2016江苏高考英语读写类作文讲评-课件(PPT讲稿)

Learningaims:Tolearnhowtosumupthemainideaofashortpassage;Tolearnhowtopolishupyourownwritings;Tocorrectsomemistakesfromyourownwritings.读写任务型写作分为两部分：第一部分要求用约30个词概括所给短文的要点，文体主要以议论文，记叙文或说明文为主。第二部分以约120个词就短文某一主题谈论自己的经历并发表看法。此项旨在着重考查学生学习英语的综合能力，特别是阅读写作以及思维的能力。第一部分要求学生能读懂文章，在读懂的基础上概括文章要点，所以阅读能力和概括能力要求较高。写作要求分析TechniqueGuides概括叙事性(narrative)文章主要内容一般应包括四个方面的内容：1.什么人？(Who)2.发生什么事情？(Whathappened)3.目的如何/原因是什么？(Why)4.结果如何/什么启示或教训？(Consequence/Inspiration/Lesson)Youmaybeginlikethese:1.Thepassage/storyismainlyabout(talksabout)+astory/phenomenonwhere/that+从句2.Thewritertells/shows/statesusthat…3.Asisshowninthepassage,…4.Whatthepassagetells/shows/statesusisthat…故事性阅读材料，应该用最简练的语言来说明故事讲述了什么，还可以讲述该故事给你的启示(inspiration)或其中的一个道理(principle)。Atleast36peoplediedinafatalstampededuringNewYearcelebrationsinShanghaionJanuary1st,2015.ThetragedyhappenedatacrowdedsquareinShanghai'sgleamingBundareaataround11:35p.m.Mostoftheinjuredwereyoungpeopleintheirtwenties,amajorityofthemwomen.Therewerealsocollegestudentsandchildren.Theyweresenttoseveralhospitalsfortreatment,includingChangzhengHospital,theShanghaiNo.1People’sHospital,RuijinHospitalandHuangpuDistrictCentralHospital.Lackofawarenessoversafetyriskbehindpublicgatheringsandloosecontrolatthescenecontributedtothetragedy.Thedisorderatthescenealsoexposedthedeficiencyinemergencyexerciseandsafetyeducation.Aprofoundlessonshouldbelearnedfromtheincident.Forthoseareaswithhighsafetyrisks,theauthoritiesshouldhavespecialemergencyresponseplansandmakesufficientanalysisandassessment,includingthearrangementofpolice,volunteersandsupportingmeasures.参考1Atleast36peoplediedinafatalstampede[stæm'piːd]duringNewYearcelebrationsinShanghaionJanuary1st,2015,causedbylackofawarenessoversafetyriskandloosecontrolatthescene.(35)（马苏云）参考2Atragedyinwhichatleast36peoplediedduringNewYearcelebrationsinShanghairaisedpeople’sawarenessofthesecurityofpublicplaces.Andtheauthoranalyzedthecausesofthetragedy.（33字）(杨天一)参考3WhatthepassageshowsusisastampedewhichhappenedinShanghai’sBundareaseveraldaysago,includingthereasonswhyithappenedandthemeasuresauthoritiesshouldtake.(29字)(suggestedanswer)TransitionalsentencesconnectingyourexperienceActually,inreallife,everyonecanhaveanexperienceof…Havingreadthepassage,Ithinkof…Afterreadingthepassage,Iamlostinthought,whichremindsmeof…Whatatouchingstory,whichremindsmeof…HowtopolishupyourwritingGeneralAdvancedgetfinishlikecareconsideruseimportantacquire/attain/obtainaccomplish/completeappreciate/befondof/preferconcerntake…intoconsideration/accountmakeuseof/takeadvantageofbeofvital/greatimportanceExercise1sadShefeltlonelyandd________.Shewasreallyu_____aboutthewayherfathertreatedher.happyShewasfeelingmorec______thanbefore.Sandywillbed_____toseeyou.I’mabsolutely______thatyouarecoming.badSmokinginpublicisa/an__________habit.Theweatheris___________.Ifoundthismannerisextremely________.Thefoodlooks_________,butittastedOK.greatHeisan________playertowatch.Herdancewasan________________performance.Theirlastconcertwasreally_________.Thefilmwasabsolutely________________.Whata______________idea.Thistravelwasa/an____________experience.veryShelooks___________beautifulthistonight.Conditionshaveimproved____________overthepastfewyears.Raisingmoneyforthehomelesshasbeen________difficult.Self-confidenceis____________vitaltosuccess.GeneralAdvancedsadhappybadgreatverydepressed/upset/inlowspiritscheerful/delighted/thrilled/pleasedawful/unpleasant/horribleamazing/admirable/awesome/brilliant/excellent/enjoyable/fantasticbadly/dramatically/especially/rather/pretty/perfectly/awfully/amazinglyIt’simportanttoobeythepublicregulations.Onlyifwedothat,canweliveinapeaceful,safeandbeautifulsociety.(姜佳怡)Somepeoplelikevisitingsomeplaceswhichhavelotsofvisitors.(蔡宜静)(prefer)It’sofvitalimportancetoobeythepublicregulations.Onlyifweperformthem,canweliveinapeaceful,safeandcomfortablesociety.Somepeopleprefertovisitsomecrowdedinterestofplacesratherthanstayathomeforholiday.Exercise2Trytopolishupthetwosentences各种从句非谓语倒装句型with复合结构强调句型省略句型祈使句型虚拟语气优句鉴赏Themoreactionswetakeforpublicrules,themoreadvantageswewillachievefromthesociety.Inmyopinion,ifeveryonewhotookpartintheNewYearcelebrationshadbehavedwell,thetragedywouldnothavehappened.Soitisobviousthateveryonemusthavetheawarenessoversafetyrisk,especiallywheninpublicplaces.巧用副词—不让句子裸奔Obviously,mostofpeoplelacktheconsciousnessofpublicsafety.Surprisingly,thefatalstampedeledto36deathsanddozensofinjuries.Definitely,weshouldputoursecurityinthefirstplace.Personally,aseriesofpreventionmeasuresmustbetakentoguaranteepublicorder.有没有副词效果确实不一样！Ibelievethat…Isuggestthat…Ihopethat…Isupportthat…I_______believethat…I________suggestthat…I_______hopethat…I__________supportthat…firmlystronglysincerelyfully/completely/entirely/absolutely（1）Summarizeincompleteidea（2）Misuse/misunderstandoriginalpassage（3）Toomanymistakesmadeinsentencestructures（4）Expressopinionstooearly（5）Applythesuggestionsfromoriginalpassage（6）Toosimplesentences本次作文中存在的问题：Thereare36youngpeopledeadinShanghai’sgleamingBundareawhen