高考英语写作_句子美化

YangYonghuaComparethefollowingsentences:我们学校位于宋家堡，它就像一座花园，满园皆是美丽的花朵、青草绿树，鸟儿吟唱、蝴蝶飞舞于其间。1.OurschoolliesatSongjiabao.Itisreallylikeagarden.Therearebeautifulflowers,greengrassandtrees.Birdsaresingingandbutterfliesareflyingamongthem.2.LyingatSongjiabao,ourschoolisreallylikeagardenwhichiscoveredwithbeautifulflowers,greengrassandtreeswithbirdssingingandbutterfliesflyingamongthem.Lyingwhichwithbirdssingingandbutterfliesflying高考作文评分标准第六档(很好)；(26-30分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.完全达到了预期的写作目的。第五档(好)：(21-25分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。4.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.达到了预期的写作目的。从中我们可以看出在写作中运用高级词汇和较多的语法结构是提高写作档次的重要标准。一、如何使用高级词汇1．择词要准确、贴切。Heisagoodman.Heisgood-looking.Heisakind-heartedman.Heishandsome.在选择词语时，要避免用上位词来代替下位词，特别是形容词和副词。如good是上位词，而要描写一个人不能只说Heisagoodman.而应该用相应的下位词来表达更准确的意思。如：generous，kind-hearted等。同样地，描写某人的长相，也不能只用good-looking，而应该选择handsome，attractive，slim等词汇，使之具体化，更贴切、更形象。2．避免重复、富有变化。在一段话或一篇文章中有时需要表达同样的意思，这时可以选用不同的词汇来表达，以避免重复和单调，从而使文章富有变化。但不要绝对化，有时适当的重复是必要的。TheBeijingOlympicGamesshowthatChinacandosomethingbigandsplendid.Also，theyshowthatChinahasbeenbecomingincreasinglystrongandpowerful.3．表达新颖、寻求亮点。ItismoreandmoredifficulttofindjobsinChinanowadays.It’sreallyadifficulttaskforme.increasinglydifficultchallenging选词时适当选用别人使用较少的词，可以使自己与众不同，从而取得出奇制胜的效果。4．短语替词、展示实力。(1)Theboyis__________,butheneverloseshope.(同义词poor)(2)Ihave__________________tostudyEnglishbetterthisterm.(同义词decided)(3)I______________howtoenlargemyvocabulary.(同义词don'tknow)(4)Wewill_____thematter__________________(同义词consider)(5)He___________musicsomuchthathede-votesmuchtimetoit.(同义词likes）madeupmymindhavenoideatakeintoaccount/consideration如果能用短语代替单词，一方面会使文章生动，另一方面则会展示你的实力，这会使阅卷老师对你刮目相看，从而提高文章的档次。isfondofbadlyoff5．巧用习语、引人入胜。(1)Hepromisedtoshowusaroundthecity，butsoonheatehiswords.(2)Manyfamiliesusedtostruggletomakeendsmeet.(3)Hehasbeenalaughingstockoftheclass.(4)WhydidsheturnadeafeartowhatIsaid?语言是文化的载体，习语又是语言的精华。恰当地使用它，会给文章增色，加强文章的感染力，从而引人入胜。收回前言使收支相抵笑柄置若罔闻、不理睬6．引用谚语。和汉语一样，英语中也有大量谚语。若能在写作中恰当运用，会给文章增色不少。(1)Timeandtidewaitfornoman.(2)Actionsspeaklouderthanwords.(3)Hewholaughslastlaughsbest.(4)Itisnousecryingoverspiltmilk.(5)Practicemakesperfect.(6)Everycoinhastwosides.(7)Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.(8)Nothingisdifficultifyouputyourheartintoit.【体验写作】Ⅰ.用更贴切的词来代替画线的词1．Terryissuchagoodboythateverystudentwantstogetalongwithhim.2．Itiscoldthiswinter.Adropofwaterwillfreezeinnotime.3．Heisanicestudent.Heoftenmakesuslaughandwehavemuchfunwithhim.4．Peterisgoodtoothers.Healwaysgivesawaythingstothoseintrouble.5．Thehouseisgood.Lookatthesofas，tablesandsoon.well-furnishedkind-heartedfreezinghumorousgenerousⅡ.用正确的固定短语替换画线部分(不得改变句意)1．Theclubhastwentymembers.2．Thedogsenseddangerandranaway.3．Hesaidhewouldhelpmeifnecessary.4．Surprisingly，thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.5．Theyadvisedmeonhowtosolvetheproblem.6．Themanisjoblessandhefeelsupset.7．WhenIsawthehorse，Ibegantocheerup.ismadeupof/consistsofwasawareofgivemeahand/cometomyaidTooursurprisegavemesomeadviceoutofwork/outofajobcaughtsightof二、如何使用较多的语法结构1．为了达到简洁的目的，我们常常用短语来代替句子。这其中包括：(1)不定式短语Youaresokindthatyouhelpme.→Youaresokindastohelpme.→It’ssokindofyoutohelpme.(2)过去分词短语Theteacherwalkedoutofthelabandsomestudentsfollowedhim.→Theteacherwalkedoutofthelab，followedbysomestudents.(3)现在分词和动名词短语Ifyoustandhere,youcanseeitclearly.→Standinghere,youcanseeitclearly.(4)with复合结构Theteacherwalkedoutofthelabandsomestudentsfollowedhim.→Theteacherwalkedoutofthelab,withsomestudentsfollowinghim.(5)独立主格结构Iftheweatherpermits，I’llcometomorrow.→Weatherpermitting，I’llcometomorrow.2．使用复合句把两个以上的简单句连接起来，使句子变得简洁、紧凑。Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.→Thegirlwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenisspokenhighlyof.→Thereasonwhythegirlisspokenhighlyofisthathercompositionwaswellwritten.3．选择别人少用的句式或结构将会使你的文章“不同凡响”。(1)倒装句Theyaresogratefultotheirpartnersthattheydon’tknowwhattodo.→Sogratefularetheytotheirpartnersthattheydon’tknowwhattodo.(2)强调句Whathesaidatthemeetingsurprisedeverybody.→Itwaswhathesaidatthemeetingthatsurprisedeverybody.(3)虚拟语气____________________________(如果我是领导）,Iwouldlistentocitizens.____________________(要不是你的帮助），Iwouldhavesufferedalotinthesnow.IfIwerealeader/WereIaleaderButforyourhelp/Ifithadnotbeenforyourhelp4．为了使句子表达生动，可使用感叹句和反问句Hehasmadegreatprogressinrecentyears.→Whatgreatprogresshehasmadeinrecentyears!Theybelievewhatyousaid.→Don’ttheybelievewhatyousaid?5.我们也可以使用比喻、拟人等修辞手法。修辞手法能给读者留下较深刻的印象，具有强大的感染力。Tofinishtheworkaheadoftime，theyhavebeenasbusyasabeerecently.August8th,2008sawBeijingholdingtheopeningceremonyofthe29thOlympicGames.另外，句式也要精心选择。如谈到环境保护时，Wemusttakemeasurestoprotectourenvironment远远不如Measuresmustbetakentoprotectourenvironment.表达有力。【体验写作】Ⅰ.用正确的语法结构来替换下列画线的句子(注意不得改变句意)1.Whenyouaretrappedinthefire,keepcalm.2.Becausehehassomanythingstodo,hefeelsstressful.3.Ashehasbeensentencedto15yearsinprison,Jimisinahopelessstate.4.Whenhesawhismother,theboyranuptoher.5.Asithashostedthe29thOlympic