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永宁二中宋艳Whyiswritingsotough?InputOutputBeautifyyourcomposition高考作文的华丽变身遇难心不慌遇易心更细Whatwewilldointhisclass:1.Learntobeautifyyourcompositionbyusingadvancedvocabulary、sentencepatternsandproperlinkingwords;2.Learntodevelopsentencesinordertomakethecontentrichandcoherent.Handwritingalsocounts!three'C'cleanclearcorrect评分细则：本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。优秀（22--25）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内容充实；语法结构多样，词汇丰富，行文流畅，显示出较强的语言运用能力，允许有个别语言错误，但不影响意思表达。良好（18--21）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内容较充实，行文较流畅，语言有少量错误，但基本不影响意思表达。一般（15--17）：紧扣主题，基本覆盖所有要点，语言错误已影响了部分意思的表达，但多数句子基本正确；基本达到预期写作目的。较差（11--14）：要点不全，内容不完整，行文不够连贯；语言错误较多，半数句子基本正确。差（6--10）：内容混乱，或主要内容偏离主题，尚能够写出少数与内容相关的可读句。极差（0--5）：只能写出与内容相关的词语，没有有效信息；抄写其他文章，或只是写出与作文无关的内容。高考英语阅卷特点：1.阅卷时间短；2.阅卷速度快；3.阅卷老师的心理状态：给分中庸4.高考阅卷其余部分是标准化计分——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股Whatmakesagoodwriting?languageArethereanymistakes?Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary?(高级词汇)Arethereanychangedsentencepatterns(句式)？Doesthewriteruseanylinkingwords?contentAreallthedetailsincluded?Isthecontentrichandcoherent(连贯)?1.电脑在我们生活中的作用是十分重要的。Computersareveryimportantinourlife.Computersplayaveryimportantroleinourlife.Computersareofgreatimportanceinourlife.短语代替单词advancedvocabulary同义词的使用2.Heisa___________________________(聪明的)boy.3._________________________________________,(我认为)NanShanNanbyZhangLeiisareallywarmsong.bright/smart/intelligentAsfarasIamconcerned/Personally4.Theteachersthinkthewritingisveryimportant.Theteachers________________________thewriting.greatimportancetoattach2.____________________,(众所周知的是)，thenewlylearntwordswillsoonbeforgottenunlessweusethemineverydaycommunication.1.不但…而且…notonly…but…aswellInNingxia,youcan________tasteyummyfood____canvisitsomefamoustouristsattractions_______.Asisknowntousnotonlybutaswellsentencepatterns3.The+比较级…,the+比较级…(越……越……)你越努力，你越进步。Theharderyouwork，themoreprogressyouwillmake.4.毫无疑问，大声朗读英语很有益。________________________readingEnglishloudlyisofgreatbenefit.Thereisnodoubtthat5.Thereasonwhy…isthat+句子(…的原因是……)我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。_______________wehavetogrowtrees________theycansupplyfreshairforus.ThereasonwhyisthatOnlyinthiswaycanyousolvetheproblem.Only+状语置于句首倒装结构一、运用倒装2.WhenIputtheideaideaintopractice,IfoundmyEnglishfarfromsatisfying._________________________________didIfindmyEnglishfarfromsatisfying.OnlywhenIputtheideaintopracticegrammarstructuresItshouldbeagoodidea______________________Itisimprtantforyoutodomorningexercises.二、运用it作形式主语1.Youshoulddomorningexercises.Itisimportant.2.You'dbetterlearnandsingEnglishsongs.tolearnandsingEnglishsongs.三、使用非限定性定语从句1.Theweatherturnedouttobeverygood.Itwasmorethanwecouldexpect.（一般）Theweatherturnedouttobeverygood,____________________________________whichwasmorethanwecouldexpect.（高级）2.MaybeIwillworkasavolunteerinmysparetime,______________________________(这将丰富我的生活)。whichwillmakemylifecolorful.whichisabletoenrichmylife.时间(顺序)：firstly...secondly…finally,meanwhile...并列或递进关系：notonly…butalso,besides,what’smore,inaddition...原因：because(of),thanksto,dueto,asaresultof...对照或比较：while,comparedwith,instead(of),ratherthan,onthecontrary,ontheonehand…,ontheotherhand...举例：forexample/instance,take…forexample...列举：suchas,likeproperlinkingwords觉得没话说Developsentences假设你是永宁中学学生会主席李华，你校将于11月18日校庆期间接待来自于美国某中学的学生访问团。你受学校委托，负责安排他们的一日活动。请根据以下提示，用英语给该团的领队Smith先生写一封电子邮件，介绍活动计划并简要说明理由，最后征求对方意见。1.上午与我校学生座谈；2.中午与我校学生共同进餐；3.下午与我校学生游览永宁。注意：1.次数不少于100；2.可适当增加细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯；3.信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总次数。1.上午与我校学生座谈；AmericanstudentswillhaveatalkwithChinesestudents.Q1:What’sitspurpose?2.中午与我校学生共同进餐；Americanstudentswillhavelunchintheschoolcanteen.Q2:WhattraditionalChinesefoodwillbeserved?3.下午与我校学生游览永宁。Intheafternoon,AmericanstudentswillvisitYongning.Q3:WhatcanthestudentsinYongningHighSchooltellaboutYongning?1.Inordertohaveabetterunderstandingofeachother,we’llhaveatalkinthemorning.2.Wewillhavelunchtogetherintheschooldinninghall,wherethetraditionalChinesefoodsuchasjiaoziwillbeserved.3.Intheafternoon,wewillvisitYongning,enjoyingsomecustomsofHuipeople.假如你是永宁中学学生会主席李华,访问团成员Peter回国后来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文.请你根据下列要点写回信.要点:1.参加中文学习班;2.阅读中文书刊；3.学唱中文歌曲；4.交中国朋友。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。DearPeter,I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowtolearnChinesewell.Sampleversion:DearPeter,I’mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowtolearnChinesewell.Hereareafewsuggestions.First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse,bywhichyou’llbeabletolearnfromtheteacherandpracticewithyourfellowstudents.Then,italsohelpstowatchTVandreadbooks,newspapersandmagazinesinChinesewheneverpossible.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideatolearnandsingChinesesongs,becausebydoingsoyou’lllearnandrememberChinesewordsmoreeasily.YoucanalsomakemoreChinesefriends,whocannotonlytellyoualotaboutChinabuthelpyoulearnChineseaswell.TryandwritemeinChinesenexttime.Bestwishes,LiHuapayattentiontoaccumulatingmaterialsforwritingfromourdailyexercises.Keepinmindyoumayusesomeoftheseoneday.1.Youlearntowritebywriting.2.Thereisnogoodwriting;onlygoodrewriting.Whenindoubt,refertoNo.1and2.1.Finishyourcompositionafterclass.2.Pairwork:improveandbeautifyyourcomposition.3.Reciteyourcomposition..