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[解题技巧]审题：在落笔前花两分钟时间进行思考，可以利于理清行文思路，避免差之毫厘、失之千里。卷面：作为作文这种主观题来讲，我们与阅卷老师是彼此互动、相互影响的一个整体，我们可以做的，首先是通过卷面给阅卷老师下意识地传达这个信息。用笔的颜色（深蓝色使人心情放松愉快）、粗细（粗线条给人以安全感），整齐划一的格式（段首或一律顶格或一律空两格），明了的段落感（每段空一行），清晰的字数感（一行以十字位宜），工整的字迹都会给任何阅读者留下深刻的正面印象，从而使我们先发制人、取得先机。表达：言之无文，行而不远。语言作为评分原则中的基本要素之一，在作文评分的整个过程中具有决定性作用。有评分老师甚至断言：“Itisnotwhatyousay，itisthewaythatyousayit.”（重要的并不在于我们写了些什么，而在于我们是怎么表达的。）“Givethemonkeyexactlywhathewants.”（给阅卷老师最想要的。）。检查：行百里者半九十。一篇成功的作文少不了反复推敲、一再修改。然而，由于考试时间和条件等诸多因素的限制，我们绝对需要慎重对待作文的检查和修改。我们们必须明确：考试作文的润色和修改只需要达到三个目的即可：1.拼写正确，看文章中是否有多余符号、糊乱涂改、划线、和错别字；2.搭配正确；3.语法正确，特别是人称、时态、和单复数的三“一致”。书面表达：某报纸有一讨论的栏目，讨论的主题是goodhealth,学生、家长、老师等对此看法不一。请你根据以下提示写一短文，发表你自己的看法，一定要从以下角度去写：1.健康的重要性:毫无疑问,健康与我们的幸福密不可分.不管你是谁,只有拥有健康的体魄,才能享受生活的乐趣和成功的喜悦.2.保持身体健康的方法:进行体育锻炼,合理的饮食习惯,乐观的态度.3.我是这样做的:经常打篮球,吃好睡好,勇敢面对生活.要求:词数：100左右；注意语句连贯；不要逐句翻译。[实战演习][思维导航]：这是一篇典型的提纲式作文，它是让你对某一现象发表自己的看法。要求中的三个提纲给出了文章的框架，一定要用过渡词把它们衔接起来构成一篇完整的文章。行文应用一般现在时。Keywords:goodhealth;keephealthy;happiness;success;importance;ways;exercise;eatinghabits;spirits;[学生习作]:试分析如下学生习作的优缺点并尽量改正其中的错误:Thereisnodoubtthateveryoneisthirstforgoodhealthy.Nomatterwhoyouare,goodhealthycanbringyoulotsofsuccessandfun.Ownahealthbodyisthesourceofhappiness.Therefore,itisveryimportantforustokeepfit.Therearemanywaystokeepfit.Firstly,youcanhaveenoughexercise.Second,youshouldhavepropereatinghabits.Thirdly,youshouldkeepgoodspirits.Asamiddleschoolstudent,Ialwayskeepimportanceofhealthinmymind.Playingbasketballismyhobbyanddoingitfrequentlymakesmeenoughstrong.Icanfacethedifficultiesinthelifepositively.Asaresult,nowI’mleadingahappylife.[错误更正]Thereisnodoubtthateveryoneisthirstyforgoodhealth.Nomatterwhoyouare,goodhealthcanbringyoulotsofsuccessandfun.Owningahealthybodyisthesourceofhappiness.Therefore,itisveryimportantforustokeepfit.Therearemanywaystokeepfit.Firstly,youcanhaveenoughexercise.Secondly,youshouldhavepropereatinghabits.Thirdly,youshouldkeepgoodspirits.Asamiddleschoolstudent,Ialwayskeeptheimportanceofhealthinmymind.Playingbasketballismyhobbyanddoingitfrequentlymakesmestrongenough.Icanfacethedifficultiesinthelifepositively.Asaresult,nowI’mleadingahappylife.Youshouldalwaysbeinhighspirits.[亮点或采分点]:•Thereisnodoubtthateveryoneisthirstyforgoodhealth.•Nomatterwhoyouare,goodhealthcanbringyoulotsofsuccessandfun.•Owningahealthybodyisthesourceofhappiness.•Ialwayskeeptheimportanceofhealthinmymind.•Doingitfrequentlymakesmestrongenough.•Asaresult,nowIamleadingahappylife.[总体评价]:本文的作者按照所给的要求去组织材料,从正面的角度去行文.在写作的过程中运用了一些表顺序的词汇和过渡词,并且作者使用这三个提纲能平行叙述下去,文章达到了一个浑然一体的境界.