大学英语四级———作文解析.ppt

L/O/G/OThemegalleryPowerTemplate大学英语四级写作新评分标准•2分--条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。•5分--基本切题。表达思想不够清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。•8分--基本切题。表达思想比较清楚，文字尚连贯；但语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误。•11分--切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。•14分--切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。基本无语言错误。•大学英语四级写作新评分标准•除了以上五个主要标准之外，评分时还考虑以下三个因素：•l．白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给零分。•2.字数不足者酌情扣分(81-89个词扣1分，7l-80个词扣2分，61-70个词•扣3分，51一60个词扣4分，不足50个词最多只给5分)。所计字数不包括卷面•上已给主题句。•3．只写一段者0-4分，只写两段者0-9分。一、人称•1.少用I，we,they,当想用somepeoplethat….多用sthiswidelyassumed/believedthat…•2.人称要一致，•用we,they等，一用到底，切忌somepeople–they—we–I时态——•1.一般现在时为主体•2.使用悬垂结构•A.Tocatchupwiththisdevelopment,weallfeelanurgentandstrongdesiretostudy.•B.Choosinganoccupationtakestime,andtherearealotofthingsyouhavetothinkaboutasyoutrytodecidewhatyouwouldliketodo.议论文的灵魂——观点（Arguments）•考察我们的观点及对社会上的一些事情的看法和改进的措施•如2002年6月的图表分析题StudentsUseofComputers•2003年1月的ItPaystoBeHonest,暗合那几年风靡一时的高考作文题目《诚信》•2006年1月的问我们对CampusTourism(即大学校园成为旅游景点的看法和观点)•同年的6月又考察了arguments,是对OnStudentsSelectingLectures，问学生对自己选择任课教师这一问题的辩证性的看法。•四级考试重视我们自己的perspective即观点，而且一般都是辩证性的观点，要格外的注意这一趋势。••第一段：按背景+观点提出有些人的观点；•Incontemporarysociety,thereisagrowingtendencyovertherecentyearsforsb(人)todosth.(干什么)Thisissue/phenomenonhascausedwidepublicconcern.•第二段：用asamatteroffact/however提出另一部分人的观点；However,peopleseemtofailtotakeintoaccountthefactthat…./asamatteroffact,•最后一段：用personally提出自己的观点及解决方法，最后总结。Frommypart,Iaminclinedtosupporttheideathat……永恒的三段论•1.每年，高校许多大学生受到鼓舞去贫困地区支教。•2.支教活动的意义。•3.我的看法。AidEducationinChina•Eachyear,collegestudents,encouragedtoaidstudentsinthepoverty-strickenareas,volunteerthemselvesinpoorvillagesforayearandtrytoimproveeducationinpoorareas.•Aid-educationhasbeenbeneficialintwoaspects.Ontheonehand,collegevolunteersarereallydevotedtothecause.Theyhaveopenedtheeyesofstudentsinunderdevelopedregionstotheoutsideworldbybringingthemnewknowledgeandthoughts.Asaresult,theyareextremelywell-receivedbythechildrenthere.Ontheotherhand,collegestudentshavereceivedarigoroustrainingbyadaptingtotheharshlivingconditions.Theyareenjoyingtheappreciationandno-distancefriendshipfromthechildren.What’smore,theyaregreatlyinspiredbythemovingandtirelessspiritofthechildren.•Inmyopinion,China’seducationaldevelopmentcan’tbeisolatedfromeachindividualandwecollegestudentsshouldtaketheleadinresponsetotheappealforofferingaidtochildreninpoorareas.•1.现在某些高校校园禁止车辆驶入，•2.这种规定的考虑，•3.谈谈你的看法。•点评：随着人们物质生活的提高，私家车发展迅猛，越来越多的私家车停放在校园，由此产生了一些问题，如空间被占、噪音污染、环境污染等，为此许多学校禁止车辆驶入校园，本预测题与2006年1月名校校园是否对外开放相仿，值得关注。ShouldcarsbeallowedintoCollegeCampus?•Withtherapiddevelopmentofournationaleconomy,privatecarshavebecomeinlargenumber;ofcourse,quiteafewcarsareheavilydrivenintoCollegeCampus.•Inasignificantway,thesecarsdonottakeupstudents’placesforstudy,butactuallyaffecttheirdailylifeandstudy--forinstance,thiscrowdofcarsmaymakenoiseandemitfilthygastochokeustodeath.Andthecampusisjammedwithlinesofcarsandseemstobeparkinglotinsteadofanacademicinstitute.SocarshavebeenstrictlyprohibitedintomanyCollegeCampuses.Itseemsthatthisisnotconveniencetosomepersons,indeed,butthisisforthesakeofoursafety.Thuswhensomeoneenjoysconveniencefrommoderntools,don'tforgetthatitisdangeroustothestudentsintheCollegeCampus.Therefore,IagreethatcarsarenotallowedintoCollegeCampus.•Byandlarge,withthepriceofcarsfallingsignificantly,carswillenteraveragefamilies,andmostChinesewillenjoyaluxuriouslifestyleintheirlife.However,theyarestillprohibitedtodrivetheircarsintoCollegeCampus,which,Ithink,isahardtruthintheeyesofmostpeople.•1.信息安全问题日益重要•2.信息安全事故可能导致的危害•3.如何做到信息安全•点评：随着我们步入信息社会和计算机应用的普及，利用计算机犯罪案件不断上升，信息安全事故频繁发生，媒体也不时有大量相关报道，如何保护信息安全成为人们关注的焦点，本预测题为社会热点，值得关注。InformationSecurity•Thehumanbeingsaresteppingintotheinformationsociety.Theinformationindustrydevelopsveryrapidly,sodothehackers,trick-playingteens,exploringchildren,fraudsters,andseriouswhite-collarcriminals.Thus,informationsecuritybecomesanimpendingimportantissue.•Incaseofinformationbreach,thevictims-----governmentdepartment,anorganizationoraninstitution,oracompanywillinevitablysuffergreatorsmallloss.Governmentmaybethreatenedwithnationalsecurity.Companiesmayloseopportunitiestodevelopnewprojects.Andthepublic’sandusers’confidencewillbedamaged.•Thenhowtodealwiththisissue?Technologyisonlyapartialsolutiontoinformationsecurity.What’smoreimportantisthatorganizationsandcompaniesshouldpromotetheawarenessoninformationsecuritytoitsstaff.However,sincenosystemcaneverbe100percentsecure,aprevention-onlyapproachtoinformationsecuritymanagementisnotenough.Companiesandorganizationsshouldadoptadualapproachtoinformationsecuritymanagementbycombingpreventionanddetectiontechniques.•1．一些学生赞成讲座式教学•2．另一些学生偏爱讨论式教学•3．你的看法•点评：2007年12月考查了大学生选修课话题，再次证明四级作文命题自2003年以后侧重于校园生活话题，该预测与校园生活联系紧密，为四级作文命题经常关注的话题。本文属于对比观点加作者态度型的议论文写作。LecturesandDiscussions•Thereisaheateddebateovertheroleoflecturesanddiscussionsintheclassroom.Somepeoplebelievethatlecturescanhelpstudentslearnmorequickly.Incontrast,othersholdthatdiscussionscanstimulatestudentstolearnbythemselves.•Thosewhoholdthefirstopinionsuggestthatstudentsattendmorelectures.Intheirview,bygi