2012高考英语考前30天之备战专题五书面表达升格指导第三节图画式作文升格指导病文升格学案

学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第1页共4页第三节图画式作文升格指导Wecanseefromthepicture,aboyiswashingclothes,listenmusic,andthetapsarenotclosed①.However,onthewall,thereisasign:pleasesavewater.Weoftenseethiskindofthing.Asthedevelopmentofoursociety,peoplearehavingbetterandbetterlife②.Butwastewaterisbecomingaseriousproblem③.Manypeopledon’tknowwaterisrare.Alotofpeopleintheworldarelack④.Andalsomanyfactoriespourdirtywater学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第2页共4页intotheriver.Ithink,weshouldtakemeasurestosavewater.Don’twastewater,anddon’tpollutetherivers,too⑤.Ifwedon’tsaveeverydropofwater,thelastdropofwaterwouldbeourtear.这篇习作能从整体上把握写作要求，画面要点没遗漏，也能观察出画面的内在含义。写作时一定的条理性，按照图画作文写作的三步骤来写，即：描述画面、说明原因、采取措施。主要问题在于语言基本功不扎实，语法、词汇用法错误较多，字数也偏少。因此得分在13分左右.①句中出现语法、词汇用法错误，listen后面应该to；washing和listening都应用进行时。建议改为Aswecanseefromthepicture,aboyiswashingclothes,andlisteningtomusic,withthetapsrunning.②句中as是连词，而thedevelopmentofoursociety不是句子，改为Withthedevelopmentofoursociety,peoplearehavingbetterandbetterlife.③句中动词做主语应该用-ing形式，可以改为Butwastingwaterisbecomingaseriousproblem。4句中lack用作动词时，句子应为Alotofpeopleintheworldlackwater.5句中too改为either。Herecomesapicture:aboy,whoiswashinghisclothes,listenstothemusicwithtwotapsrunning.Whatshocksusisthatjustonthewall,anobvioussignsays:pleasesavewater.However,thewaterstillkeepsrunning.Thisisnotanunusualphenomenon.Wecanseeitinourdailylife.Withtherapiddevelopmentofoursociety,people’slifeisgettingbetterandbetter.However,theextravagantlifestyleisbecomingaseriousproblem.Manypeopledon’trealizethelackofwater,andsomeevendon'tknowthatinmanyplacesoftheworld,waterisrare.What’sworse,withoutconsideringthepollutionofwater,somefactoriespourdirtywaterintotheriver,causingtheshortageoffreshwater.Asastudent,itistimewetookusefulmeasurestosaveourlimitedfreshwater.Withoutwater,therewouldbenolife.Don’tmakeitcometruethatthelastdropofwaterisourtear.1、本文照描述图片、分析现象、提出措施的步骤来写，显得结构严谨、条理清晰。学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第3页共4页2、本文的一大亮点是：句式变化多端不单一，高级句式层出，比如：aboy,whoiswashinghisclothes,listenstothemusicwithtwotapsrunning包含非限制性定于从句和with复合结构；Whatshocksusisthatjustonthewall,anobvioussignsays:pleasesavewater.此句为主语从句；What’sworse,withoutconsideringthepollutionofwater,somefactoriespourdirtywaterintotheriver,causingtheshortageoffreshwater.此句中两次出现非谓语结构；Asastudent,itistimewetookusefulmeasurestosaveourlimitedfreshwater.itistimethat是虚拟语气的高级句式，能准确运用，很好；Don’tmakeitcometruethatthelastdropofwaterisourtear.此句中it为形式宾语。thelastdropofwaterisourtear为比喻，非常形象，令人感觉触目惊心，更觉得保护水资源的重要。【应考对策】图画式作文往往所含信息限，学生要充分利用图画前面或后面的说明文字，它们可以帮助你更好地理解画面；然后，根据画面内容描述画面，要点不能遗漏；接着，依据画面所反映的问题分析原因，提出解决问题的方案。当然在写作过程中，要尽量使用一些高级的词汇和变化的句式，并使用一定的连接词，使得行文流畅、优美。【答后总结】“悟到”才是真正的得到。通过上面的升格训练，你能总结出高分作文的写作技巧吗？请你认真总结。观察下面的一幅图画，结合你身边的事例，谈谈你对培养孩子成才的看法。学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第4页共4页【范文】DreamandRealityNowadays,thereisanincreasingtendencyforparentstodesignthefuturefortheirchildren.Regardlessofthechildren'sinterest,someparentswantthemtoattendallkindsofextraclasses,layingaheavyburdenontheirshoulders.Asaresult,thechildrenalmosthavenotimetoplay.AtypicalcaseismyneighborMrandMrsWang.Theywanttheirchildtobeanartist.TheychooseamusicclassonSaturdayandapaintingclassonSundayforthechild.Infact,thechildhasnointerestatall.Thechildiskeptbusyallday.Afterafewyears,theireffortsareinvain.Ithinkparentsshouldlettheirchildrendeveloptheirinterestsbythemselves,andgivethemenoughtimeandspacetolearnwhattheywanttolearn.Childrenshouldbeencouragedtogetclosetonature.Weshouldhelpchildrenturntheirdreamsofenjoyingthebeautyofnatureintorealities.Onlyinthiswaycanchildrenhaveahappyandenjoyablelife.