高考英语书面表达-how to polish your writing

TOPOLISHYOURWRITING让你的作文起来XiamenYingcaiSchoolXieJianchun书面表达评讲之:高级词汇与高级句式的润色升级一、使用高级词汇写作时，“高级词汇”如能运用贴切自然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一两个，也会为你的作文增添色彩。1．标新立异写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，别人有可能想不到的词汇，恰当地求新求异。Weallhavethesamechance.→Weallpossessthesamechance(opportunity)．Wehavealotofhomeworktodoattheweekend.→Wehaveendlesshomeworktodoattheweekend.2．短语优先多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。Icannolongerbearthewayhespeakstous.→Icannolongerputupwiththewayhespeakstous.Theboyrealizedthedangerandbegantorunaway.→Theboywasawareofthedangerandbegantorunaway.3．避免重复尽量避免过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用其他恰当的同义词或词组来代替。Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherlikeswatchingfootballmatches.→Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherenjoyswatchingfootballmatches.二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来1．恰当使用被动语态Aboveall,wemustdosomethingtostoppollution.→Aboveall,somethingmustbedonetostoppollution.2．使用强调句Theaccidenthappenedtheotherday.→Theaccidentdidhappentheotherday.Hedidn'tcometothepartybecausehewasverybusy.→Itwasbecausehewasverybusythathedidn'tcometotheparty.3．使用倒装句WecanonlyimproveourEnglishinthisway.→OnlyinthiswaycanweimproveourEnglish.Wedon'tknowitsvalueuntilwelosehealth.→Notuntilwelosehealthdoweknowitsvalue.4．使用省略句Althoughtheywerefacedwithmanyproblems,theydidn'tloseheart.→Althoughfacedwithmanyproblems,theydidn'tloseheart.5．使用感叹句Wehadaverygoodtimewiththepeasantsthatday.→Whatagoodtimewehadwiththepeasantsthatday!6．使用with复合结构Becausetherewastoomuchnoise,Icouldn'tgoonstudying.→Withthenoisegoingon,Icouldn'tgoonstudying.7．使用虚拟语气Ididn'ttakehisadvice,soIfailedintheexam.→IfIhadtakenhisadvice,Iwouldn'thavefailedintheexam.It'stimeforustotakemeasurestoprotectthewildanimals.→It'shightimethatwetookmeasurestoprotectthewildanimals.2016年福建省质检书面表达国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。Threepiecesofastudent’swork(学生作品）13分13分16分23分WHATMAKESAGOODPIECEOFWRITING?1.neatwriting书写2.content内容3.structure结构4.language语言GoodfirstimpressionWellorganizedandsmoothlydevelopedEverythingrequiredincludedNoChinglishNoGrammaticalmistakesexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns应用文写作五部曲step1Topicexploring审题step2Wording构词step3Sentencemaking成句step4Essaywriting成篇step5Improving修订Step1Topicexploring审题1审体裁2审人称3审时态4审要点(定文章结构)高考书面表达（重庆卷）国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。Paragraph1:purposeoftheletterParagraph2:keypointsParagraph3：Properending（towishhimasuccess)三段式总分总自我介绍写信目的话题（我们应该感恩）列举理由预祝活动成功inbriefindetailinbriefStep2Wording构词拼写词性近义词同音词单复数冠词大小写Simplemistakesleaveabadimpression!MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarefindingthemesfromstudentsallovertheworld.Now,IwritethisletterbecauseIwanttorecommandatheme.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtopic.Ourfatherandmotherthrowthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthanktothem.asaChinese,weshouldbethankful,becausewherethereisthankful,there’rehopestomaketheworldbetter,andwithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveansuccessfulend.beaAslookingfortopicsrecommendtopictopicthroughthickandthinthankfulness17分Let’sworkonpolishingyourwritingtogether!Diversetopic-relatedchunksVarioussentencepatternsHOW?From17/18to21HOW?1.改变词性来丰富表达2.添加句型/高级词汇（短语，高中阶段词汇）3.简单句—复合句/长短句step3Sentencing成句1简单句2并列句3复合句4非谓语形式5特殊结构时态，语态别忘了并列连词NoChinglish!!连词的选择主语一致避生就熟！强调句型；倒装；独立主格结构……1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.→IamLihua,astudentfromXinHuaMiddleschool.Improveyoursentences.→Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthenewsthatyou’relookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.1.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtheme.2.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.3.Ourteacherteachesushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead,weshouldthanktothem.4.Onlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.5.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.6.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveasuccessfulend..Haveatry!1.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.→Thatweshouldbegratefulisagoodidea.2.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.→Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.3.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthankthem.→Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.4.AsaChinese,weshouldbethankful,andonlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.→ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.→Onlywithathankfulheartcanwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.5.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytopic.→Iwouldreallyappreciateitifmytopicischosen.→Hopefully,mytopicwillbechosen.6.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveansucces