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Howtopolishoursentences?怎么写“高大上”的英语作文英语组韦敏Warmingup每日一读PageWarmingup每日一读Teamwork假如你是老师，请给这两篇作文打分1.Markthetwocompositions.2.Whichcompositionisbetter?3.Whatmakesthecompositionbetter?档次规定任务覆盖内容要点语法结构、词汇复杂结构、高级词汇连接成分与结构写作目的完成情况第五档（21—25分）完全完成覆盖所有应用较多尽力使用（语法结构或词汇有些许错误）有效使用连接全文结构紧凑完全达到第四档（16—20分）完成覆盖所有，漏掉有一两个次要点满足要求语法结构或词汇方面基本准确简单使用连接全文结构紧凑达到第三档（11—15分）基本完成覆盖所有，但漏掉一些内容满足要求语法结构或词汇方面的错误有一些，但不影响理解简单使用连接全文内容连贯基本达到第二档（6—10分）未恰当完成漏掉一些主要内容，写了无关内容语法单调，词汇有限语法结构或词汇方面的错误有一些，影响对写作内容的理解较少使用连接成分，内容缺少连贯信息未能清楚地传达给读者第一档（1—5分）未完成明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容语法单调，词汇有限语法结构或词汇方面的错误较多，影响对写作内容的理解缺乏连接成分，内容不连贯信息未能传达给读者第零档与要点内容无关内容太少无无未能传达任何信息1.很多动物濒临灭绝。◆Manyanimalsareendangered.(王浩然)◆Alargenumberofanimalsareonthebrickofextinction.(廖一鸣)◆Therearemoreandmoreanimalsfacingtheproblemofdyingout.(杨柳)◆Nowadays,thereexistsanincreasinglyseriousproblemthatmoreandmoreanimalsarefacedwiththeriskofdyingout.(曾妮)2.人类的行为对他们有很坏的影响。◆Humanactivitieshaveabadinfluenceonthem.(殷萍皓)◆There’snodoubtthatitishumanactivitiesthathaveabadimpactonthem.(王炜铭)◆Itgoeswithoutsayingthatpeoplehavedestroyedthebalanceofnature,whichhasanegativeeffectonthem.(范欢)◆Itissaidthatpeople’sactivitieshaveabadinfluenceonthem,makingthenumberofanimalsdecline.(雷丁菱)3.是时候做些事来解决这个问题。◆It’stimetodosomethingtosolvetheproblem.(杨逸轩)◆It’sessentialandurgentforustotakesomemeasurestosolvetheissue.(邓婕)◆It’shightimethateffectivemeasuresshouldbetakentosettletheproblem.(黄郡如)◆Confrontedwiththeproblem,weshouldtakeaseriesofeffectivemeasurestocopewiththesituation.(罗佳)4.只有这样我们才能有美好的明天。◆Wecanhaveabrightfutureinthisway.(唐雷)◆Noonecandenythefactthatonlyinthiswaycanwebuildaharmoniousworld.(胡琳)◆Inaword,onlyinthiswaycanweliveinharmonywithnature,whichcanmakeadifferencetoourfuture.(许明星)◆Ifirmlybelievethatifwesparenoefforttodowhatwecantoprotectanimals,we’llhaveabrillianttomorrow.(李丽莎)Summary（归纳总结）Howtopolishoursentences?如何让你作文瞬间变得“高大上”?一.化妆篇Make-up1.短语优先，如：like—think—important—should—2.单词升级，如：thankyou—begrateful/thankfultosb.expressmythanks/gratitudefor…payattentionto—beautiful—appealing/fascinatingIbelieve—befondofholdtheviewofvitalimportancebesupposedtoattachimportancetoIamgreatlyconvincedthat3.恰当使用过渡词汇或句子，如◆Itissaid/believed/estimatedthat…◆Thereisnodoubtthat…/Noonecandenythefactthat…◆asfarassbbeconcerned/fromwhereIstand◆Asisknowntousall…/Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…◆Thereexistsanincreasinglyseriousproblemthat…二.整容篇CosmeticSurgery★从句的妙用1.用非限制性定语从句Manystudentsspendalotoftimeplayingcomputergames,whichisawasteoftimeandenergy.2.宾语从句I’lldowhatIcantohelpyou.3.状语从句ThebookissointerestingthatIamlostinit.★特殊句型1.巧用倒装句YoucanlearnEnglishwellinthisway.learnEnglishwell.2.适当运用感叹句Itwasanunfortabletrip.anunforgetabletripitwas!3.用强调句Imethiminthestreet.inthestreetImethim.OnlyinthiswaycanyouWhatItisthat附送小彩蛋★用nomatter结构Thejourneyistough,butIwillnevergiveup.Nomatterhowtoughitis,Iwillnevergiveup.★虚拟语气Withoutyourhelp,Icouldn’thavemadesuchprogress.Game(句子接龙)1.我相信阅读很重要。Ibelievereadingisimportant.2.我们应该尽全力为每次考试做好准备。Weshouldtrytoprepareforeveryexam.Exercise（巩固练习）Trytorewritethecomposition.GroupAssignment(任务分工)1.同义单词短语替换2.过渡词汇，句子应用3.句子结构转换