2019-2020学年高中英语 Unit 2 Poems Section Ⅴ Writing教学案

-1-SectionⅤWriting诗歌改写技法指导本单元的写作任务是诗歌改写。改写是用不同形式表达同一内容，使之成为与原文意思相同而表达方式、文体不同的作品。改写可以变换文章的人称、顺序，可以改变原文的体裁、结构，也可以灵活运用自己的语言，尽可能用多种方法来表达、替换原文的内容。一、基本框架具体写作步骤一般是“三段式”，具体为：第一段：简要介绍诗歌的内容。第二段：详细论述诗歌的主题。第三段：总结照应上文。二、注意事项1．改写必须忠实于原作的中心思想。这就要求想象和联想要符合原作精神，不能任意想象，谈得漫无边际。2．改写要注意创作性。改写是再创作的过程。作者并不是单纯地翻译诗歌，不能仅就诗歌的内容进行简单的扩充，而是要进一步展开种种想象，使人物形象有血有肉，栩栩如生，使故事情节更加完整生动。3．改写时可以插入丰富的想象，将原来文中没有的东西，如人物的表情、动作、语言、神态和行为等都加进去，在不改变原作主题思想的基础上，写成一篇完整的文章。总之，诗歌改写应该把握原文的主题，结合自己的理解，用通俗易懂的语言进行创作，加入自己的语言，使文章符合主题，流畅易懂。黄金表达1．开头①Thepoemiswrittenbythefamouspoet...②Itisrhymedattheendofeveryline.2．中间①AsfarasIamconcerned,thispoemis...②Comparedwithotherpoems,...③Inthepoem,wecansense/find...④Thepoetexpressedhis/herfeelingof...inthepoem.⑤Thispoemhassuccessfullytouchedtheheartsofthereaders.⑥Inmyopinion,weshouldlearn...⑦Therefore,wecanfindthat...-2-⑧IfIwerethepoet,Iwould...⑨Wecanappreciatetheimageof...throughthepieceofpoem.3．结尾①Inconclusion,...②Throughthepoem,...[典题演练]请将下面的英文短诗，以“ReadingIsValuable”为题改写成为一篇短文。Ilovereadingbooks，Whicharemybestfriends.Theyareanimportantbridgetoanewworld，Alwayshelpingmeavoidgettingpuzzled.Theyremovealltroublesjustlikeasharpknife，Andbringhappinesstomeindailylife.Asformeabookistheangel'ssweetestkiss.注意：1.词数100左右；2．展开合理想象，突出主题，但不得照抄短诗原文；3．必须结合短诗的内容，但不能写成诗歌的形式。ReadingIsValuable谋篇布局1．体裁：说明文2．话题：诗歌改写3．时态：一般现在时4．人称：第一人称为主5．结构第一段：简单介绍这首诗的主要意思第二段：详细说明阅读的重要性第三段：总结全文，表达读书的益处联想词汇-3-1．以多种灵活的方式________________答案：inmanyflexibleways2．在解决问题方面有帮助__________________答案：behelpfulinproblem­solving3．每当我感到沮丧时__________________答案：wheneverIfeeldepressed4．不但……而且……__________________答案：notonly...butalso...连词成句1．通过阅读，我可以了解作者在书中以多种灵活的方式表达出来的思想和情感。Icanknowthewriter'sthoughtsandfeelingsbyreadingwhatthewriterexpressesinbooksinmanyflexibleways.→Bymeansofreading,Icangettoknowthewriter'sthoughtsandfeelingsthatareconveyedinbooksinmanyflexibleways.(升级句)2．除此之外，阅读能帮我解决问题并摆脱困境。Besides,readingcanhelpmesolvetheproblemsandhelpmeout.→Besides,notonlyisreadinghelpfulinproblem­solvingbutitalsogetsmeoutoftrouble.(升级句)3．每当我感到沮丧时，阅读帮助我把消极情绪转化为快乐和勇气。WhenIfeelsad,readinghelpsmeturnpassivemoodsintopleasureandcourage.→WheneverIfeeldepressed,readinghelpsmetransformnegativemoodsintojoyandcourage.