但文中出现了一些语言词汇运用错误.如health与healthy的误用;动名词做主语的运用忽视等是文章的遗憾。.总分30分的作文本文可以打18—21分.[锦上添花]：习作中的Thereisnodoubtthateveryoneisthirstyforgoodhealth.也可改为Thereisnodoubtabouteverybodybeingthirstyforgoodhealth.在文章中有表达顺序的三个词汇，也可用First,Second,Third.要求第三点中提到了“吃好、睡好”文章中未提到此要点，应补上Ihaveagood,regulardieteveryday.本文中自由发挥的空间较大，可使用下面一些短语和句型来丰富文章的内容，增加文章的可读性。例如：tokeepfit也可用tostayhealthy;asamiddleschoolstudent也可用asforme,asfarasI’mconcerned.Asaresult也可用consequently.[修改后文章]：Thereisnodoubtabouteverybodybeingthirstyforgoodhealth.Nomatterwhoyouare,goodhealthcanbringyoulotsofsuccessandfun.Goodhealthcanalsomakeusfacethechallengeofourlife.Soowningahealthybodyisthesourceofhappiness.Therefore,itisofgreatimportancetostayhealthy.Waystokeepfitarevarious.First,doingenoughexerciseeverydayisnecessary.Second,inyourlife,propereatinghabitsareessential.Third,youshouldtakeanoptimisticattitudetowardswhateveryoucomeacross.Asforme,Ibeartheimportanceofhealthinmymind.Afterschool,Ifrequentlyplaybasketballwithmyclassmates.Iofteneatwell,sleepwellandholdapositiveattitudetowardlife.Consequently,I’mleadingahappylifenow.[范文背诵]：请依据如下提示词在10分钟内背下范文并于次日早晨再朗读并背诵一遍。isthirstyfor;habitsgoodhealth;inhighspiritssuccessandfun;takeanoptimisticattitudehappiness;frequentlychallenge;positiveimportance;leadahappylifeways;Homework:现在越来越多的农民进城打工。诚然，他们对城市建设作出了很大的贡献，但是也带来了诸如城市拥挤、教育、环境、公共安全等一系列问题。请以“Myopiniononpeasants’comingintocities”为题，写一篇120词左右的英语短文。ThereusedtobeapoorschoolinthisvillagecalledLijiazhuangSchool.Atthattime,moststudentshadtoleaveschoolduetothelackofmoney.Theteachingconditioncouldnotbeanyworse.Therewasonlyasmalldangeroushouseforstudentstohaveclassesinandapooremptygroundfordoingexercise.Whatwasworse,seventeachersworkedinonlyonesmalloffice,uncomfortableandinconvenient.However,withthehelpoftheHopeProject,theschoolhaschangedalot.Allthestudentswhousedtoleaveschoolhaveallcomeback.Atwo-floorteachingbuildingincludingamusicroom,adrawingroomandacomputerroomhasbeensetup.SportsfacilitiesarealsoavailableForstudentswhenclassesareover.Theformerpoorschoolhasdisappeared,replacedwithanewone—HopeSchool.Whenwalkinginthenewschoolyard,seeinghappyfaceshereandthere,youwillthinkofaword,thatis,HOPE.Firstly,theyshouldbepoliteandfriendlytotheathletesandvisitorsfromallovertheworld,andavoidimproperbehaviour.Secondly,theyshouldsticktotheirposts,offeringgoodservices,satisfyinganyreasonableneedsandbeingreadytohelpthoseindifficulty,andneverfailtodotheirduty.Thirdly,theyshouldintroducetheChinesecultureandhistorytoforeignerssothattheymayknowChinabetterandnevers