高考英语二轮复习-如何写申请信

【写作指导】申请信一般包括以下内容：1.介绍信息来源（有时可省略）；2.表明申请心意，即写信的目的；3.介绍个人简历并表明自己的优势；4.表达愿望并请求答复。【真题再现】假定你是李华，在校报英语专栏看到了学校“英语文化节”的一则招募启事。请阅读启事，并根据写作要点和写作要求写一封应征邮件。VolunteersWantedOurannualEnglishFestival,whichwillbeheldonJune15-17,2015,isnowlookingfor20studentvolunteerstoprovideserviceforTalentShow,SpeechContest,andEnglishDebate.Ifyouareinterested,pleasesen[e-mail].写作要点：1.表达写信意图；2.陈述应征目的；3.说明应征条件（性格、能力等）。写作要求：1.邮件词数不少于100；2.开头和结尾部分已写好，不计入总词数；3.可根据情况增加细节，使行文连贯；4.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yourstruly,LiHua(2015年陕西卷书面表达)【审题定调】本写作任务要求根据给出的招募启事写一封申请信，并给出了三条写作要点。人称以第一人称为主，时态主要用现在时。【参考范文】DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I'mwritingtoapplyforthepositionasastudentvolunteer.Ireallywanttoobtainthispreciousopportunitybecause,byofferingmyservice,Iwillbeabletoimprovemyorganisationalability,communicationskillsaswellasmyconfidenceinspeakingEnglishinpublic.Asanoutgoinggirl,Igetalongwellwithmyclassmates.Besides,IhavesuchagoodcommandofEnglishthatIhavebeenelectedasassistanttomyEnglishteacher.Ihavehelpedhersuccessfullyinseveralofmyclass'sEnglishactivities,whichhasbeenappreciatedbybothteachersandclassmates.IamsurethatIcanliveuptoyourexpectationsperfectly.Iwouldbegratefulifyoucouldgivemeyourkindconsideration.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yourstruly,LiHua【范文点评】本文完全完成了试题规定的任务。第一段表达写作意图，第二段陈述应征目的，第三段说明应征条件，覆盖了所有内容要点。最后一段还礼貌地表达了自己的愿望。文中用到的高级词汇有obtain,precious,organisational,aswellas,outgoing,haveagoodcommandof,appreciate,perfectly,liveuptoone'sexpectations等；用到的复杂语法结构有非谓语动词短语、such...that引导的结果状语从句、非限制性定语从句、宾语从句、条件状语从句等。【学生习作】DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I'mwritingtoapplyforthepositionasastudentvolunteer.TherearemanyreasonswhyIputinfortheposition.Tobeginwith,Icanenablemyselftogainsomevaluablelifeexperienceaswellasworkskills.Secondly,Ithinkmakingfriendswithpeopleasavolunteerwouldbeawonderfulthing.Besides,volunteeringwouldprovidemewithagoodopportunitytocontributetoourschoolandbreakdownbarriersofunderstandingsothatIcanbuildself-confidencethroughit.IthinkI'mqualifiedfortheposition.I'mkindbynature,easy-goingandalwaysreadytohelpothers.Ihaveagoodcharacter,beingconfidentandindependentinlife.What'smore,EnglishismyfavoritesubjectandI'vewonseveralprizesinEnglishcontests,whichwillhelpmemakeyourgoodchoice.I'dappreciateitifyoucouldgivemetheopportunitytoprovemyself.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yourstruly,LiHua【点评】该习作完成了试题规定的任务:覆盖了所有内容要点，应用了较多的复杂语法结构(定语从句、宾语从句、状语从句、非谓语动词等)和高级词汇(putinfor,enable,contributeto,barrier,bynature,appreciate等)，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分(tobeginwith,secondly,besides,what‘smore等)。存在的问题主要有：一、部分表达不够精炼(如Icanenablemyselfto)或语义重复(如第三段第二和第三句)；二、部分内容缺乏逻辑性(如第二段末句中的breakdownbarriersofunderstandingsothatIcanbuildself-confidencethroughit)；三、部分内容表义不清(如whichwillhelpmemakeyourgoodchoice)。此外，虽然本题写作要求中有关词数的部分只有下限没有上限，但也不宜写太多内容(本文148词)。否则一方面会占用过多的考试时间，另一方面也会增加出错的机率。【改后稿】DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I'mwritingtoapplyforthepositionasastudentvolunteer.TherearemanyreasonswhyIputinfortheposition.Tobeginwith,Icangainsomevaluablelifeexperienceaswellasworkskills.Secondly,Ithinkmakingfriendswithpeopleasavolunteerwouldbeawonderfulthing.Besides,volunteeringwouldprovidemewithagoodopportunitytocontributetoourschoolandbuildself-confidence.IthinkI'mqualifiedfortheposition.I'mkindbynature,easy-goingandalwaysreadytohelpothers.What'smore,EnglishismyfavoritesubjectandI'vewonseveralprizesinEnglishcontests,whichwillhelpmeofferabetterservice.I'dappreciateitifyoucouldgivemetheopportunitytoprovemyself.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yourstruly,LiHua【实战演练】下面是另一位同学的习作，请根据点评中指出的问题对它进行修改。DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I'vereadyourannouncementintheschoolnewspaper.Ireallywanttoparticipatethisactivity.I'dliketobecomeavolunteerfortheEnglishFestival.Withthisopportunity,Icanworkoutmyselfandimprovemycommunicationskills.Now,Iwanttotellyousomethingaboutmyself.I'maresponsiblestudentandalwaysobeymywords.Beingaactiveyoungperson,Igetonwellwithmyclassmates.AllofthemthinkI'dbeabletodothisworkwell.I'malsogoodatEnglish,especiallyspokenEnglish.I'lltrymybesttodothisworkwell.Pleasegivethischancetoexperience.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yourstruly,LiHua【点评】该习作基本完成了试题规定的任务。存在的问题有：一、没有安排好内容的主次，比如写信目的着墨过多而应征目的则一笔带过；二、语法结构单调，高级词汇有限；三、文中有一些词汇和语法方面的错误，如participatethisactivity,workoutmyself,obeymywords,aactiveyoungperson,givethischancetoexperience。【参考答案】DearMsChen,I'mLiHua,astudentfromClass2,Grade3.I'vereadyourannouncementintheschoolnewspaper.I'dliketobecomeavolunteerfortheEnglishFestival.Withthisopportunity,Icanimprovemycommunicationskills,increasemyconfidenceandmakemorefriends.Now,Iwanttotellyousomethingaboutmyself.I'maresponsiblestudentandalwayskeepmyword.Beinganactiveyoungperson,Igetonwellwithmyclassmates,allofwhomthinkI'dbeabletodothisworkwell.Moreover,I'mfluentinEnglish,especiallyspokenEnglish.Giventhechance,Iwillsparenoeffortstocompletemytaskperf