(升级句)连句成篇ReadingIsValuableThepoemtellsusreadingisvaluableinmanyways.Forme,itbenefitsmeinthefollowingways.Firstly,bymeansofreading,Icangettoknowthewriter'sthoughtsandfeelingsthatareconveyedinbooksinmanyflexibleways.Secondly,Icanlearnaboutthewritingstylesofmanyforeignwritersbyreadingsometranslationsandevengettoknowtheappropriatewordsandactionindifferentsituationsbyreading.Besides,notonlyisreadinghelpfulinproblem­solvingbutitalsogetsmeoutoftrouble.WheneverIfeeldepressed,readinghelpsmetransformnegativemoodsintojoyandcourage.Allinall,Ihavebenefitedalotfromreading,whichmakesmeabetterperson.IthinkbooksarethebestgiftsthatGodhasgivenme.-4-[跟踪训练]请根据下面的英文短诗，展开适当的想象，写一篇短文，标题为：MyTeacherMrMoore。MyTeacherMrMooreThere'sateacherMrMoore.Whoislovelyandthirty­four.Alwaysencouragingustotry.Heleadsustoaworldof“why”．Wealladmirehimmoreandmore.注意：1.不得照抄短诗原文；2．必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开；3．必须突出短诗的主题，结构完整，语言连贯；4．短文不能写出诗歌形式；5．词数100左右。[精彩范文]-5-[名师点评]①thereisnootherteacherwhoimpressesmemorethan...,nomorethan结构与therebe句式结合使用，同时还镶嵌了一个定语从句，使得句式复杂而高级，同时表达了最高级含义。②Comparedwithotherteachers,Mr...，过去分词短语作状语，进一步说明老师的突出之处。③makehisclasseslivelyandinteresting，形容词作宾补，说明老师课堂的特点。④notonly...butalso连接并列谓语，用得恰如其分。⑤wheneverheputsforwardquestions句中使用了whenever引导的让步状语从句。⑥感叹句的运用表达了对老师的热爱与钦佩之情。[总评]本文是一篇人物介绍。文章重点讲述了老师出色的教学方法对同学们帮助良多，从而获得学生的尊敬和喜爱。文章总体结构清晰，全文三段式行文，采用总分总结构，长短句结合，-6-句式丰富多变，语言准确、地道、流畅，很多短语和高级句式的使用令文章颇显档次，语言功力深厚，是上佳之作。课外拓展阅读——中国优秀传统文化专题练阅读下面短文，在空白处填入1个适当的单词或括号内单词的正确形式。ClassicalChinesepoetryistraditionalChinesepoetry__1__(write)inClassicalChineseandtypifiedbycertaintraditionalforms.Many__2__(poem)comefromparticularhistoricalperiods,suchasthepoetryoftheTangDynastyandtheverseoftheSongDynasty.__3__(it)existencedatesbacktoatleastasearlyasthepublicationoftheClassicofPoetryorShijing.Thereare__4__(vary)combinationsofformsandgenres,mostof__5__aroseattheendoftheTangDynasty.DevelopmentofClassicalChinesepoetry__6__(active)continueduptotheyearof1919,whentheMayFourthMovement__7__(take)place,andisstillpopulareventoday.ClassicalChinesepoetrycreatedduringthis2,500－yearperiodhasbeendevelopingcontinuously,__8__(produce)agreatdealofdiversity—classifiedbybothmajorhistoricalperiods__9__dynasticperiods.OneofthekeyaspectsofClassicalChinesepoetryisitscloseinterrelationshipwithotherformsofChineseart,suchasChinesepaintingandChinesecalligraphy(书法).ClassicalChinesepoetryhasproventohaveastronginfluence__10__poetryworldwide.1．________2.________3.________4.________5．________6.________7.________8.________9．________10.________答案：1.written2.poems3.Its4.various5.which6．actively7.took8.producing9.and10.on