2017年6月浙江省高考英语读后续写试题分析及范例点评-教育文档

2017年6月浙江省高考英语读后续写试题分析及范例点评与2016年10月浙江省高考英语一样，2017年6月浙江省高考英语科目写作第二节仍然是读后续写，要求考生阅读一篇短文，根据所给情节续写，使短文与续写部分合成一个完整的故事。[题型分析]本次读后续写题依然是将对考生的输入（input）与输出（output）能力的考查结合在一起。关于这两者能力的考查和读后续写文体特征等，笔者曾于《作文新天地?高中》2017年第3期的《浙江省新高考英语读后续写试题分析及范例点评》一文中做过介绍，此处不再赘述。但是，虽然同属记叙文，本次考试所给短文的故事线索与逻辑比2016年10月的那篇复杂（具体见本文“试题要点分析”和“答题建议”），对考生的输入考查要求较高。可以说，本次读后续写交际任务是否能很好完成，很大程度上取决于考生对所给短文阅读理解任务完成的情况。从这一点来看，读后续写教学要见成效，阅读教学上所花的功夫绝对不能少。[题目要求]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright，warmJulyafternoon，MacHollan，aprimaryschoolteacher，wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair，buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon，andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）alongalone，hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man，that’sabigdog！”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside，hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall，butawolf，quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars，hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal，andtoMac’srelief，itfellback，shakingitshead.Butaminutelater，itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike，tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime，andagain，itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill，he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment，PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater，theyspottedwhatthey，too，assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser，theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast，justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关?I词语。[试题要点分析][答题建议][习作点评][学生习作1]Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Man，comeinquickly！”shoutedPaul.Hearingthevoice，Macgotoffthebicycleandjumpedintothecarwithouthesitation.BeforeMaccouldsayaword，thecarrushedatanincrediblyhighspeed.Lookingbackthroughthewindow，hefoundthewolfgraduallydisappearedinthedarknight.Afterarrivingatasafeplace，MacexplainedwhathadjusthappenedandthankedPaulandBecky.Thenhemadeacalltoinformhisfriendsofhislocation.Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived.WhentoldaboutMac’sfrighteningexperience，thetwowereastonishedwiththeirmouthswidelyopen，fortheydidn’tmeetanyanimalontheirway.Worriedaboutcomingacrossthewolfagain，PaulofferedtodrivethemtoAlaskawholeheartedly.Withtwobicyclesplacedinthebackofthecar，theysetoffinthebrightsunrise.Staringatthebreath-takingsceneryalongtheway，Macsaidtohimself，“ButIneverwanttoshowmyfamilytothisplace！”点评1[学生习作2]Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Atthatmoment，Macjumpedtothetopofthecar.Fortunately，hesucceeded.Then，realizingwhatishappening，Pauldrovethecarawayquickly.Afterafewminutes，thecarstoppedagain.MacjumpeddownandthankedPaulandBecky.“Itseemedthatyouhadanexcitingexperience！”Paulsaid，laughing.“Oh，yes！ItwasreallyexcitingandIwouldbecaughtbythewolfwithoutyourhelp.”Macreplied，“Imustwaitformyfriends！Thankyouagain.”Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived.NoticingthatMacwasstandingalonewithouthisbicycle，theyaskedMacwhathadhappened.Mactoldthemthewolf，thehelpofPaulandBecky’s.“Wow，itwasamazing！”Theyshouted.“ButyouwillneverknowwhatIfeltatthattime.Myheartjumpedwidely.”Macsaid.“Don’tworry，Ithinkitmustbeanunforgettablepedalingexperienceforyou.Youshouldvalueit.”OneofMac’sfriendstriedtocomforthim.“Butnow，howcanIgohomewithoutmybicycle？”点评2Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulshoutedtoMac.“Comeon！”Withouthesitation，Macjumpedintothecarleavinghisbicycle.Thewolflookedangry.Thewolfhithisbicyclewithoutmercy.Wanderingforawhile，thewolfleft.Afteralongtimetocalmdown，Macbegantosaidinaweakvoice，“IjustthoughtIwouldneverseemywifeandmylovelydaughtersagain.Itisyourkindnessthatsavedmylife！”Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theywereshockedatwhattheyhaveseen，abrokenbicycleandMacwasworn-out.Theyasked，“Heybrother！What’swrongwithyou？”Macexplainedwhathappenedtohimandintroducedhisnewfriendstothem.Macsaid，“Withouttheirhelp，Iwon’tsurvive.Andwhathappenedtomerevealedthatweshouldgiveotherahandwhentheyareinneed.”Whatadangerouspedaling！点评3[学生习作4]Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macaskthemforhelp，hesaidthewolfchasedhimlongtime.Hewasverytired.Atthatmoment，thewolfarrived.Itwasverybig.PaulandBeckyclimbedthecartofoundsomethingtomakeitgoback.Theyfoundtwochairandawood.Sotheyslowlycaughtthewolfandthenusethewoodtomakeitdied.Theywereverytiredandafraid.Butfinallythewonthe“war”Theyfelttheywereluckydogs，Theyalldidn’tdie.Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived.Mactoldhisfriendswhathappenedafewminutesago.TheywereverysurprisedandaskedMachewasok？MactoldthemheisokandextendedhisgratitudetoPaulandBecky.Becausetheyhelpedhim，hewaslive.Andtheywentbackhome.Macdecidedtoaskhisparentsandwifewhathappened.Hethoughtitwassurprised.Itwasaamuseingexpe