英语：如何写好建议信课件[1]

HowtowritealetterforadviceQIN2011.9.8如何算是一篇好文章？－覆盖了所有的要点－应用了较多的语法结构和词汇－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。要点全词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道连接词假如你叫孙军，是恩施高中的学生，要给市长写一封信，反映学校门前交通拥挤现象，包括以下要点：参考词汇:穿行threadone’sway天桥overpass问题建议学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。第一步:Whatmustwepayattentiontowhenwritinganarticle?题材：人称Person(Thefirst/thirdperson…)时态：Tense(thesimplepresenttense)要点：…aletter第一步：审题养成重视审题的习惯。虽然基础写作题是半封闭性的，但审题仍然十分重要。现以样题为例，谈谈如何审题：思考的问题样题分析第几人称？（person）文章的题材是什么？要写的文章主题是什么(topic)怎样安排信息点的顺序？(order)动作是什么时候发生的？(时态)(when)第一人称一封信建议政府采取措施舒缓交通拥挤的状况说理逻辑性一般现在时建议信篇章结构⑴说明建议的内容；⑵提出具体建议的原因；⑶指出采纳建议的益处。注意事项：语言要委婉、礼貌，顾及对方感受。适当运用模板DearBob,I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowto(引出主题).Hereareafewsuggestions.First,itisimportantto.Then,italsohelpsto.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideato.Youcanalso.(此三句不同的句式提出建议)Asto,Isuggest(有时根据需要具体到某一反面).Inaddition,(其他建议).I'msure(预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心).I'mlookingforwardto(表达愿望).Sincerelyyours,LiHuaDear____,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_____,andI’lltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(以我拙见),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_____.Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadytodiscussthismatterwithyoutofurtherdetails.Goodluckwithyou.Yours,XXX第二步：搜索相关词组或句型问题建议学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。学校与一所小学毗邻,对着大街standnextto…primary…face/befacedwith…themainstreet…There’saprimaryschoolnearourschool,andbothschoolsfacethemainstreet.Ourschoolstandsnexttoaprimaryschool,facedwith/facingthemainstreet.推荐句型：Therebe+并列句非谓语结构Standingnexttoaprimaryschool,ourschoolisfacedwith/facesthemainstreet.润色小建议Nexttoaprimaryschool将介词短语提前（全倒装）stands/lies/isourschool,facedwith/facingamainstreet.可将standnextto替换为高级词汇/短语belocatednextto(near/beside/by)border/adjoinvt.beadjacentto与…毗邻在…对面beoppositetoThetrafficisbusyduringtherushhours.•高峰期交通繁忙…..traffic….duringtherushhoursDuringtherushhours,therearesomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroadthat…Duringtherushhours,thereisalotoftraffic.so….that…with结构Withsomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroad,…润色小建议“高峰期”可意译:atpeaktime，alargecurrentofcarsandpeople“交通繁忙”可译为:trafficjamcongestion交通堵塞bechokeupwithbecrammedwith被…堵塞/塞满加之孩子小,家长接送,交通更拥挤send…to…,fetch….,非谓语结构….Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,makingthetrafficheavier.,which….加之孩子小，家长接送，交通更拥挤What’smore,…pickup….make….Tomakethingsworse/what’sworse,manyparentscomingtopickuptheirchildrenmakethestreetmorecrowded.Inaddition/Additionally,manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.What’smore,parentsoftenattendtheirkidstoschool,resultinginmoreserioustrafficjams.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.makingthesituationmoreserious.makingthetrafficheavier可意译为：so….that….=too…toThechildrenaresoyoungthatparentshavetosendthemtoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakes/makingthetrafficheavier.making可替换为：causing,leadingto,resultingin“send…fetch…”可替换为短语：pickup润色小建议学生过街在车辆中穿行危险threadone’sway，whendoingItisdangerousforthestudentstothreadtheirwayamongbusesandcarswhencrossingtheroad.固定句型Itis+adj.for…todo….1.Studentsareriskingtheirlivestothreadtheirwayamongcars.润色小建议2.Someareexposedtodangerwhencrossingtheocean/seaofcars.灵活运用其它的短语进行意译：适当增加形容词和副词：itisextremelydangerous，itisofgreat/tremendousdanger政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。•suggest/suggestion,takesteps/measures/actiontodo…suchasMysuggestionisthatthegovernmentshould…表语从句固定句型Itishightimethat…(虚拟语气)Itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuilding…Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakestepssuchasbuildinganoverpass.简单句1.Inordertoreleasethestressoftrafficproblems,…润色小建议2.Aimedatsolvingtheseproblems,thegovernmentshould…A.适当添加一些意思（过渡句）•Thegovernmentshouldpaymoreattentiontoitandtrytosolveit.B.语义的意译3.Seeingthesematters,neverwillIstopurgingourgovernmenttotakesomemeasures.Forthesakeofimprovingthequalityoftraffic,itissignificanttobuild…C.添加形容词和副词Istronglysuggest…,active/effectivemeasures第三步.连句成文但要注意：篇章的连贯性Nexttoaprimaryschoolstandsourschool,facingamainstreet.___________,it’scrammedwithcarsduringtherushhour._______________childrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.___________,it’sofgreatdangerforthestudentstogothroughthetraffic._________________,itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuildinganoverpass.A.AsaconsequenceB.AccordingtothephenomenonstatedaboveC.WhenitcomestotrafficjamsD.WhatmakesthingsworseisthatA.C.D.B.反面范例反面范例反面范例反面范例不推荐字体优秀作文范例1优点：考生能灵活地处理各个信息点，大量运用非谓语，介词短语，从句，连词等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显个性和语言功底。优秀作文范例2优点：考生的书面整洁，字体美观，运用therebe句型，介词短语，从句，非谓语，套用句式等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。优秀作文范例3优点：考生运用倒装句，so…that句式，精彩的表达以及虚拟语气等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。优秀作文范例4优点：该考生最大的特色是运用了大量的高级词汇等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显深厚的语言底蕴。优秀作文范例5优秀作文范例6Congestionn.阻塞,拥挤,充血适当运用模板Dear____,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_____,andI’lltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(依我拙见),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_____.Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadyt