02教师用[附续写提示与答案](Word版共8页,可编辑)

第1页共8页读后续写一、考纲解读提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。二、原题分析①原文材料350词以内，所续写文章150词左右。②原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文。③原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。④续写部分分为两段．．，每段开头语已经给出。⑤续写部分分为两大类别：1)半开放性质。必须依据文章的语境逻辑推理续写。2)完全开放性质。可以依据文章的思路，自己发挥。三、注意事项①词数要求。②与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。③内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。④应用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。⑤上下文的连贯性。四、评分原则①本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。②评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。③词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。④评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；(2)内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；(4)上下文的连贯性。⑤拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。⑥如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。第2页共8页续写导练（一）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。WhenIwaselevenyearsold,Ihadabigaccident.IgetscaredevennowwhenIthinkaboutthattime.Iwentskatingnearmyhouse.Thereweremanypeople,andIsawsomeofthemfallingontheice.Itwasmyfirsttimetogoiceskating,soIwasnervous.Iwaswonderinghowtoskate.Iwentwithafriendwhowasveryskillful.Hespentsometimeteachingmehowtoskate,butIdidn’tlearnmuch.Heleftmeandskatedallaround.Assoonasheleft,Ifelldown.Ienviedtheotherpeoplebecausetheycouldskatewell.IwasboredbecauseIkeptfallingsoItookoffmyskatesandjustwalkedaroundontheiceinmyshoes.Itwascoldandmyhandswerefrozen.Suddenly,Isteppedonsomethingthatwasnothard.Whatwasit?Itwasaweakplaceintheice.WhenIsteppedthere,Isankundertheice.IthoughtthatIwasgoingtodie,butIdidmybesttograbsomethingtogetoutfromundertheice.Itriedtograbtheedgeoftheice,butitwasverydifficultforaneleven-year-old.Itseemedlikeaverylongtime,likeayear.Then,fortunately,someonehelpedme.Hegrabbedmyarmsandpulledmeup.So,IlivedandI’mstillalivetoday.Ithankedhim.Atthattime,myfriendcameback.Iwasannoyedathimbecausehewassupposedtotakecareofme,buthedidn’t.Hewasembarrassed.WhenItookataxihome,thetaxidriverwassurprisedandaskedwhathadhappened.Ididn’twanttosayanythingbecauseIwastiredandscared.Evennow,wheneverIthinkaboutthattime,Ifeeluncomfortable.Idon’twanttogoskatingagainevennow.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：本文讲述了作者11岁去滑冰的一段经历，由于自己的滑冰技能不如别人娴熟，因而独自一人尝试练习总会跌跌撞撞，从而对滑冰这件事留下了不好的印象。由续写第一段的提示语“很久以后我才又一次去滑冰”可知，这一次去滑冰，作者会抱着不一样的态度的。那么首先得明确一点，对于这次滑冰，一定要有一个妥当的理由，不然我自己是不会去的。显然，作者已不在是当时那个自己，他以前就不是特别擅长滑冰，因此他此次不会像当时那样独自一人去练习，而是极有可能同别人一起去的。与上一次的经历相比，这一次不会进展得特别顺利，但是起码有所进步，毕竟一次学好很难。那么，写作时宜注意练习滑冰以及有人陪同指导滑冰的细节问题。同时，在作者的心理活动方面，也是有一个与过去滑冰时的心情的变化的，那得是一个起伏的过程，此处对作者心情的描述可以客观中性些，对滑冰的恐惧情绪的描述则相对减弱些。由续写第二段的提示语可知，作者以后抽不出时间滑冰了，那么这一段应试着写一写作者为什么抽不第3页共8页出时间去滑冰的原因了，毋庸置疑，这势必与作者工作或家庭上的繁琐事情有关。换句话说，作者随着年龄的增长，找工作、结婚、抚养孩子等都有可能成为作者忙碌的理由。除此以外，随着时间的流逝，作者对滑冰的经历必然是有感悟的，那么就需要增加一些作者对过去或者未来的想法。最后，可尝试与前面的内容有所呼应。Onepossibleversion:示例一Paragraph1:ItwaslongbeforeIwentskatingonceagain,accompaniedbyoneofmyfriends.ThistimeIwascarefulandcautious,andmyfriendtookspecialcareofme.IwassofortunatethistimethatImanagednottofalldown.GraduallyIlearnedtoskatewellandbecameskillful.Ifeltveryconfidentandnolongerscared.Paragraph2:However,eversincethenIhaven’tfoundanytimetogoskating,notbecauseIdonotlikeskating,butbecauseIamtoobusyworking.I’velearnedalotfromthesetwoskatingexperiences.Weallhavemomentsofdesperation.Butifwecanfacethembravely,that’swhenwefindouthowstrongwereallyare.Whateveryoudo,youmusthavethepatiencetodoitaswellastheskill.Remember:nevergettoomuchpridebecauseofvictoryorloseheartincaseoffailure.示例二（此示例为图书《高中英语写作亮点揭秘》主编所写，较之示例一，更值得参考和学习）Paragraph1:ItwaslonglongbeforeIwentskatingonceagain,andthatwaswhenwegraduatedfromtheuniversity.Ourmonitoradvisedusalltogoskating,andIdecidedtofollowhisadvicealthoughIstillfeltalittlescared.Soonwewereactiveontheice.Oneofmyroommateswasveryskillfulandshepatientlyexplainedtomehowtostart.Stepbystep,Iwasabletostandupontheicemyselfandheadedoutalittle,notsosteadilyandIfelldownmanytimes.IwasgratefultoherforImanagedtoskatethatday,thoughIcouldn’tbelikeothers,whocouldskatewell.Ihadanicetimethatday!Paragraph2:However,eversincethenIhaven’tfoundanytimetogoskating,becauseimmediatelyIdivedintotheapplyingforthesuitablejobs.Andthen,fortunately,Imetmyhoneyandgotmarried.Aswasexpected,onebabycameintotheworldandwasnowsmilingtomeeveryday.Asfortheskating,maybeIcouldbeontheiceagainwhenmybabyisgrownupandasksmeonehundredtimes!续写导练（二）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。MrBrownlivedinahouselessthantwomilesawayfromhisoffice.Hewasthereforeabletodrivehomeeverydayforlunch.Everytimehedroveinthemiddleoftheday,hefoundcarswereparkedintheroadoutsidehishouse,andtherewasnoroomforhisowncar.Hehadtodrivetwoblocksfartherbeforehecouldfindaplacetopark.Thenhehadtowalkhome.Thismadehimveryangry.第4页共8页Hehadputupaboardwhichread“NoParking!”inthegardenfacingtheroad,butnobodyseemedtopayattentiontoit.Peopleonlyobeyedapolicenotice,butnotaprivateone.Therewerenoparkedcarswheretherewasablueboardwithwhitelettersonit:PoliceNotice—NoParking!MrsBrownsuggestedthatheshouldstealapolicenotice.Buthedarednot,beingafraidofgoingtoprison.Shethensuggestedthathemakeonejustlikeapolicenotice.Hesaidhewasnotapolicemanandcouldn’tusetheword“police”.Hedecidedthathemustfindawayoutandstartedthinkinghard.Forseveraldays,thesmellofpaintfilledthehouse.Onenightheshowedhislifeanewno