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seemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn'tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.答案[写作提示]根据续写第一段所给的段首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.可知,本段应该主要描写突然出现一只小兔子之后的故事。按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让马受惊。故本段应该描写马受惊后发生的事。从第二段的段首句Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.可以看出,作者和父亲迷路了。那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开。本段的主要内容应该是从迷路到回家的故事。写作时一定要注意以下两点:第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二段是迷路之后的故事,因此要注意人物心理和情感的描写。第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。要注意第一段的内容,尤其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句之间的衔接要合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidn'tknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!精彩语句1.精美词汇invain白费力气previousadj.之前的atthepointofdesperation将要绝望之际afaintvoice微弱的声音2.出彩结构①FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.(部分倒装)②Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.(what引导主语从句)Writing2(2017浙江11月)阅读下面短文.根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother-loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtrav-eler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后.请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.答案Paragraph1：Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwebroughtwithus.Wedecidedtocampalongtheriver.Theviewsthereweresurpassinglybeautiful——thewarmsunshine,thefreshair,thecleanwater.Wesatonthegrass,enjoyingthesplendidnature.However,whenDadwasabouttoputupourtent,hewasdisappointedtofindthatithadbeenleftinthehotel.Well,Dadhadtogobacktofetchittocontinueourcamping.Paragraph2：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofsightsalongtheway.Everytimewegottoanewplace,Momwouldcheeruplikeachild.Shewouldgetoffthecarexcitedly,laughinganddancingaround.Togetherweenjoyedthemodernsightsinthebigcities,thehistoricalbuildingsinthesmalltownsandtheamazingsceneryinnature.Whenwecamebacktothehotelafterthetiringbutexcellentvisit,Momwouldhugusandkissusonourfaces.Howsweetshewas!Absent-mindedandforgetfulasshewas,sheneverforgottoexpressherlovetous.Writing3(2017浙江6月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,butth