201706浙江续写作文讲评-1.16

ContinuationWritingJanet1.Whenitsmelttheflavorofthemeat,thewolfturnedaround.2.Theystayedwheretheywereandattemptedtothinkoutanidea.3.Whenhesawacarstop,Macjumpedoffhisbicycleimmediatelyandherushedtothedoorofthecar.4.Becausehefeltfrightened,Maccouldhardlysayawholesentence.5.Whenhesawthewolf,Paulopenedthedoor,andhepulledMacintothecar.6.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadbackandshoutedloudlyatPaulandBecky.(分词作状语）.7.Justatthattime,thewolfmightfeelthethreatsfromthepeople,itstartedtowithdraw.(分词作状语）8.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation.Threemencircledthewolfinthatsituation.(定语从句）分词作状语等句子练习读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语若词数少于130，从总分中扣去2分。注意1••*usedifferentstructures（结构）•*usetransitionalwords（过渡）•*addsomedetails（细节）1•*listthepossiblesteps（过程）•*puttheminanorder（顺序）*giventwosentences（段首语）*mainplotsofthepassage（故事情节）Step3polish（润色）Step2draft（拟稿）Step1read(阅读）注意2What'sthestyleofthepassage?A.Narration记叙文B.Exposition说明文C.Argumentation议论文readingforthestyle•Whoisthemaincharacter?•Whendidthestoryhappen?•Wheredidthestoryhappen?•Whathappenedinthestory?•Whywasthemattercaused?•Howwasthemattersolved/ended?•Who?•When?•Where?•What?•How?beginning;•development;•endingMachisfriendsPaulandBeckyonabright,warmJulyafternoonfromhishometoAlaskatookatripandadventured……结伴骑行---独自遇狼---奋力逃生逃出，感受Theunderlinedkeywords:readtheunderlinedwordsCharacterActionThingsMac,friends,Paul,BeckyPlan,climb,jump,pedalWolf,bicycle,cars结伴骑行---独自遇狼---Para1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.1.Whosecarwasit?-2.Whydiditstop?3.HowdidMacfeel?4.WhatwouldMacdo?Para2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.1.HowdidMacfeelandwhatdidhedo?2.Whatdidtheyseeorhear?3.Whatwouldtheydo?感激或合作价值取向：写作关键点：心理，场景1.Althoughafloodoffearwelledupinhim,Paulshoutedandopenedthedoor4.Jumpoff,slideinto,withouthesitation,beabouttodotearsbintopieces.Anarrowescape(九死一生）3.Heshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.1.Macheldfriendstightlyinarmsandwasinfloodsoftears.2.IspottedabigdogrunningontheroadwhenIwasrepairingmybike.3.hidebehind..not…until….toone’srelief,1.Tearsfillinghiseyes,theyofferedtheirheartfeltgratitudeto….2.Withoutsb’shelp,…赤手空拳斗争勇敢地靠近与此同时僵持状态危险状况威胁撤退，逃跑消失在远处毫不犹豫列单词barehandsfightwith/againstapproachto…bravelyatthesametime/inthemeanwhiledeadlockdangeroussituationthreatwithdraw/runawaydisappearinthedistancedosthwithouthesitation1.Withnothingonthehand,theydarednottofightagainstthewolf.2.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople’sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.3.withoutasecondthought,hedrovethecarquicklybacktothecyclists,onlytofindtheyweregone.4.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.5.Atthesightoftheferociouswolf,Ifrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.6.Itwasreallyamomentoflifeanddeath.Sittinginthecar,hestillfelthisheartbeatingwildly.列句子ReadingII(Usinglanguage)JanetReadingII(Usinglanguage)JanetReadingII(Usinglanguage)Janet1.Myfirstvisitwastoaspacestationconsideredthemostmoderninspace.我首先参观的是被认为太空中最现代的太空站1).aspacestationconsideredthemostmoderninspace=aspacestation___________________themostmoderninspace.Part1whichwasconsidered过去分词短语作后置定语,表被动或已完成Thebook,_________(publish)manyyearsago,isstillpopularwithyoungpeople.publisheddone表示被动或被动已完成beingdone表示正在被做tobedone表示将要被做作名词的后置定语，形式的选择关键取决于句意和后面的时间状语。1.Manythings,__________impossibleinthepast,likeworkinginspace,havealreadycometrue.A.beingconsideredB.tobeconsideredC.consideredD.considering2.Iftheproject________nextmonthisdelayed,theconstructioncompanywillbefined.A.completedB.beingcompletedC.havingbeencompletedD.tobecompleted高考链接n.(pron.)疑问词＋tododoingsth.wh-clause2)considerbeconsideredas…considersb/sthas+nconsidersb./sth.(tobe)+n./adj.考虑认为1.Myfamilyconsider_____(buy)acomputer,whichisconsidered____(be)agoodhelp.2.Tooursurprise,thepaintingthatwasconsidered________(copy)shouldhavewontheprize.A.copyingB.tobecopiedC.tohavebeencopiedD.beingcopied3.Consideringtheirage,youngChildrenwerenotallowedtoputoutthefire.buyingtobeC考虑到4.”Isyourbrothergoingtocamp?”“Hesignedup,buthe’sconsidering_____”.A.notgoingB.nottogoC.hedoesn’tgoD.won’tgo5.”I’msorryIdidn’tlistentoyoujustnow.I_______tothesouthforavacation.”A.consideredgoingB.wasconsideringgoingC.wasconsideredtogoD.haveconsideredhavegone2.Describedasanenormousroundplate,itspinsslowlytoimitatethepulloftheearth’sgravity.=______________describedasanenormousroundplate,_____itspinsslowlytoimitatethepull…gravity.Itisand上面这句话中的described为_____分词，在句中作______语；他与句子的主语构成________关系。过去状被动解题步骤：1.找句子主语2.判断主语和分词的关系3.看分词和谓语的先后顺序remember1.__________(see)fromspace,theearthisverysmall.2.Hestoodthere,________(admire)thepicture.3.______________(suffer)frompollutionformanyyears,theareaisnotfittolivein.4._____________(show)aroundtheschool,thevisitorswentaway.SeenadmiringHavingsufferedHavingbeenshownPractice:Trueorfalse:1.Hearingthenews,hecried.2.Whenheheardthenews,hecried.3.Whenheheardthenews,tearscamedownhisface.4.Hearingthenews,tearscamedownhisface.TTTF注意：分词作状语，其逻辑主语