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PracticeinUsingtheFourBasesYouarenowfamiliarwithfourstandards,orbases,ofeffectivewriting:unity,support,coherence,andsentenceskills.Inthissectionyouwillexpandandstrengthenyourunderstandingofthefourbasesasyouevaluateandreviseessaysforeachofthem.UnityBothofthefollowingessayscontainirrelevantsentencesthatdonotrelatetothethesisoftheessayorsupportthetopicsentenceoftheparagraphinwhichtheyappear.Crossouttheirrelevantsentencesandwritethenumbersofthosesentencesinthespacesprovided.PlayingontheBrownsEssay111Forthepastthreesummers,IhaveplayedfirstbaseonasoftballteamknownastheBrowns.2Weplayalongschedule,includingplayoffs,andeverybodytakesthegamesprettyseriously.3Inthatrespect,we'renodifferentfromanyotherofthethousandorsoteamsinourcity.4Butinonerespect,wearedifferent.5Inanall-maleleague,wehaveawomanontheteam—me.6ThusI'vehadachancetoobservesomethingabouthumannaturebyseeinghowthemenhavetreatedme.7Somehavebeendisbelieving;somehavebeenpatronizing;and,fortunately,somehavesimplyacceptedme.28Onenewteamintheleaguewasparticularlyflabbergastedtoseemestartthegameatfirstbase.9NobodyontheCometshadcommentedonewayortheotherwhenhesawmewarmingup,butplayingintheactualgamewasanotherstory.10TheComets’first-basecoachleanedovertomewithadisbelievinggrinandsaid,“Youmean,you'restarting,andthosethreeguysareonthebench?”11Inoddedandheshrugged,stillamazed.12HeprobablythoughtIwasthemanager'swife.13WhenIcameuptobat,theCometpitchersmiledandcalledtohisoutfielderstomovewayinonme.14Now,Idon'thavealotofpower,butI'mnotexactlyfeeble.15Iusedtoworkoutontheexercisemachinesatalocalhealthclubuntilitclosed,andnowIliftweightsathomeacoupleoftimesaweek.16Iwipedthesmirksofftheirfaceswithalinedrivedoubleovertheleftfielder'shead.Thenumberoftheirrelevantsentence:15317Thenextgame,weplayedanothernewteam,theArgyles,andtheirattitudewaspatronizing.18TheArgyleshadseenmetakebattingpractice,sotheydidn'tdoanythingsorashastodrawtheiroutfieldwayin.19Theyhadrespectformyabilityasaplayer.20However,theytriedtoannoymewithphonyconcern.21Forexample,aredheadedArgylegotonbaseinthefirstinningandsaidtome,“You'dbetterbecareful,hon.22Whenyouhaveyourfootonthebag,somebodymightsteponit.23Youcangethurtinthisgame.”24Iwasmad,butIhaveworkedouseveralmentaltechniquestocontrolmyangerbecauseitinterfereswithmyplayingability.25Well,thisdelicatelittlegirlsurvivedtheseasonwithoutinjury,whichismorethanIcansayforsomeofthehe-menontheArgyles.Thenumberoftheirrelevantsentence:24426Happily,mostoftheteamsintheleaguehaveacceptedme,justastheBrownsdid.27ThemenontheBrownscoachedandcriticizedme(andoccasionallycursedme)justlikeanyoneelse.28BecauseI'mareligiousperson,Idon'tapproveofcursing,butIdon'tsayanythingaboutittomyteammates.29TheyarenotamazedwhenIgetahitorstretchforawidethrow.30Myaveragethisyearwashigherthantheaveragesofseveralofmyteammates,yetnoneofthemactedresentfulorthreatened.31OnseveraloccasionsIwastakenoutlateinagameforapinchrunner,butotherslowplayersontheteamwerealsoliftedattimesforpinchrunners.32EverywomanshouldhaveateamliketheBrowns!Thenumberoftheirrelevantsentence:28533BecauseIreallyhadproblemsonlywiththenewteams,I'veconcludedthatit'swhenpeoplearefacedwithanunfamiliarsituationthattheyreactdefensively.34Oncearivalteamhasgottenusedtoseeingmeonthefield,I'mnobigdeal.35Still,IsuspectthattheBrownssecretlyfeelwe'realittlespecial.36Afterall,wewonthechampionshipwithawomanontheteam.HowtoConanInstructorEssay211Entercollege,andyou'llsoonberemindedoftheoldsaying“Thepenismightierthanthesword.”2Thatpersonbehindtheinstructor'sdeskholdsyourfutureinhisorherink-stainedhands.3Soyourfirstimportantassignmentincollegehasnothingtodowithrequiredreadings,examinations,oreventhehazardsofregistration.4Itis,instead,howtoconaninstructor.25Thefirststepinconninganinstructoristousebodylanguage.6Youmaybeabletoconvinceyourinstructorthatyouarespecialwithoutevensayingaword.7Whenyouentertheclassroom,besuretositinthefrontrow.8Thatway,theinstructorcan'tpossiblymissyou.9Then,astheinstructorlectures,takenotesfrantically.10Theinstructorwillbeflatteredthatyouthinksomuchofhisorherwordsthatyouwanttowritethemalldown.11Afelt-tippenissuperiortoapenorpencil;itwillhelpyouwritefasterandpreventachingwrists.12Whileyouarewriting,besuretosmileattheinstructor'sjokesandnodviolentlyinagreementwitheverymajorpoint.13Mostimportant,asclasscontinues,sitwithyourbodypitchedforwardandyoureyeswideopen,fixedfirmly,asifhypnotized,onyourinstructor'sface.14Makeyourwholebodysuggestthatyouarewatchingastar.Thenumberoftheirrelevantsentence:11315Onceyouhavemasteredbodylanguage,itistimetomoveontothesecondphaseofconningtheinstructor:classparticipation.16Everyoneknowsthatthestudentwhoismosteagertolearnistheonewhorespondstothequestionsthatareaskedandevencomesupwithafewmore.17Therefore,besuretoberesponsive.18Questionssuchas“HowdoesthisaffectthefutureoftheUnitedStates?”or“Don'tyouthinkthatsomedayallthiswillbedonebycomputer?”canbeusedinanyclasswithoutpriorknowledgeofthesubjectmatter.19Manystudents,especiallyinlargeclasses,getlostinthecrowdandneverdoanythingtomakethemselvesstandout:20Anothergo