山东省2020届新高考英语大二轮总复习 第四板块 写作 第一部分 应用文写作 第2讲 增加细节的5大

-1-第二讲增加细节的5大高分技巧在应用文写作中，增加细节内容的描述是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中，考生一定不能简单地翻译或者仅仅完成所给条目的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够使习作流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。列举具体的实例进行补充说明(2019·浙江卷6月·应用文写作)我仍旧记得……1．Istillremember...→IstillrememberwhatyouhavedevotedtoimprovingmyoralEnglishandEnglishwriting.2．(2018·浙江卷11月·应用文写作)这是一个黑色的皮革钱包。Itisablackleatherwallet.→ItisablackleatherwalletwithmyIDcard,2creditcardsandaround200dollarsinit.3．(2020·宁波综合检测·应用文写作)我想大体上介绍一下中国的传统文化。I'dliketotalkbrieflyaboutChinesetraditionalculture.→I'dliketotalkbrieflyaboutChinesetraditionalculture，especiallyChinesepainting.4．(2020·台州市第一次质量预测·应用文写作)现在，我想与你分享春节的一些传统风俗习惯。Now，I'dliketosharewithyousometraditionalcustomsoftheSpringFestival.→Now，I'dliketosharewithyousometraditionalcustomsoftheSpringFestival，themostimportantfestivalinChina.5．我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.→I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.Ifpossible，wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiences.6．我是一个充满活力的健康男孩，我非常喜欢体育运动。IamahealthyboyfullofenergysoIlikesportsverymuch.→IamahealthyboyfullofenergysoIlikesportsverymuch，especiallyoutdooractivities.WheneverIhavetime，I'llgohikingormountainclimbingwithmy-2-classmates.7．我要花一些时间和父母在一起。I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents.→I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents，chattingwiththemanddoingsomehousework.[题组过关1]——根据括号内提示完成句子1．TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.__________________________(我们不仅能阅读国内外的新闻)，butalsogetinformation，sendemailsandattendonlineschools.2．LauraisastandardAmericanstyle.__________________________(她说一口完美的美式英语)，andthat'swhyIamcrazyabouther.3．However，itseemspeopleareunawareofthenegativeeffectsofmobilephonesoncommunication.________________________________________________________________________(比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流)．4．However，everycoinhastwosides，sodoestheInternet.________________________________________________________________________(比如，沉溺于网络也许会影响我们的学习和工作)．答案：1.Wecannotonlyreadnewsfromhomeandabroad2．ShespeaksperfectAmericanEnglish3．Forexample，manypeoplebegintopaylessattentiontoface­to­facecommunication4．Forexample，beinglostintheInternetmayaffectourstudyandwork增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、结果、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容(2019·北京卷·书面表达)在农场里，我们帮忙摘西瓜。Onthefarm，wehelpedpickwatermelons.→Onthefarm，wehelpedpickwatermelons.WhileworkingIrealisedhowharditwastoworkinthefieldsunderahotsun.1．(2020·丽水市检测·应用文写作)当我们爬山时所有人都捡垃圾。Allofuspickeduptherubbishasweclimbedup.→Allofuspickeduptherubbishasweclimbedup，helpingtobeautifythe-3-scenery.(结果描写)2．我有时去村西的小河游泳。Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillagenowandthen.→Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillagenowandthen.Thewaterintheriverisveryclear.(背景渲染)→Weatherpermitting，Iwentswimmingintheriverofthewestofthevillagenowandthen.(相关背景)3．旅行了一周后，他回到了家。Afteraweek'strip，hereturnedhome.→Afteraweek'strip，hereturnedhome，tiredbutveryhappy.(心理描写)[题组过关2]——根据括号内提示完成句子1．________________(考虑到这项活动很有意义)，weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.2．I'lltrymybesttomakeyourunclehappyhere.________________________________________________________________________(我热切地期盼着他来我们城市参观)．3．Atthatmoment，Ibecamethefocusofthewholeclassand______________________(充满了自豪和自信)．4．Finally，Iwouldliketoaskafewquestionsabouthispersonallife，_________________(这一定很有趣)．5．(2019·河北五个一名校联盟·书面表达)_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(从你的信中得知你已被剑桥大学录取)，I'mmorethangladtowritetooffermywarmestcongratulations.答案：1.Consideringtheactivityisofgreatvalue/ismeaningful2．Iameagerlylookingforwardtohisvisittoourcity3．wasfullofgreatprideandconfidence4．whichmustbeveryinteresting5．KnowingyouhavebeenadmittedtotheUniversityofCambridgefromyourletter增加相关信息的时间、地点等内容1．(2019·北京卷·书面表达)在那之后，你可以去上海。Afterthat，youcangotoShanghai.-4-→Afterthat，youcangotoShanghai，whereyoucanstayforaweek.2．(2020·江山市教研二模·应用文写作)作为一个传统，中国学生总是向老师表达感激之情。Chinesestudentsalwaysliketoexpressgratitudetotheirteachersasatradition.→WithTeachers'Dayapproaching，Chinesestudentsalwaysliketoexpressgratitudetotheirteachersasatradition.(增加时间)3．我要和父母一起去超市购物。I'mgoingtodosomeshoppingwithmyparentsinthesupermarket.→I'mgoingtodosomeshoppingwithmyparentsinthesupermarketandwon'tbebackuntilabout5：00intheafternoon.(增加时间)4．我已经带来了你让我归还的两本书。Ihavetakenwithmethetwobooksyouaskedmetoreturn.→IhavetakenwithmethetwobooksyouaskedmetoreturntotheCityLibrary.(增加地点)[题组过关3]——根据括号内提示完成句子1．____________________(几分钟过去了)butthewholeclasswasincompletesilence.2．TheChineseSilkRoad,_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(起源于今天的西安，最后到达……的东海岸)theMediterranean，iswell­knowntotheworld.3．Iwasattractedbythebeautyofthecity________________(一……就……)Iarrivedhereat6o'clockinthemorningbyplane.4．(2020·台州市二模·应用文写作)I'dliketoinviteyoutoattendourclassmeetingnextweek____________________(如果你有空)．答案：1.Severalminutespassed2．whichstartsfromtoday'sXi'anandfinallyfinishesattheeastcoastof3．themoment/immediately/assoonas/directly4．ifyouareavailable适当增加与所给信息相关的原因、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容-5-(2