2018浙江新高考之读后续写continuation-writing

对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑；Tipsforwriting:1.Thoroughreading2.Creativeplotting（构思）3.Swiftdrafting4.Carefulpolishing5.NeatcopyingThepresentReading：Step1：ThoroughReadingOpeningparagraph:Theysaythatbloodisthickerthanwater,thatourrelativesaremoreimportanttousthanothers.Everyonewassokindtotheoldladyonherbirthday.Surelyherdaughterwouldmakeanevenbiggerefforttopleaseher?2.Theoldlady1.others3.herdaughterPara.1-51.Whatdidothersdotopleasetheoldlady?Mrs.MorrisonMrs.GrantJohnnie2.Whatdidtheoldladydotocelebrateher80’sbirthday?Whatdidsheexpect?1.Others:Mrs.Morrison:gavetheflatanextracleanboughtacardandabunchofmarigoldsMrs.Grant:madeacakepreparedtheafternoonteaJohnnie:gaveapacketofmintsofferedtobringupherpresents2.theoldlady:gotupearlytobereadyforthepostputonherbestdressLanguageappreciation:agoodwaytodescribeone’smentalactivities(Para.4)Twospotsofcolorbrightenedhercheeks.Shewasexcitedlikeachild.Shewouldenjoyherday.Shewassoeagertogetapresent.“Apersonwasverynervous.”Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Hewassweatingallover.sheexpected：（Para.6)apresentfamilyaffections;lovefromthedaughter;toberememberedtobeconnected3.Myra,thedaughter（Para.2-3)JudgingfromtheinformationinPara.2-3aboutMyra,whatkindofpersonwasMyra?Keywords：rareoccasionsseldomwrotebusyamedalfortheaged2.Theoldlady1.others3.MyraPuzzle:WouldMyrapleasehermotherorletherdown?Step2：CreativeplottingReminder：Beingcreativedoesn’tmeanyoucanwritewhateveryoulike.Continuationwritingmustbedesignedinalogicalandreasonableway.Andontopofthatbeingcreativewillbeappreciated.logic+creativityTheysay….Everyone…kind…herdaughter...?…rareoccasions……seldom……amedal……bestclothes…excited……Mrs.Morrison…Mrs.Grant…Johnnie...…slipper…cardigan…lamp…Shestoodbythewindow,watching.________________________________________Almostreluctantly(unwillingly)shetoretheenvelopeopen._________________________WouldMyrapleasehermotherorletherdown?Myra？Shestoodbythewindow,watching.____________________________________________________Almostreluctantlyshetoretheenvelopeopen.__________________________________________Useatleast5ofthefollowingwords:please,postman,arrangefor,lovely,parcels,write,birthday,presentsStep3：SwiftdraftingOriginalending:Shestoodbythewindow,watching.Thepostmanturnedroundthecorneronhisbicycle.Herheartbeatfast.Johnniehadseenhimtooandrantothegate.Thenclatter,clatterupthestairs.Johnnieknockedatherdoor.“Granny,granny,”heshouted,“I‘vegotyourpost.”Hegaveherfourenvelopes.Threewereunsealedcardsfromoldfriends.Thefourthwassealed,inMyra’swriting.Theoldladyfeltapangofdisappointment.“Noparcel,Johnnie?”“No,granny.”Maybetheparcelwastoolargetocomebyletterpost.Thatwasit.Itwouldcomelaterbyparcelpost.Shemustbepatient.Almostreluctantlyshetoretheenvelopeopen.Foldedinthecardwasapieceofpaper.WrittenonthecardwasamessageundertheprintedHappyBirthday—Buyyourselfsomethingnicewiththecheque,MyraandHarold.Thechequeflutteredtothefloorlikeabirdwithabrokenwing.Slowlytheoldladystoopedtopickitup.Herpresent,herlovelypresent.Withtremblingfingersshetoreitintolittlebits.Summary:1.Whatthebestcontinuationarticlesarelikecontent；language2.Suggestedprocedureforwriting;Tipsforwriting:1.Thoroughreading：2.Creativeplotting3.Swiftdrafting4.Carefulpolishing5.Neatcopying3.Aquestiontoponder:“Howtotreatourparents”“Listentoyourfather,whogaveyoulife,anddonotlookdownuponyourmotherwhensheisold.”BibleProverbs23:22我的续写思路基于以下几点：标题是礼物，这个礼物在文章末尾以怎么样的形式出现必然是文章高潮部分；血浓于水。每个周围的人都对这个老太那么好，这个女儿会做更大的努力让妈妈高兴吗？开篇留下这样的悬念，当然可以是悲剧结尾，也可以是大团圆结局。老太的女儿的工作跟老年人有关，而因此得到一个奖项，我们可以把此点理解成一种讽刺。也可以为我要写的结局埋下伏笔。Shestoodbythewindow,watching.Thepostmancameasusual.Theoldlady’sheartbeatwildly.Howshewishedforaspecialpresentfromherdaughter!Thencametheknock.TherewasJohnnie,withseveralenvelopes.Noparcelsatall!Herheartsank!Shescannedtheenvelopesswiftly,mostofwhichwerebirthdaycardsfromherlifelongfriends.Thenshepickedouttheonefromherdaughter.Almostreluctantlyshetoretheenvelopeopen.“Dearmum,sorrytohaveletyoudownsomanytimeswhetheronyourbirthdaysorotheroccasions.Igotamedalformyworkfortheaged,butIdon’tthinkIdeserveit.ForsolongI’veneglectedthemostlovelyagedpersoninmylife,whoneedsmycareandcompany.Iknowit’stimeto…”Readingtheletter,theoldladycouldn’thelpbutsob.Tearsrandownhercheeksanddroppedontotheletter.Justatthatmoment,familiarstepsdrewcloserandwithoutdoubt,theoldladyknewthathermostcherishedpresentwasfinallycoming.学生作品:版本1Shestoodbythewindow,watching.Itseemedasifshehadbeenstandingthereforacentury,thereappearedapostmaninthedistance.Theoldladywassoexcitedthatherheartfaster.Thensheheardsomeonerunupstairsandknockatthedoor，“Granny,it’sme,Johnnie.I’vegotyourletter.”“Letter?”Theoldladyasked,quicklywalkingtowardsthedoor.Almostreluctantlyshetoretheenvelopeopen.However,therewasonlyachequeandapaperlyingthere,whichsaid,“Mom,I’msorryIcan’tcometoaccompanyyouonyourbirthday.Buysomethingyoulikewiththecheque.HappyBirthday.”Thepoorladyputthembackintotheenvelope,withherhandstremblingandtearsrunningdownhercheeks.学生作品:版本2Shestoodby