane做了什么？从Jane的角度去写。这样衔接才合理。“文气”读起来通畅、舒服。关键词对续写起框定和引导作用：人物Jane/Tom环境theforest器物helicopter/yellowblouse动作walked/climbed内容如何丰富：1）同义词、反义词替换，主动被动替换；with的复合结构，Ving作状语等。2）故事情节上下功夫。注意：不要刻意地使用所谓的高频词汇与语法结构。写作是为了意义的妥切传达，不是简单的堆砌华丽辞藻。15分为及格分批卷时：先确定档次，再定给分。以语言为主，情节次之。全抄的零分，拼凑的有意义的，给1—2分。少于130个字的扣2分。考生作文1(22分，原卷摘录)Butnohelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassad.Shesatbythestream,restingherachingfeet.IfIhadn’tquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn’thavetobehere.Janethoughtregretfully,withtearswellingupinhereyes.ShewantedtosaysorrytoTomforlosinghertemper.However,theonlythingshecoulddowasliebythestreamandwaitforhelp.ItwasgettinglateandJanefellasleep.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shestooduptofindsomethingtoeat.Shewalkedandwalkeduntilshecametoanopenareawherewaterandberrieswereavailable.Suddenly,sheheardahelicopter.Shetookoffheryellowblouseandbeganshakingitwidely,hopingsomeonecouldseeher.Sheshoutedout“Tom”.Thehelicoptersloweddownandlandedontheground.Withthedooropen,Tomranout.SeeingJane,hewassoexcitedandcouldn’tcontainhisjoy.HehuggedJanetightly.“Tom,Iwon’tlosemytemperagain.Iwanttostaywithyouforever.”Janesaidintears.考生作文2(16分，原卷摘录)Butnohelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewastootiredtowalk.Thenshesatonastone,drinkingandeatingafewberries.Althoughitwasdark,shecouldalsoseethestream.Sheshouted,“Tom,I’mwaitingforyouhere,Iloveyou!”Andshebelievedthatherfamilywillcomesoonwhenshewakeuptomorrow.Eventually,shesleptquietlyandsmiled.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Fortunately,itseemedthattherewasahelicoptercomingatadistance.Shestoodupandwalkedtowardsthesound.Shefollowedthesoundandshouted;“Helpme!I’mhere!”.Whileclimbingtoanopenarea,shewatchedahelicopter,shewavedheryellowblouseandshouted,“Hey,pleasehelpme,stop!stop!.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterstopped.Afewminuteslater,sheheardthattherearemanypeoplewalkingtoher,Eventually,Tomrantoherquicklyandhuggedher“Jane,I’mcoming!”Theysmiledwiththetearrunningout.考生作文3(8分，原卷摘录)Butnohelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janestartedshouting,Butshewastiredverymuch.Shedidn’thavepowertoshoutrightaway.Shestartedclimbingthesmallmountainafterresting.Sheheardahelicopteragain.Sheresponded.Andthen,Janeheardsomethingtoher.RightawayTomwasrunningtoher.Janestartedcrying,Butshewastootoyedtospeak.Tomtookherwifetohome.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Janecried,said.“Iamsorry,Tom.Imissyou.IwanttotellyouhowmuchIloveyou.Iamgrateful,Thanksforyoucanfingme.Younevergiveupme.Ishouldn’twalkawayalone.”Finally,theykissed第二节：读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。ItwasanArtlesson.Rachelsatatthedeskwatchingherclassmatesbusypreparingthewaterjarsandpaints.SheunderstoodwhyMrs.WestonaskedhertositdownandgotLisatofetcheverythingforher.ItwasalwaysadisasterwhenRacheltriedtodoArt!Rachelsighedandreachedouttodipherbrushinsomeblackpaintand—oh,no!Sheknockedoverthejar.Thewaterspreadacrossthedeskanddrownedthepaper.LisacalledMrs.WestontoseewhatRachelhaddone.Rachelwentredintheface.Shejumpedtoherfeettogetacloth.Herchairfelloverbackwards.SheturnedroundandherpaintbrushcaughtLisaacrosstheface,givingherablackmoustache.Lisawassosurprisedthatshefellba