2016年北京高考英语作文阅卷思考

2016年高考阅卷思考小作文2016-07-11周义夫一、阅卷情况二、问题聚焦三、几点启示一、阅卷情况假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他对中国历史很感兴趣，并请你介绍一位你喜欢的中国历史人物。请你给Jim回信，内容包括：1.该人物是谁；2.该人物的主要贡献；3.该人物对你的影响。注意：1.词数不少于50；2.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。DearJim,_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiHuaDearJim,很激动得直你对中国传统文化感兴趣，我写信和你分享我最喜欢的历史人物。讲到我最喜欢的历史人物，那一定是魏源，清朝晚期的一个思想家。在他的书海国图志中，他介绍了先进的技术和理念到中国。打开了世界的眼界。他对我的影响很大。他激励我在大学学英语，搭建中国和世界额的桥梁。DearJim,It’sgreattohearfromyou.IfeelproudknowingyourinterestinChinesehistory.AsformyfavoritefigureinChinesehistory,itmustbeWeiYuan,agreatthinkerinthelateQingDynasty.He,inhisbook,HaiguoTuzhi(MapsandRecordsoftheWorld),introducedmoderntechnologiesandideastoChina.Thatopenedoureyestotheworld.Infact,heinspiresmetomajorinEnglishincollege,tobeabridgebetweenChinaandtheworld.Interestedinknowingmore?Icanfindyousomebooks!Justletmeknow.（89w)Cheers!Yours,LiHua•一、评分原则：•1、本题总分15分，按4个档次给分。•2、评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以档次的要求来衡量，确定或降低档次，最后给分。•3、评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。•4、拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可以接受。•5、词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。•二、内容要点：•1.该人物是谁；2.该人物的主要贡献；3.该人物对你的影响。1.内容须完整,贡献和对你的影响要求很模糊.顺序不固定，侧重点可不同，贡献和影响可揉在一起写。人物有明显的错误减一分。2.开头结尾可不抄答题卡上,不计格式.3.应用文为了应用与交际,淡化细节概念.细节不是必须的,只为更连贯.满50字后不以字数影响定档。4.同类语法错误按一处处理；同一个词的拼写错误算一处处理。5.要敢于给高分.选拔性考试,不是水平性考试6.注意文章的交际性及交际的合理性。开头结尾最容易，中间如能自然巧妙使用往往有奇效。没有会减一分。高考阅卷特点：1.时间短；2.速度快；4.给分分四挡，分差两分内取平均值。3.老师的心理状态：给分中庸第一档(13分--15分)完全完成了试题规定的任务。内容完整，条理清楚；交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现出较强的语言运用能力。完全达到了预期的写作目的。DearJim,Howiseverythinggoing?IamexcitedtoknowthatyouhavegreatinterestinChinesehistoryandIamwritingtointroduceoneofmyfavoritecharacterstoyou.•HisnameisLuxun.Asamatteroffact,heisoneofthemostfamousnovelistsinChina,andhewasalsoagreatteacheraswell.HewitnessedthechangesofChinaduring2othcenturyandreflectedalot.•AsabraveChinese,heusedhispenasaweapontorevealthedarknessofthesociety,withhisnovels,heinspiredtheyouthtorediscovertheimportance•ofdistinguishingrightandwrong,justiceandevil.ItwashiscompositionsthathelpedChinesepeopletofindapurposeandfightforfreedom.Havingreadmanyofhisbooks,Iwasgreatlyinspiredbyhiswisdom.Istartedtogaintheabilityofindependentthinking.SoIcanfollowmyheartinsteadoffollowingotherswhenfacingdifficulties.Besides,Iwasinspiredtowritemyownnovelsanditturnedouttobeasuccess.So,thisismysharingofLuxun,andI’mlookingforwardtoyourreply.))DearJim，Howiseverythinggoingon?IwasmorethanpleasanttohearthatyouhadadeepaffectionforChinesehistory.Iamnowwritingtointroducemyadmirablehistoricalpersontoyou.Lishimin,well-knownasTangTaizong,wasagreatemperorofTangdynasty.Unlikeothercrueldominants,helovedandcaredforhiscitizensfromheart,whichtouchedmealot.Tobettertheirlives,hedecreasedtaxesandsparednoeffortstopromoteagriculture.Besideseconomy,heemphasizedoncultureandeducation.HedevelopedKejuzhi,asimilarexaminationsystemasGaokao,puttingChinesecultureforwardalot.Itwashisdiligenceandintelligencethatcreatedtheprosperous“zhiguanzhizhi”.•AlthoughIamjustastudent,Ilearnedalotfromhim:beingmodestandlisteningtoother’sviewsarekeystosuccess.Moreover,Ishouldtakeresponsibilityformycountryanddomybittomakeitbetter.•Thisismyfavoritehero,ifyouareeagertolearnmoreaboutChineseprofoundhistory,pleasefeelfreetocontactme.Ienjoysharingitwithyou.Dearjim,KnowingthatyouareinterestedinChinesehistory,I’mwritingtointroduceafamousmantoyou.HeisCaocao,theleaderofWei.Atthattime,theroyalpeopletookfoodandtreasuresfromthefarmersandbusinessmen,whenthesituationbecameserious,hestoodout,leadingpoorpeopletofightback.Thatwaswhereheamazedme.Hewasfullofjusticeandhadadesiretobringpeopleapeacefullife.IwasmovedbyhisspiritandIalwaysthinkothersfirst,helpingthemandevenfightingforthem.Whataboutyou?Whoisyourfavoritehistoricalfigure?Lookingforwardtoyourreplyandshare.DearJim,ＩamverygladtohearthatyouareintriguedinChinesehistoryandIwouldliketotellyoumyfavoritefigureasareply.AsfarasIamconcerned,Libaiismyfavorite.RegardedasoneofthegreatestpoetsinChina,hisworksundoubtedlyanddramaticlypromotedthedevelopmentofthestyleofromance.Inspiredbyhisfascinateimaginationandprofoundexaggeration.IoftenfeelIaminterestedinafantasticworldofintricacyandfantasy.Franklyspeaking,IlearnedtheartofChinesecharactersfromhisbreathtakingworksandbegantostudyChinesehistory.HopefullyyoucouldgainbenefitsfrommyintroductionandIwillbepleasantifitcanigniteyourdeeperpassionforChinesehistory.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.DearJim,IamsohappytohearthatyouareinterestedinChinesehistory.I’dliketosharesomethingaboutmyfavoritehistoricalpersonwithyou.HisnameisQuYuan,bornintheancientageofChina.Hewasfamousforhismasterpieces.Untilnow,manypeoplecouldrecitesomepoemshewrote.Hislovetothecountryleftmeadeepimpressionandmademelovemycountryfrommydeepheart.IfyouwanttoknowmoreinformationaboutChinesehistory,youcanwritetome.I’mlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.第二档（9分--12分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。内容、条理和交际等方面基本符合要求；所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求；语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本达到了预期的写作目的。DearJim,Therearemanyfamouspeopleinthe