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启航教育（全国学员专线）V-1启航考研英语名师讲义写作讲义编讲曹其军主讲介绍：★资深考研英语辅导专家，独创“曹氏英语教学法”，授课风格幽默风趣，轻松活泼，授课内容切中考试重点难点考点盲点，针对性强，素有“应试专家”的美誉。★领衔并主持“考研英语应试研究中心”和“考研英语试题模拟测试中心”。主编《考研英语重点、难点辅导》、《考研英语历年试题解析》、《考研英语阅读理解StepbyStep》、《考研英语写作StepbyStep》等30余部作品。启航考研英语名师讲义——写作讲义V-2第一节从高分范文看作文评价标准一、2012年考研英语（一）大作文题Directions:writeanessayof160-200wordsbasedonthefollowingdrawing.Inyouressayyoushould1)describethedrawingbriefly2)explainitsintendedmeaning,and3)giveyourcommentsYoushouldwriteneatlyonANSWERSHEET2.(20points)二、范文：Asisapparentlydrawninthiscartoon,inthemiddlestandtwopersonswithremarkablydifferentexpressions:onelooksdesperatewhereastheotheroptimistic,whenabottleofliquidisalmostspiltoutontheground.TheChinesecharactersabovecapturethetwodifferentattitudestowardthissameevent.Howimpressivethisdrawingseemstobeindepictingoneofthemostprevalentthemesthatattitudesmakeeverythinginourlife.(70/226)Aftercarefulreflectionandmediation,weexamineescometounderstandtheenlighteningdrawing.Icontendthatthisthought-provokingimageconveysoneprofoundlayerofimplicationconcerningattitudeoroptimism.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatlifeisbynomeansperfectandwhetherwefeeloptimisticornotdependsonwhatattitudeswetake.Whenconfrontedwithanadversesituation,someyouthsfeelinlowspiritsandfallintodepression.Others,onthecontrary,lookatthepositivesideofthesituationandremaincheerful.Asaconsequence,itisourattituderatherthanthesituationitselfthatdetermineshowwefeel.(100/226)Inmypersonalsense,themessageappliestoouryouthsespecially.Insucharat-racesociety,everyoneisboundtoencounterhardshipsanddifficulties.Inthissense,Ishouldkeepanoptimisticattitudetopullthroughanyhardship.Justasafamousfigureputsit,itisourattitudethathaschangedeverythinginourlife.(56/226words)启航教育（全国学员专线）V-3三、小结：四个评分“尺度”：1、长度：2、句子：3、结构：4、内容：第二节.图画作文要领一、TopicsReviewed:Whathasbeentestedsofar?2000:commercialfishing:consequence2001:loveislikeanoillamp:comment2002:cultures:nationalvsinternational:discussion2003:flowersinthegreenhouse:critique2004:endingisanewbeginning:enlightenment2005:“Footballmatch”oflookingaftertheold:critique2006:Worshipingidols:critique2007:Trustyourself(confidencebuilding):inspiration2008:Teamspirit(cooperation):cultivation2009:Internet&Interpersonalrelationship:choice2010:culturalblendinginthecontextofglobalization2011:EnvironmentalPollution&Protection2012:AttitudesinLife小结:1、主题倾向类型化:褒贬中(图画作者的目的性)PositiveSide:01/02/04/07/08/10NegativeSide:00/03/05/06/11NeutralDebate:09/122、主题词语的确定:名词(图画里外的文字信息)EnglishCue:02ChineseCue:othersNoCue:07启航考研英语名师讲义——写作讲义V-4二、主要的段落结构（三种）：描写图画+解释含义+表达观点1、图画中都有些什么?(Howtodescribeacartoon?)i.e.OnecloserexaminationofthecartoonrevealstousthatculturalexchangebetweentheEastandtheWestisofutmostsignificancetobothsides.Inthiscartoon,wecanfindanAmericanwomanwearingChinesecostume.She’ssmilingandlooksveryhappywiththosebeautifultraditionalcostumesfromChina.i.e.ThepastdecadehaswitnessedanincreasinglyinseparablerelationshipbetweenmanandInternet．Asisvividlydepictedinthepicture，withinastretchingspiderwebmanypeoplearesurfingonline．eithertoentertainthemselvesortomeetthework’sneeds．Actuallyon-linevisitinghasbecomearoutineactivityinourdailylife．However，itseemsratherironictopresentpeopleseparatedfromeachotherbythespiderwebwhentheyattempttocommunicate．2、结合现实，展开讨论(Whatdoesitmeantousingeneral?)i.e.Needlesstosay,withthedevelopmentofglobalization,culturalexchangeisnotonlyaninevitablepartbutalsoanecessitytobothsides.Ononehand,nosocietycanavoidtheprocessofgoingglobal,andbecomingonepartofthat“globalvillage”owingtothedevelopmentofcommunicationandtransportation.Therefore,Chinesecultureisquicklyspreadtootherpartsoftheworld,andappreciatedorabsorbedbyforeigncultures.Forexample,Chinesefoodisfoundandadmiredallovertheworldnow.Ontheotherhand,…i.e.ThemetaphoricandimpressiveportrayalhassubtlyrevealedthedualityoftherelationshipbetweenmanandIntemet．ThespiderwebundoubtedlyservesasasymbolofIntemet，bothconnectingpeopleandisolatingthemfromeachother．Ontheonehand，thereisnodenyingthatInternetiscurrentlyoneofthemostefficientmediausedforinterpersonalcommunication．Asacollegestudent，IgetonlineeverydaytodiscussnewswithotherpeopleonBBS，tostudyEnglishbyregisteringforwebcourses，tochatfreelythroughemailswithmyfriends．Beingaveteranon-lineshopper，Ifrequentlybargainwithsellerstopurchasebooksatmuchlowerprices．Butontheotherhand，agoodmanypeopleadmitthattheyaretoomuchaddictedtoInternettomaintainface-to-facecontactwiththeirfriendsandcolleagues．Cyber-livingresemblestheexperienceofseeingdisguisedpeoplebehindamask，maintainingdistancebetweenoneanother．Onceindulgedinthefictitiousworld，peoplefeelreluctanttoapproachothersandtoconcentrateonreallife．That’swhysomepeoplehavelosttheskillofdirectcontactandgetalienatedfromothers．3、作者观点，提出主张(HowdoIviewthisissue?)i.e.Inmyopinion,itisimportanttokeepalifegoalandrenewthisgoalifnecessary.Muchcanbedonetobuildarighttargetforone’slife.Forexample,akidcanbeledtothinkaboutwhattodointhefuture,andparentsandteacherscangettheminterestedinwhattheywanttodowhentheygrowup.Byandbyth