读后续写The-Hidden-Treasure(公开课)(2)(1)

ContinuationWriting读后续写1.Readforbasicinformation.(W&H,tone,style)2.Readforplotsandemotionaldevelopment.3.Predictandinferpossibleplotdevelopment.(theunderlinedwords,thefirstsentenceofthetwocontinuedparagraphs.)4.Draftacontinuationswiftly.5.Polishyourwriting.Treasurepositiveattitudefriendshipmoneyjewelryloveknowledge41.Readforbasicinformation1)What’sthestyleofthecontext?A.NarrationB.ArgumentationC.ExpositionNarrationAstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhat52)Readfor5W&Honesummerday...(firstmet)astimewentby...(frequentlytouch)oneday...(deeplytalk)soon...(goodfriends)Whoarethecharactersinvolved?OldManDonovan,AnnandI,andhisfamily.Readthetitleandpredictthetone.Whatwasthehiddentreasure?thekind,sweetheart3)ReadfortonefullofwarmthandkindnesspositiveReadforplotsandemotionaldevelopmentPara.1---3fruitdrawn...stolereactrumorWewereinfluencedWehelda________attitudetohimnegative1.Howdidwegobackhomethatday?2.Howdidwefeelwhenhestoppedus?Para.4--53.Howdidwefeelwhenheofferedusapples?Wewenthomethroughhisfarm.Wewereextremely__________.frightenedWefeltquite_________.surprisedPara.61.Whatdidwedotogetherastimewenton?(1)Hekepton…(2)Wetalkedtohimforhours.Wewereimpressedwithhimby_____________.communication2.Unfortunately,hisfamilyneverseemedtoenjoyourcompany.Theyneversmiledorwelcomedusin.Itcanbeinferredthathisfamilyhada_______attitudetowardsus.negativepositiveWhy?wefrightenedsurprisedfriendlysweet,kindheartOldManrumorsmisunderstoodexperiencegottoknowcommunicationunderstoodWetooka_________attitudetowardsOldManDonovan.positiveWhatcanwelearnfromthetext?Don'tjudgeaheartuntilyouknowit.Thinking时空线情节线情感线ReadtheunderlinedwordsforcreationTip:将10个下划线词当成下棋的棋子，将它们摆一摆，看看他们在续写故事中的几种情节发展的可能性。summerOldManDonova,farmmysisterandI,fruit,company，hisfamily,welcomehiddentreasurekindheartReadthefirstsentencesofthetwocontinuedparagraphsforcreation.Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMrDonovanandtalktohim..........Para8:Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhaddied.WeMr.DonovanWeHisfamilyweWeHisfamilysad/concerned1.Onhearingthenews,howwouldmysisterandIfeel?2.Whatdidwedoandsee?3.Whataboutthefamily'sreaction.4.Deepenthethemespirit/kindhearttalkwhat,dowhatfruit...ill/falldown...ourreaction...hisfamily1.Whatdidtheytalkanddo2.Whathappenedto3.What'stheirreaction4.Whatabouttheattitudeofhisfamily?Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para8:Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhaddied.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Possibleversion:DraftPara7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedourschoollifewithhimandhegaveusfruittoeat.Hearingustalkingaboutthelife,hesmiled.Onesummerday,weknewthathewasdiagnosedwiththroatcancer.Wewenttohospital.Hisfamilyfriendlywelcomedusandtoldushisillness.Hopefully,hewouldrecoverlater.Para8:Thenextwinter,wordgotaroundthatOldManDonovanhaddied.Hearingthebadnews,mysisterandIfeltreallysadanddecidedtogotothefuneral.Whenwearrived,wesawlotsofpeoplefromtheneighborhood.Thefamilygreetedus.Atthemoment,wehadtosaygoodbyetoMr.Donovan,ourfriend,forever,butourmemoriesofhimwouldremain.Possibleversion:Draft•Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedourschoollifewithhimandhegaveusfruittoeat.Hearingustalkingaboutthelife,hesmiled.Onesummerday,wewereinformedthathewasdiagnosedwiththroatcancer.Werushedtohospital.Hisfamilyfriendlywelcomedusandtoldushisillness.Hopefully,hewouldrecoverlater.PolishyourwritingWhilelistening,hehandedoutlusciousfruittousasusual.Watchinguseatingquickly,healwayspattedonourheads,sayinggently,“Nohurry.Takeyourtime！”语言描写Polishyourwriting•Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedourschoollifewithhim.Hearingustalkingaboutthelife,hesmiled.Onesummerday,wewereinformedthathewasdiagnosedwiththroatcancer.Werushedtohospital.Hisfamilyfriendlywelcomedusandtoldushisillness.Hopefully,hewouldrecoverlatercolorful,interstingrich,busychuckle(抿嘴笑)giggle(咯咯笑)grin(露齿笑)laugh(哈哈大笑)副词修饰动作smilebrightly•Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedourschoollifewithhimandhegaveusfruittoeat.Hearingustalkingaboutthelife,hesmiled.Onesummerday,weknewthathewasdiagnosedwiththroatcancer.Wewenttohospital.Hisfamilyfriendlywelcomedusandtoldushisillness.Hopefully,hewouldrecoverlater.wereinformed动作描写体现急迫心情Polishyourwriting被动语态动作传情比直叙好太多。remembernottotell,buttoshow.comestraighttorushracePolishyourwriting•Para7:Everysummer,wewouldvisitMr.Donovanandtalktohim.Wesharedourschoollifewithhim.Whilelistening,hehandedoutlusciousfruittousasusual.Watchinguseatingquickly,healwayspattedonourheads,sayinggently,“Nohurry.Takeyourtime！”Hearingustalkingaboutthelife,hesmiled.Onesummerday,wewerein