2015届初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选一

12015届初三上英语单元考试优秀作文选一101-102题目：你对你现在居住的城市（乡村）满意吗？请从环境、人口等方面，说说你理想中的家园。（80词左右）初三1班黄润萍Iliveinabeautifulcity,Quanzhou.Mycityhasalonghistoryandmanyplacesofinterest.However,Iamnotpleasedwithit.ThenaturalenvironmentsarebecomingworseandworsebecauseofthepollutioninQuanzhou.Idreamaboutahomelikethis:first,itisclosetonatureandsurroundedbytrees.Second,ithasapopulationof500.Peoplearefriendlytoeachotherlikeabigfamily.Last,peoplecanbecarefulwithgarbageanddiscouragecuttingtreestoprotecttheenvironment.Ibelievemydreamwillcometrueinthefuture.Doyouwanttoliveinmydreamhome?教师点评：1、本篇文章条理清晰，巧用过渡句：“Idreamaboutahomelikethis”。2、主次分明，结构合理，紧扣题目要求，更多地描述自己理想中的家园。初三2班杨浩IliveinQuanzhou,asmallcityinFujianProvince.Thankstotheexcellentpublictransportation,itisveryconvenientforpeopletoliveinsuchasmallcity.SoIamquitesatisfiedwiththelivingconditionsinmycity.Butitistruethattherearemanyproblemsinmycity.SoIdreamthatIcanliveinaquietcity.Theenvironmentshouldbemuchbetter.Forinstance,thetreesandgrasshadbettercoverover20%ofthecity.What’smore,thepopulationthereshouldneverbetoolargeortoosmallsothatthetrafficwillnotbeheavyandIwon’tfeellonely.Ifthereisacitylikethis,Iwillbequitehappytolivethereinthefuture.教师点评：1、本篇文章行文流畅，很好地利用所学知识阐述自己的观点。2、善于运用一些复合句，关联词语，使文章显得更加充实和丰满。C三3班林滟雯IliveinabeautifulcoastcitycalledQuanzhou.Ithasalreadybecomegood,①butIexpectmore.②Inmyopinion,areallygreatcityshouldbelikethis.Thereisnopollution,justblueskyhugsthewholecitywithgreengrasseverywhere.Thepopulationofthecityisn’ttoolargeortoosmall.Thetrafficisn’tbusy,sotherewon’tbecrazysituationsinrushhours.Everypersonhereisniceandfriendlyandtheyalwayssmilewithsatisfaction.That’swhatIhaveinmind.It’strulyagreatplacetolive.教师点评：1、本文叙述流畅，衔接自然，巧用①句，委婉表达对所居住城市的态度，承上启下。2、第二段开头使用②句，引出自己的心目中的理想家园。3、能正确使用一些课外词汇（如：coastcity海滨城市，expect期盼，hug拥抱，rushhours高峰期，satisfaction.满意，haveinmind想到，考虑到），这些词增强了文章的表现力，使之脱颖而出。小小一篇文章足以证明作者丰富的词汇量。2C三4班许晓蕾IliveinQuanzhou,asmallcityinChina,butIdon’tlikeitbecauseofthelargepopulationandterribletraffic.Idreamaboutlivinginasmalltown.Inthistown,theairisfresh.Riversandroadsareprettyclean.Youcanevenseestarsintheskyeverynight.But①themostimportantthingisthepopulationofthistownmustbeverysmall.②Thelargerpopulationithas,themoresocialproblemstherewillbe.Besides,Ithinkthepublictransportationshouldbeexcellent.③Ihopetoliveinaplacewhichhasfewaccidents.④Nomatterwherewelive,weshouldliveinthepresent.Let’sdoourbesttomakeourdreamplacecometrue.教师点评：1、本文条理清晰，内容紧扣主题，从环境、人口、交通等方面描述自己的理想家园。2、正确地使用了各种复杂句型,如表语从句：①句；“the+比较级,the+比较级”的句式：②句；定语从句：③句；让步状语从句：④句，这些都是亮点，为文章画龙点睛。初三年5班王哲轶Myhometownisreallydifferentfromitwasbefore.Ithasmadegreatprogress.Anyway,I’mstillnotsatisfiedwithit.Myfavoritecityshouldhaveasmallpopulation,becausethenoisecausedbythelargepopulationalwaysmakesmemad.What’smore,thecityisfilledwithbeautifulflowersandtreeswithbeesdancingandbirdssinging.Then,Icanwalkalongtheriverbanktoenjoythefreshairandthebeautifulview.IfIcanliveinsuchapleasantcity,myheartwillbefullofhappiness.教师点评：本文紧扣主题，详略得当，观点明确。其中也出现不少优美词句，巧妙勾勒出作者心目中的美好家园，给读者呈现一个美好画面。值得借鉴。初三6班曾鸿铭IliveinCizao,asmalltowninQuanzhou.①ButIdon’treallyenjoythelifeinCizao,becausethepopulationislargeandtheroadsarecrowdedthere.What’sworse,theroadsarenotsmoothatall.②ThetownwhichIlikemusthaveasmallpopulationwithfreshairandsmoothroads.Thetrafficshouldnotbetoobadand（the）publictransportationshouldbeexcellent.Peoplecanhaveawalkafterdinner,enjoyingthefreshairandwedon’thavetoworryaboutthebadtrafficanylonger.③That’sthecitythatIreallywanttolivein.Ihopemydreamcancometrueoneday.教师点评：本文结构清晰，内容完整，过渡自然；全文连贯、通顺；①句表明观点②二句的开头过渡到本文的主体。③句点题。文章语言朴实无华，但却清楚明了，不失为一篇好文章。初三7班庄煜权MyhometownisQuanzhou.I’msatisfiedwithitbecausethenaturalenvironmenthereiswonderful.However,it’snottheplaceIlikebest.Inmyopinion,theairshouldbefreshandtheriversshouldbecleaninmydreamcity.The3publictransportationshouldbeexcellentandfewerthanonethousandpeoplelivethere.What’smore,peopleinthecityshouldbefriendlytoeachother.That’smydreamcity.IhopemyhometowncanbeasexcellentasthecityIdreamabout.教师点评：本文条理清晰，过渡自然，不拖沓，重点描述理想中的家园。适当地使用了复合句（划横线的句子）。初三8班林益涛Iliveinawell-knowncity,Quanzhou.ButIdon’tlikeitbecausethepublictransportationhereisterrible.It’snotawonderfulplacetolive.Ihopethewonderfulcitytoliveinshouldbelikethis.Theairthereshouldbecleanandfresh.Thegovernmentshouldcarryouttheone-childpolicytocontrolthepopulationbecausethelargepopulationmaycausemanysocialproblems.Moreandmoreringroadsandsubwayswillappearsothatpeoplecangotoworkeasily.Ihopemydreamwillcometrueoneday!教师点评：本文明确地表达了自己的观点，在第二段的开头自然简洁地过渡到描述自己理想中的家园。文中划线的句子比较精彩，用了because引导的原因状语从句和sothat引导的目的状语从句。初三9班尤煜楷IhavelivedinthecitycalledQuanzhousinceIwasborn.Thiscityisfullofcultureandbeautifulthings.Buttherearealsosomeproblems.Thetrafficandnaturalenvironmentshavebecomemuchworsethanbeforebecausethepopulationhereisgrowingfaster.SonowIamnotsopleasedwithitasbefore.Mydreamcityisextremelypleasant,likethecitiesinEuropeancountries.Itdoesn’thavetoomanypeopleandthetrafficthereisconvenient.Andthenaturalenvironmentsthereareundertheprotectionofgovernment.Besides,everyonecanenjoyg