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Iamawriter牛刀小试Thereisakindoflovecalledletyougo,ThereisaTVprogramcalledI’masinger,ThereisanEnglishclasscalledI’mawriter.有一位女教师叫做张丽莉___________________________________ThereisawomanteachercalledZhangLiliNoonewasbornawriter,everythingstartsfromimitation.模仿请根据以下信息以“TheMostBeautifulWomanTeacher”为题写一篇英语报道：张丽莉，24岁，苍南县树人中学教师，2013年9月6日下午2：00左右，树人中学校门口，学生放学，准备坐车回家；一辆大巴失控，撞向(bumpinto)两名学生；张老师猛推了他们一把，使他们脱离了危险；车从张丽莉老师腿上碾压(runover)过去,腿部严重受伤。要求：字数120左右，结尾要有简要评价。1.Themostbeautifulwomanteacher的体裁：A.描述说明文B.记叙文C.议论文2.主体时态：第一段____________________和第二段____________________3.中心人称：第一段____________________和第二段____________________4.内容要点：whenwherewhowhathow一般过去时一般现在时√第三人称she/they第一三人称I/we/she/hertorepairthehousebeforeitrains谋篇布局1.第一段写什么____________________第二段写什么____________________2.主题升华A.staycalmwhenfacingdangerB.valuetherelationshipbetweenteachersandstudentsC.payattentiontotrafficsafetyD.weshouldbealwaysreadytohelpothers感人事迹我的感想√Betterstructure,bettersentence.1.张丽莉，24岁，教师.(定语从句)_______________________________________2.2013年9月6日见证了一场糟糕的交通事故.(witness/see)______________________________________________________________________________3.在苍南县树人中学校门口发生了一场严重的车祸.(强调句)______________________________________________________________________________ZhangLiliwhois24yearsoldisateacher.September6,2013witnessed/sawaterribletrafficaccident.ItwasattheschoolgateofShurenCangnanthathappenedaseverecaraccident.4.下午2：00左右学生放学，准备坐车回家.(itwastimeforsbtodosth)____________________________________________________________________________5.一辆大巴失控，撞向(bumpinto)两名学生.(定语从句)____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Atabout2o'clockp.m.Itwastimeforstudentstopreparetogohomebybusafterclass.Abuswhich/thatwasoutofcontrolbumpedintotwostudents.6.张老师猛推了他们一把，使他们脱离了危险.(so...that...)或用(todo)不定式开头作目的状语1.___________________________________________________________________________2.___________________________________________________________________________MissZhangpushedthemawaysofiercelythatshemadethemoutofdanger.Tomakethemoutofdanger,MissZhangpushedthemtosafety.7.车从她腿上碾压(runover)过去,腿部严重受伤。(notonly...butalso...)或用itisapitythat...1.___________________________________________________________________________2.___________________________________________________________________________Notonlywassherunoverbythebus,butalsoherlegsgotinjuredseriously.Itwasapitythatshewasrunoverbythebusandherlegswerehurtseverely.1.Thestudentswerepreparingtogohomebybus______abuslostcontrol.Thestudentswerewaitingforbusbackhome,___________abuslostcontrol.Thestudentswerereadytotakeabustogohome,________/____________,abuslostcontrol.whenjustthensuddenlyallofasudden2.Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,____________,MissZhangrushed...Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,____________________,MissZhangrushed...Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,____________________,MissZhangrushed...atthemomentatthesametimeontheurgentoccasion3.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,____________,shewasrunoverbythebus.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,_________,shewasrunoverbythebus.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,_______________,shewasrunoverbythebus.unfortunatelyasaresultmuchtooursorrow一、时态语态：1.Abuslosecontrol.2.Abusoutofcontrol.3.Abuscouldn’tbecontrol4.Abusbreakdown5.Abusdidn’toperatedproperly.lostwascontrolledbrokewasn'tHewhomakesnomistakesmakesnothing三、词性混乱1.Sheisourproud.2.Sotheywereoutofdangerous3.Teachergivesuswarm4.Thankstoherkind/brave/selfless/devoted.二、名词单复数1.Sheis24yearold.2.Shesavedthetwostudents’life.3.Thebusranoverherleg.yearsliveslegspridedangerwarmthkindness/bravery/selflessness/devotion四、用词不当1.(Mrs/Miss/Mr)Zhang2.Anaccident(tookplace/happened)3.Attheschool(door/gate)4.Theaccidents(ledto/caused/resultedin)herlegshurtseverely5.奉献的devoted/dedicated6.恢复retrieve/recover√√√√√√五、介词乱搭1.___about2o’clockp.m.2.___September6th,20133.___theschoolgate4.wait___bus5.leaveschool___home6.Anaccidenthappened___her注意书写和排版y和gf和tv和rb和dp和qn和h及ro和c及e1.天使anger/angle/angel2.受伤hurt/hunt3.行为behavoier/behavere/behavioratonatforforto√√√大家来找茬TheMostBeautifulWomanTeacherZhangLili,aged24,isateacherfromShurenhighSchoolofCangnanCounty.Atabout2o’clockintheafternoonofSeptember6th,2013,thestudentsoftheschoolwerewaitinginthefrontoftheschoolgateforthebusbackhome.Justthenanout-of-controlbusbumpintotwostudents.Justatthecriticalmoment,MissZhangrushedover,butpushedthetwostudenttosafety.Unfortunatelysherunoverbythebus.Andshewasinjuredsoseriousthatshehadtohaveherlegscutoff.Herbravehasmovedthepeoplealloverthecountrydeep.Asaresult,hehasbeenhonoredasthemostbeautifulwomanteacher.onbumpedandstudentswasseriouslybraverydeeplysheHomework:RecitethearticleThanksforyourlistening请根据以下信息以“TheMostResponsibleManTeacher”为题写一篇英语报道：成立新，45岁，平阳县浙鳌中学教师，2013年11月16日上午7：00左右，高二（6）班教室，给学生上早读课，准备做英语听力训练；突发心脏病倒地，学生们连忙通知学校领导，并赶紧拨打120等待抢救；被送医院后，抢救无效死亡。要求：字数120左右，结尾要有简要评价。知识目标：masterthebasicwritingsteps能力目标：masterthebasicwritingskills情感目标：developtheirawarenessofrespectingteachersandtrafficsafety教学重点：ho